100 Fantasies Challenge: #102 1stFic:Tranquillity For A Warrior’s Heart

[jungle_ride]

Title: Tranquillity For A Warrior’s Heart
Characters/Pairings: Arthur/Gwen
Rating/Warnings: PG-13
Spoilers: There’s a mention of episode 10 but other than that it’s pretty general.
Disclaimer: I don’t own anything although I wish to god I owned Arthur, wouldn’t that be fun ;-)
Summary: Arthur’s thoughts as he lies with Gwen in the early hours of the

Comments

[misseri44]

This was so good!! I really liked the way you described the scenes in the first part of the pic, and Arthur and Gwen are so lovely together, you shouldn't feel nervous about putting your fic here, it's amazing

[jungle_ride]

*blushes* thanks ever so much, i'm really glad you enjoyed it. xxx

[tigger_01]

Awwww. I did enjoy it, it was beautifully described, and I loved seeing a little bit more into Arthur.
However, I do want to let you know that at times it felt a little bit... overdone, like there was too much description for the reader to handle in a sentence or paragraph.

If this was your first fic - which the comment above me seems to imply - then I certainly can't blame you, because I know I am still very guilty of the same problem. I just thought I'd let you know - constructive concrit?

[jungle_ride]

I'm glad you enjoyed it :D I think inner Arthur is a really interesting place to explore there's all the cokyness that he let's show but then there is also his heart and soul.

Yes it was the first fanfic i've written and also the first love scene i've ever written in my whole life lol

no i totally get your point, sometimes i have many thoughts in my head and i just jot them all down and maybe i could edit it a little more to improve it. I shall keep that in mind for the next one. Constructive critic's are fine it can only help, so no worries i'm NOT siting here sobbing into a tissue as your comments have crushed me or cursing at you lol
all the best
xxxx

[binglejells]

This was lovely, quite light hearted but with some deeper thoughts weaved in quite skillfully.

I'll ship anyone in this fandom and I definitely think ther eis more room for Arthur/Gwen! It was really nice to read soemthing that was just about them in a moment.

Congrats on your first fic!

[jungle_ride]

Thank you so much for the kind words :D I'm really happy you enjoyed it. I tried to keep it light and playful yet deep too as i just think that's how they'd be with one another.

xxx

[jungle_ride]

sorry you felt that they were cheesy but thank you for your honesty. I'm glad that other than that point you enjoyed it.
xx

[sunnytyler001]

Beautiful!!!

[jungle_ride]

*grins* thank you, i'm glad you thought so
xxx