A brief experrrriment....
SCHOOL A:
"We are very proud of the ____ community, which nurtures scholarship, leadership, and mutual respect. Our students pursue intellectual and professional passions during their time here and go on to achieve great things. We look forward to your joining us and becoming a part of our community."
SCHOOL B:
"An education at ____ is rigorous and has the highest reputation among prestigious graduate schools and employers. At the same time, _____ is a remarkably inclusive and collaborative environment where students and faculty share ideas with a commitment to bringing out the best in each individual. We look forward to all that you have to bring to that dialogue."
Which one sounds like a better place to attend?
"We are very proud of the ____ community, which nurtures scholarship, leadership, and mutual respect. Our students pursue intellectual and professional passions during their time here and go on to achieve great things. We look forward to your joining us and becoming a part of our community."
SCHOOL B:
"An education at ____ is rigorous and has the highest reputation among prestigious graduate schools and employers. At the same time, _____ is a remarkably inclusive and collaborative environment where students and faculty share ideas with a commitment to bringing out the best in each individual. We look forward to all that you have to bring to that dialogue."
Which one sounds like a better place to attend?