IT'S NOT A MARY SUE, I SWEAR!
It's written in first person so you, the reader, can imagine yourself in the story!
I found this *ahem* gem a bit ago... it got a lot of attention on the comm mostly because the comm is strictly no-fics-allowed, but also because it is fucking terrible and is also short enough to be absorbed before you clot up your keyboard with vomit.
FORTHWITH, the warnings!
Main Characters: Tora Alice Nine and YOU
RATE: 18+ (clear description of love scene will be included)
*The character “I” doesn’t mean ME. So you can think that “I” is YOU, who read this.
Well, be still my beating heart! HERE WE GOOO
I quickly pack my bag, put everything inside it. All the stationeries and also my cell phone, I put them inside my brown leather bag. I open the flip and can see the wallpaper, it’s me and the man I really love. Yes, I’ve got a boyfriend.
OMG MY HEARTIEST CONGRATULATIONS
He’s....a unique person. The first time we met, he wasn’t so friendly to me, he only said “hi” when our friend introduced us in that livehouse.
It is I, the Backstory Fairy! Anyway, gotta go. Nothing to see here.
Now that we’ve been dating for around two years, his career’s been getting bigger and bigger with his band. He’s the guitarist of a band in Japan. This makes us keep our relationship secret, he said he didn’t want anyone to stalk me or mock me, didn’t want anyone to do any harm to me.
“I’m going now!” I said to my co-workers.
“Are you going home or to your boyfriend’s place?” one of them asked me. Well, they just know that I’m in a relationship, they don’t know what job my boyfriend has.
“Yes!” I answered happily.
GET IT BECAUSE HER BOYFRIEND LIVES WITH HER!
“Hope he’s getting better,” she said.
Yes, he’s sick. It’s a serious sickness. I’m very worried.
Angst coming in, angst you are now cleared for landing on runway 7...
It started several months ago when he got diagnosed for a quite rare disease, it has something to do with his nerve system. The last time, he could not move his left arm.
Okay, now it's just obnoxiously non-AU. For those of you just tuning in, Tora has a herniated disc in his neck that caused A9 to have to reschedule three lives last year because he couldn't move his arm (same problem Yoshiki has iirc). But it's NOT A MARY SUE FIC!
I took a bus to go to his place. He’s been in a bedrest for three days now. Doctor suggested him to. At first he didn’t want to because he said he had something to do with his music, he was composing one for the new single.
Shouldn't a supportive girlfriend have more than vague ideas regarding her boyfriend's severe medical issues or what he does with his time? Just a thought. Also, what the fuck is "a bedrest?"
DING DONG!
I pressed the doorbell. It took about a minute for me to have the door opened. Yeah, he’s not well and it’s been a bit hard for him to move fast.
“Hi,” he greeted me with his greatest smile. “Why didn’t you use your key? You have it, don’t you?”
“Hi Tora..I left it at home, hahaha,” I replied to him.
So go back and get it. He's on bed rest and you made him get up to let your dumb ass in? Bitch.
He lets me in, I ask him to get back to the living room and rest, I’ll take care of everything.
“Thanks,” he told me once he was seated.
“For what?” I asked him while putting all the foods I bought into his fridge.
Angst, please taxi to Gate B12...
“For being here, always. I’m a burden,” he seemed sad.
...thank you!
I quickly put everything to the place. I can see his sad face, he’s always been like this: doesn’t want to make anyone worry about him. He didn’t even tell his friends the moment he felt the pain, he tried to contain it, well he couldn’t at last.
I walk toward him, sit next to him, and put my best smile as if I’m not worried.
“Tora, honey....If you were a burden, I’d want to be burdened. Well, you are not,” I grabbed his right hand and kissed it gently.
This has been your "clear description of love scene," please join us next time when she (excuse me, YOU) hugs him for longer than usual!
“But...see, sweet heart. In the morning, you always come by early to prepare my breakfast and lunch. Then after work you always come by to prepare dinner. You always get home late, like....00AM after you’re sure I’m asleep. It’s dangerous out there...I’m worried but you insist to keep on doing that??” he explained his worry to me.
00 AM? Is the power out?
I sigh. “Tora, listen. Don’t you ever think of something like that...this is called love. If you don’t let me do it, then it means you don’t love me, at all...”
He stares at me. Gosh...I really love those eyes...they are the best eyes I’ve ever seen... His face comes forward to mine, then I can feel his gentle lips are starting to stick to mine. He starts to kiss me very softly, so I kiss him in return.
By God, don't tell us what his eyes actually look like. Mere mortals couldn't handle the description.
“Tora, I gotta cook for your dinner,” I whispered to him after that sweet little kiss.
I prepare his dinner and also mine. Gosh, I’m starving. Doesn’t take times to prepare the dinner because his dinner is a simple one. The nurse told me how to make it.
Again, don't trouble yourself to tell us what you actually made him, or why exactly someone with a spinal injury would need special food.
I love to see the scene in front of my nose: Tora. He eats slowly. I want to help him but I don’t want him to feel like he can’t do anything because that’s just not him.
I wash the dishes while he takes his medicine. When I’m done, I take care of Chicken. AH! He’s eaten all of his treats, I’m so happy to see him healthy like that.
Chicken is Tora's cat. Thanks for clarifying that. Christ.
Then I walk to his bedroom, he’s trying to lie down there but he finds it a bit difficult.
“Ouch!! Ouch!!” he whined.
“Here, here, let me help you,” I contained his body but he refused.
..."contained?" How DO you help someone lay down, anyway? Try taking off his antigravity belt...?
“Go away! I can do this myself!” he yelled at me so loudly that got me startled. “I can do this myself. I’m sick but I’m not paralyzed! For God sake, I don’t need your f***ing help for something so simple like this!” he continued.
18+ ONLY, CLEAR DESCRIPTIONS OF LOVE SCENES but we'll censor out the cuss words so as not to offend your delicate sensibilities. By the way, if you can't move part of your body, you are indeed fucking paralyzed.
Oh my....I’m so shocked. I can’t believe something like that just came out from the lips of someone I love. I’m sincere, I don’t need him to repay me with anything but his love, but...
My stars and garters, my boyfriend who has an injury that causes him serious pain and is getting frustrated at me for... uh.... HE SAID THE EFF WORD!!!1
“Okay,” I could only say this word. I really want to cry now but I try to contain it. I leave his room and close the door. I press my nose as hard as I can in order not to make my cry heard by him. I wish this was a dream...
TO BE CONTINUED...
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So... first person female narrator, non-AU, Tora's fairly in character (I guess), BUT IT'S NOT A MARY SUE!! GOD NO!
I found this *ahem* gem a bit ago... it got a lot of attention on the comm mostly because the comm is strictly no-fics-allowed, but also because it is fucking terrible and is also short enough to be absorbed before you clot up your keyboard with vomit.
FORTHWITH, the warnings!
Main Characters: Tora Alice Nine and YOU
RATE: 18+ (clear description of love scene will be included)
*The character “I” doesn’t mean ME. So you can think that “I” is YOU, who read this.
Well, be still my beating heart! HERE WE GOOO
I quickly pack my bag, put everything inside it. All the stationeries and also my cell phone, I put them inside my brown leather bag. I open the flip and can see the wallpaper, it’s me and the man I really love. Yes, I’ve got a boyfriend.
OMG MY HEARTIEST CONGRATULATIONS
He’s....a unique person. The first time we met, he wasn’t so friendly to me, he only said “hi” when our friend introduced us in that livehouse.
It is I, the Backstory Fairy! Anyway, gotta go. Nothing to see here.
Now that we’ve been dating for around two years, his career’s been getting bigger and bigger with his band. He’s the guitarist of a band in Japan. This makes us keep our relationship secret, he said he didn’t want anyone to stalk me or mock me, didn’t want anyone to do any harm to me.
“I’m going now!” I said to my co-workers.
“Are you going home or to your boyfriend’s place?” one of them asked me. Well, they just know that I’m in a relationship, they don’t know what job my boyfriend has.
“Yes!” I answered happily.
GET IT BECAUSE HER BOYFRIEND LIVES WITH HER!
“Hope he’s getting better,” she said.
Yes, he’s sick. It’s a serious sickness. I’m very worried.
Angst coming in, angst you are now cleared for landing on runway 7...
It started several months ago when he got diagnosed for a quite rare disease, it has something to do with his nerve system. The last time, he could not move his left arm.
Okay, now it's just obnoxiously non-AU. For those of you just tuning in, Tora has a herniated disc in his neck that caused A9 to have to reschedule three lives last year because he couldn't move his arm (same problem Yoshiki has iirc). But it's NOT A MARY SUE FIC!
I took a bus to go to his place. He’s been in a bedrest for three days now. Doctor suggested him to. At first he didn’t want to because he said he had something to do with his music, he was composing one for the new single.
Shouldn't a supportive girlfriend have more than vague ideas regarding her boyfriend's severe medical issues or what he does with his time? Just a thought. Also, what the fuck is "a bedrest?"
DING DONG!
I pressed the doorbell. It took about a minute for me to have the door opened. Yeah, he’s not well and it’s been a bit hard for him to move fast.
“Hi,” he greeted me with his greatest smile. “Why didn’t you use your key? You have it, don’t you?”
“Hi Tora..I left it at home, hahaha,” I replied to him.
So go back and get it. He's on bed rest and you made him get up to let your dumb ass in? Bitch.
He lets me in, I ask him to get back to the living room and rest, I’ll take care of everything.
“Thanks,” he told me once he was seated.
“For what?” I asked him while putting all the foods I bought into his fridge.
Angst, please taxi to Gate B12...
“For being here, always. I’m a burden,” he seemed sad.
...thank you!
I quickly put everything to the place. I can see his sad face, he’s always been like this: doesn’t want to make anyone worry about him. He didn’t even tell his friends the moment he felt the pain, he tried to contain it, well he couldn’t at last.
I walk toward him, sit next to him, and put my best smile as if I’m not worried.
“Tora, honey....If you were a burden, I’d want to be burdened. Well, you are not,” I grabbed his right hand and kissed it gently.
This has been your "clear description of love scene," please join us next time when she (excuse me, YOU) hugs him for longer than usual!
“But...see, sweet heart. In the morning, you always come by early to prepare my breakfast and lunch. Then after work you always come by to prepare dinner. You always get home late, like....00AM after you’re sure I’m asleep. It’s dangerous out there...I’m worried but you insist to keep on doing that??” he explained his worry to me.
00 AM? Is the power out?
I sigh. “Tora, listen. Don’t you ever think of something like that...this is called love. If you don’t let me do it, then it means you don’t love me, at all...”
He stares at me. Gosh...I really love those eyes...they are the best eyes I’ve ever seen... His face comes forward to mine, then I can feel his gentle lips are starting to stick to mine. He starts to kiss me very softly, so I kiss him in return.
By God, don't tell us what his eyes actually look like. Mere mortals couldn't handle the description.
“Tora, I gotta cook for your dinner,” I whispered to him after that sweet little kiss.
I prepare his dinner and also mine. Gosh, I’m starving. Doesn’t take times to prepare the dinner because his dinner is a simple one. The nurse told me how to make it.
Again, don't trouble yourself to tell us what you actually made him, or why exactly someone with a spinal injury would need special food.
I love to see the scene in front of my nose: Tora. He eats slowly. I want to help him but I don’t want him to feel like he can’t do anything because that’s just not him.
I wash the dishes while he takes his medicine. When I’m done, I take care of Chicken. AH! He’s eaten all of his treats, I’m so happy to see him healthy like that.
Chicken is Tora's cat. Thanks for clarifying that. Christ.
Then I walk to his bedroom, he’s trying to lie down there but he finds it a bit difficult.
“Ouch!! Ouch!!” he whined.
“Here, here, let me help you,” I contained his body but he refused.
..."contained?" How DO you help someone lay down, anyway? Try taking off his antigravity belt...?
“Go away! I can do this myself!” he yelled at me so loudly that got me startled. “I can do this myself. I’m sick but I’m not paralyzed! For God sake, I don’t need your f***ing help for something so simple like this!” he continued.
18+ ONLY, CLEAR DESCRIPTIONS OF LOVE SCENES but we'll censor out the cuss words so as not to offend your delicate sensibilities. By the way, if you can't move part of your body, you are indeed fucking paralyzed.
Oh my....I’m so shocked. I can’t believe something like that just came out from the lips of someone I love. I’m sincere, I don’t need him to repay me with anything but his love, but...
My stars and garters, my boyfriend who has an injury that causes him serious pain and is getting frustrated at me for... uh.... HE SAID THE EFF WORD!!!1
“Okay,” I could only say this word. I really want to cry now but I try to contain it. I leave his room and close the door. I press my nose as hard as I can in order not to make my cry heard by him. I wish this was a dream...
TO BE CONTINUED...
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So... first person female narrator, non-AU, Tora's fairly in character (I guess), BUT IT'S NOT A MARY SUE!! GOD NO!