Rock My World (Chapter 5)
Pairing: JongKey
Rating: R / Soft NC-17
Genre: Rock musical!AU, Romance & Drama
Disclaimer: I wish.
Summary: When Onew leaves the Korean production of RoA, Jonghyun is promoted to lead singer in his place and a new actor is also hired. Sparks fly, drama ensues - Rock & Roll.
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Rating: R / Soft NC-17
Genre: Rock musical!AU, Romance & Drama
Disclaimer: I wish.
Summary: When Onew leaves the Korean production of RoA, Jonghyun is promoted to lead singer in his place and a new actor is also hired. Sparks fly, drama ensues - Rock & Roll.
( Read more... )
There were so many things I loved in this chapter... I'll try to point out at least some of them since there were so many:
The whole beginning, in which Key phones Jjong. The "The other boy hummed in agreement and Jonghyun thought that waking up to such a sound was something he could definitely get used to." line. It's just so beautiful.
Then, the way you described Key in Jjong's eyes. Also, this:
“Would you... would you be mine?”
“I thought I was already,” he answered, smirking now.
This part at the observatory is so soothing and beautiful...
And, also, I love their characters in here- Jonghyun is so caring and emotional and Key is not a diva type. I mean- not such diva. He doesn't tease, it's so easy to see that he loved Jonghyun so much. There's no smirks and stupid talking. I mean, there are some smirks, but not of this kind. It's not like he's playing hard to get. He needs Jonghyun as much as he needs him. And that's so beautiful.
The description of their first time is a win.
"Key crossed his arms over Jonghyun’s chest and settled there, having no intention of moving away.">> your descriptions are so visual, I can picture it all so easily. And, it's probably one of not so many fics where Key's actually willing to stay with Jjong- and is not like 'don't you dare to kiss me before cleaning your teeth' *I love this side of Key too, but I'm glad you didn't make him like this in your story*.
But, of course, the idyll couldn't last forever which was proved by Jinki's words... and the change in Jjong's performances. I just can't get rid of the feeling that it will get even worse...
But, again- the last part, in which Jjong tells Kibum about all that happened and then says “It’s not fair” and sheds a tear, and then Kibum hugs him- this is just too beautiful for words.
“They held onto each other all through the night and for the first since Jonghyun had met Key, he let himself wonder if the boy would stay by his side forever.
And this is the painfully realistic part. Which makes me sure I won't get much sleep this night.
This time, as you see, there was no capslock attack or even emoticons. That's because I'm still too spellbound to what you wrote here.
I'm loving this story so much.
But I guess you can see it.
And, believe me, if it wasn't this hour, this comment would be even longer.
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I'm glad you like their characters. I know Jonghyun isn't often portrayed as caring, but I think it suits him (beneath all the cockiness! hihi). I also don't see Key as a Diva, per say. Sure, he can be a bit flamboyant but he's really down to earth and caring, him too. He's not called umma for nothing ;). Don't get me wrong, I love a bit of diva!Key but I didn't want to go for that here.
I am so relieved to hear that you liked the not-really-descriptive first time. I didn't want it to seem rushed or to disappoint :/ because I sort of can't really write full out smut. Oh well.
Morning-afters are fun to write. You get to make it all lovy-dovy and cute. B'awww :)
And thank you for quoting that last line - I found a typo (grrrr). Whoops. Thanks to you I fixed it :)
Your comment really made me smile :) :)
I don't think I've thanked you enough for your kind words, so I'll say/type it again: thanks a million!!!
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As for me, this kind of behaviour suits Jonghyun perfectly, it's like my perfect Jjong.
I actually think that this 'diva' side of Key is a part of his stage image, and that he's not always like this. He's here to entertain the fans, right? I believe that deep inside he's a very sensitive and emotional person as well as Jjong, just seeing him crying on their concerts is enough for me to say this.
So I'm so happy you made Key such human here ;____;
There are some fics where it's like all in PG or so, aaaaaaand then, after, let's say, 15 chapters there appears PURE SMUT. And to be honest I totally hate it -.- Because it ruins the rhytm of the whole story. Sometimes it's better to leave things for the reader's imagination.
Buuuuuut in your fic it wouldn't ruin anything, that's for sure. Still though I totally enjoy JongKey smut I think that this part was just breath-taking and beatiful mostly because of lack of description.
Aww. Hope you get my mumblings, sorry, I haven't slept well x"D
A typo? :O Where? :O
Oh, lol. Now I see XDD Haha it's funny, because I quoted it in different intention XD
It was supposed to make you smile, I'm glad it did!! ^O^ 'Cause you totally deserved it!!
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I'm going to post the next chapter soon (in 2 - 3 days, most likely). I hope it lives up to your expectations ^^
I remember Taemin saying, in an episode of Yunhanam, that Key is a soft and caring person. I believe that too, but I still like how fierce he is on stage ^^. I just love Key, I guess, hihi :D. I'm really glad you like his character here!
I made the "smut" non-descript because I've never written graphic smut. I tried to, but it turned into this, lol. Though I have an idea for real smut later on so we'll see if I can actually write it out this time xD.
Thank you sooooooo much again and again! Your comments mean so much ^^ and I hope you like the next chapter!! Thank you thank you thank you ~
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Because I just like re-read the whole thing.
I'm pretty sure that when you post the last chapter, I'll know the whole rest by heart.
Seriously, who doesn't love Key?
OK, my sister, she hates him, but let's just exclude her, 'k? >O<
Hmmm real smut, you say?? Well, I can only wait :D
Once again sorry for spamming you BUT I JUST CAN'T GET ENOUGH OF THIS STORY AND I NEED TO LET YOU KNOW THIS.
Duh.
I can't wait for the next chapter then *_______*
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Wow, your sister doesn't like Key? Lol, that's pretty rare xD.
I'm so flattered that you took such an interest in the story :). But omg don't learn it by heart D: this whole fic is like, going to be over 30 000 words!! Lol
THANK YOU SO MUCH. I say that a lot but it's because I really really mean it!
The next chapter will be up soon soon soon! ~
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