"You know, I never thanked you."

[judexseven]

I am really proud of this fic. :)

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Title: "Don't Be Afraid To Be Free"
Pairing/Character: Chuck/Sarah
Rating: R...?
Summary: A dark night, a dangerous escape, and a quiet hotel room.
Disclaimer: Unfortunately, I don't own them, or else this would be next week's episode, heh.
Notes: For broken__records, my Muse, who I know has been waiting for me to write

Comments

[judexseven]

I have to say, there are days when I look at my writing and think, "I'm not ever going to be good enough." But comments like this - especially from virtual strangers - make me smile and feel like I might actually have some semblance of talent. Thank you so much for taking time to actually review this - it means more to me than you can know.

Now, off the saptastic stuff, heh. I absolutely believe that Chuck sees in Sarah a future he can't have, and that whole inner-monologue-esque paragraph just came to me and seemed so him I had to include it. Especially in a moment like that, Chuck would be so much more in love with her than he ever expected, I wouldn't be surprised if he paused to think about it.

I felt like the line about Sarah falling in love with him was extremely clichéd, but at the same time - and again - I feel like Chuck would actually believe that. He doesn't really realize he's lovable and what some girls might really want, especially someone as closed off and secretive as Sarah. So it stayed, despite my brain yelling, "CLICHÉ! DO NOT WANT!" LOL.

Ironically, the line about Sarah's lips came because I've got a think for slightly-scruffy Zach Levi, so I wanted to insinuate that - especially since they're on the run with nothing from home - he was just a little unkempt and therefore even more hot than usual, heh. And the hickey? Well, what can I say, I'm still a horny teenager inside, I guess.

I feel like the ending is going to stay the way it is for two reasons. (A) I still feel like this story coming out as well as it did was a fluke, and that if I tried to continue, I'd lose my grasp; and (B) I'll never, ever be able to stop if I start, and I really hate writing epic fics. Call me lazy, but it's the truth! So believe what you'd like, (it's Casey on the phone, it's Ellie, it's Beckman, hell, it could be Morgan,) because whatever you come up with would be just as good - if not miles better - than what I did!

Again, thank you so much for this. And please forgive the novel of a reply I'm leaving you. But really, it's much appreciated and very, very sweet of you.

[iloveyoursoul]

First (again) I just want to say that when I read through your fanfic, I thought that some times, I think my writing is actually 'alright' (i usually believe i'm never going to be good enough, just like you) but in rare occasions I'll think it's tolerable, but then I read this fic of yours, so simple and so eloquent at the same time, and it just made me think of how I'm never going to be what I want to. Funny how coincidental minds can be, isn't it, heh?

The pause Chuck did here, I can see him doing it on the show, too. Just being so emotionally overwhelmed, so three seconds after everything actually happening around & beneath him... definitely in essence with and of the character.

And I got a thing for Zach all-time, almost all-looks, TEEHEE. He's just... almost the perfect guy. I can't help it, I've always fallen for the half-handsome clowns in the group, the half-geeks. And he can SING too. Oh dear.

I can understand why you choose not to write a continuation of this, I really do. Some times the mind, and fantasy, just trumps reality (in this case; whatever you would have chosen to write) and, endings with hope are the best kind of endings out of them all:

October knew, of course, that the action of turning a page, of ending a chapter or of shutting a book, did not end a tale. Having admitted that, he would also avow that happy endings were never difficult to find: " It is simply a matter of finding a sunny garden, where the light is golden and the grass is soft; somewhere to rest, to stop reading and to be content."

Just, once again, thank you for this ♥

[judexseven]

♥ I've decided to give a part two a chance - on my other computer, not connected to the internet this way I'm not tempted to post a half-assed story. If it works, it works. If not, no harm, no foul. Still a good exercise!

And I got a thing for Zach all-time, almost all-looks, TEEHEE. He's just... almost the perfect guy. I can't help it, I've always fallen for the half-handsome clowns in the group, the half-geeks. And he can SING too. Oh dear.

AMEN. To just everything you said there. :)