Mod Murder Mayhem- A Séance at Spade House

[junebug_13]

Hi, everyone! One of Boolprop's Halloween events is Mod Murder Mayhem, in which three mods of your choosing meet grisly fates. I built a haunted house, but it won't just be the mods getting snuffed tonight.

As they say, one good scare ought to do you some good...

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[kyra_master701]

here are my as-I-read comments, for your viewing pleasure:

You're doing the '"Blahblahblah." said So-and-so.' thing again.

The place I used to live doesn't have a back door. :|

Heather? Chippy. Is. Dead. And *you* are suicidal.

NOOOO DON'T GO UPSTAIRS HAVE YOU *NEVER* WATCHED A SINGLE HORROR MOVIE

awww~

ack ghostie!Juney don't kill Rosanna kthx

... you're not ghostie!Juney, then? :(

'"Fool! You valor will be the end of you!"
"What's valor?" Lewis asked, terrified.'
bwahaha ily

THAT WASN'T VERY NICE EVIL SPIRIT THING >:(

[junebug_13]

ooooo~
OMG srsly? DDDDD: I swear I tried to watch that. Where?
Well, if the front door sticks and you're being pursued by a homicidal restless spirit, I guess you're screwed. :P
"LOL NO GAIZ IT'S A JOKE COME PLAY WITH US 8D"
THEY'RE JUST SO CULTURALLY ILLITERATE
Haha, yes.
No, no ghostie!Juney. Merely spectral possession, nothing to be afraid of.
I'm funny at two AM, oddly enough. xD
NO, NO IT WAS NOT~

[kyra_master701]

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[junebug_13]

Maybe it's just my allergies, but I'm so fucking confused and grammar hates me now. I thought you could end sentences with fullstops with proper names following, or is it always commas unless the sentence ends with an exclamation point or a question mark? That's the trend I noticed in all the examples. I did some Googling and couldn't anything specifically addressing that. I know if the following sentence begins with he/she you use a comma, but with proper nouns like names apparently I'm doing it wrong.
I'm sorry, I probably sound like a total dumbass, but I really want to get this right. :(

[eccentric_story]

Yeah, it's always a comma unless there's an exclamation or question mark.
For instance, "Rosanna said." isn't a full sentence, and that's what it looks like you're trying to do there, and adding a comma for her dialogue connects the whole thing together. idk if I'm making any sense here, but yeah.

(and this is still Kyra, just I'm on my writing LJ right now)

[junebug_13]

idk what happened, but it all just clicked in my mind. I'm off to edit the whole damn thing now. Thank you. :)