Chapter 12 Update + Chapter 11 Review Responses
Okay, chapter 12 will be up momentarily, guys! :'D You know the drill!
In other news, I GOT MY FIRST FANART! *flaunts it*
It's so cuuttteee~
Fussososososoooo~ >w<
Thank you, Nekoii-desu!
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Chapter 11 Review Responses:
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(BLUE indicates a Driving Review)
"I really love this story so far. The writing is so good I feel like I could be reading it in a fantasy book." - Tab
Tab - Uwaahh~
;w;
Thank you very much! It's a great honor to be actually compared to a book! xD
"I like Nel and I had so much fun reading as she hits on Ashura! XD That was great! Now Ashura knows what it's like when someone has a "crush" at you. He's now quite known. I'm happy for him. This story is really very enjoyable and I'm always having a lot of fun reading about Vine and Ashura even if Vine's not around Ashura.
And thanks for the drawing! Vine's really cute! Ashura too! ;P
I'll be waitinf for more chapters!" - Kasai-chan
Kasai-chan - Heehee! I'm glad you like her! :'3
I'm trying to find ways to shove female characters in there, since.... just about all my Tentacle Story stories will by about guys. ;w;'''
It makes things feel a little bit more even, ne?
Heehee. And I do imagine it's quite odd for Ashura to realize someones crushing on him. xDD
Thank YOU for enjoying my drawing! *glad*
"Great chapter. I loved the picture of Ashura and vine. This chapter was quite amusing. Nel is such a sweetie. Ashura was very smart to redirect her attentions to that other boy. I like your perspective on the way that Ashura was mistreated by his old village. That is something that often happens in real life. Ashura is a lovely young man who was mistreated by his village for his entire life because they were prejudiced against his mother. They were probably nice and warm to everyone else who passed through their town. I can't wait to see what happens next. I hope his illusion spell takes him home just as fast. I can understand why Vine would hate being home alone for days at a time." - kylee
kylee - I'm glad you find Ashura's situation realistic enough.
I was worried that it wouldn't be... when everyone is like, "WHY?!" I think it's because they're just angry at them, maybe, ne? I'm always worried that they're saying something like, "I don't get it.... what reasons do they have to hate him? Can you explain it better?"
*headdesk* Orrzzz.....
But I figured, there are a lot of really close-minded people in the world, who refuse to see the truth no matter what. They only see the cruel things they want to--and they're not always even bad people, even though they do that. *nods*
Anyway, thanks for the review and I'm glad you liked both the chapter and my art! >w<
"It was so cute with Nel flirting w/Ashura! And Ashura wasn't quite sure what Nel was up to! He's probably more innocent than she is; well, with PEOPLE, anyway! hahah Yeah, he could teach her a thing or two about PLANTS!!!! :)" - Lisa
Lisa - *laughs* Yes, I imagine so. But he has watched people enough, and he's observant... so he isn't totally oblivious or clueless. Just a little. Only when it comes to himself. XD
;w;
*dies* And I would really rather he didn't teach her a thing or two about plants. XDD
"OK, now I'm torn: I like these chapters with Ashura in the village, because it seems, well, healing for Ashura to have normal, friendly interactions with people. And because I like the new characters so much, especially Dont and Nel. Hurray for new friends for our beloved Ashura!
On the other hand, poor Vine! He seems just like a little puppy, so sweet and eager to be with his human, so absolutely CRUSHED when his human goes away. It makes me remember when I had a new kitten, how cute and fun to play with she was, and how very sad and unbelieving she was that I would actually dare to ever leave the house, to leave her alone. I love how you are able to use your words to convey Vine's emotions, even when the creature has no face and no voice. Although I am convinced that the tingling he causes is rudimentary communication.
Speaking of tingling, now that Vine can move around on his own, I can almost picture him sneaking onto an unsuspecting Ashura in the middle of the night. (heh heh) Although maybe he'll have to be a bit bigger in order to climb up onto the bed . . ." - circe
circe - Weehh!
Yeah, it would be totally boring if the whole story was ONLY Ashura and Vine, ne? I'm trying really hard to include new characters, if only to just add a little bit of variation to the story. *nods*
Haha, I hope you really liked the character I introduced in this chapter, too, ne? ;w;
*nods* Yes, it does seem like that with Vine, doesn't it? And that is exactly how Ashura sees it right now, too. And, gods, I know exactly what that's like. Recently, a friend of mine found a bunch of kittens in the lot next to her house. They were cleaning the area up, and it scared the mother cat away, so she had to take care of the kittens. D:
They were SO CUTE, but when she put them back in their box, they would cry and cry and cry like you just, I don't know, took a favorite toy away from a little kid. It broke the heart. ;3;
Also, I shan't say anything about the tingling, though know you're headed in the right track to realize it is important. ;'3
Fft... and, well, Ashura just lets Vine hang around him when he goes to bed. *nods* Besides, Vine's small, but it could probably pull itself up with the blankets, ne?
"Hey there! I'm a 'ghost reader', I've gone through most of your stories but this is my first time commenting. I just wanted to say that I really enjoy reading your work and I always look forward to seeing updates. I'm glad I stumbled upon your page two months back! I was really missing out." - Glacial Rose
Glacial Rose - Awww!
Thank you very much, I'm glad you like it! ;w; *nods*
I hope to see your reviews again in the future, though, ne? ;'D
"Congrats on hitting 100 reviews! Your story is definitely worth it. Thanks for the reference picture of Vine, by the way. I'm usually good with visualizing descriptions from stories and fanfics but i kept trying to figure out where Vine's roots went and I just got confused. It's cute how attached Vine is to Ashura. It's like a puppy, except with tentacles.....Alright so it's not like a puppy at all. It's sad that Ashura doesn't realize what a good person he is thanks to his old village. Hopefully he'll gain better self esteem the more he gets to know people and the more he practices his magic. Excited as ever for the next chapter!" - Yofen
Yofen - Ooh, thank you! >w<
And I'm glad my little doodle helped! xD *nods*
And, yes, I hope Ashura gets more confident, too! *nods*
Heehee, it would be fun to write a bit in Vine's perspective about all this when it's over... *wonders* -w- Hmm...
Anyway, thanks for reviewing, like always, 'Fen! x'3
"Awwww! I dunno what I like most. I will admit, I thought Naeilith was going to be a love interest of sorts and try to distract Ashura from the vined beast. Luckily, I was wrong. But damn Sarian! Damn him, damn him, damn him! DX At least it turned out okay in the end and there's hope.
@ 8: I'm pretty sure everyone's already guessed who Carem was, so I'm not gonna say. But I have this sneaking suspicion...
@ 9 and 10: Yay, Ashura seems to be getting along well in town. And he actually feels good, and useful! Things are looking up! But this new development with Vine intrigues me and I can't help wondering... would this have happened if he hadn't been chopped down too? I'm sure this development and the browning are linked somehow, and the browning started wayyyyyy before all this. o.o; Wow, can you imagine the Vined Beast like that? XD
@ 11: Vine is just... ADORABLE. Like a puppy! I want one. And Nel's cute, that girl, but I don't like that suspicion of hers. She better not hurt Vine! DX Oh, but I thought of something. Why doesn't Ashura use his illusion spells to turn Vine into a cat or something, and take him into town around his neck? Once he gets better with stamina and concentration, it might be possible if he thinks about it.
Oh, I forgot! I saw the drawing you did of Ashura and Vine and I meant to ask... are you, by chance, the same Jotaku that's on deviantart? It might just be a coincidence, but I figured I'd ask. =)" - Haywire_Hakaze2
Haywire_Hakaze2 - Haha!
Well, I'm glad she didn't become a love interest, either, ne! XD
And Sarian is quite the bastard. D;
@8 - *no comment* : I
@9 and 1o - Mm, yes, would it have? That is a good question, and it shall actually be answered later on. :'D
@11 - Ffft, if you ever find one, give one to me, too, nejano! Well, I thought about it, but I think Ashura doesn't even consider it because it'd be way too dangerous. What would happen if he got too tired to keep the illusion going, or lost his concentration? It's way too much of a risk for him to try. It's hard on Vine to be left alone, but he loves it too much to put his little tentacle creature at a risk like that. He doesn't want to lose it again.
And yes, that is me. :'D
*nods*
Anyways, thanks for your review and I hope to see more for later chapters! :'D
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Ashun the vigilante runs through the mountains saving sexums plants. :D lol.
No, tho, love the pic! You're very good o3o I wants.
Lol....Viney the cat.....mutant....which needs no food....and will grow into a large creature with a lovely plant dick....of course..." - lamme
lamme - *laughs* lolwut?! XD
And, thank you! ;w; *happy*
Fft... of course. ;'D
"lol. vine looks like a hairball. ash looks so cute and doting, thanks jotaku for that!
what a happy beginning. i love the mobile vine, much more fun than being stuck in the ground/or pot right?!
haha, ash is treating it like a lil kid.... cute. do they sleep together? do they snuggle? awww
neat lil speed spell thing. neatO! i was thinking like fyling carpet or something... lol. speedy legs is much cooler.
new friends. and theyre really sweet. nice bits of building the town more and relations...
looking forward to more. much much much more!
i caught a few sp errors. fix em if ya want...
in the paragraph "At first, Ashura had thought about magically enhancing himself. He could use supportive spells to strengthen his body and....."
7th line down "something dangers, like explode" -dangerous ?
7th line down "And caring around a pack of speed scrolls" -carrying ?" - spoonring
spoonring - Thank you!
And yes, much more fun, I agree. ;'D
Mm, I think this chapter answers your question, ne? Vine hangs around him so much, that it's usually clinging to him when he goes to bed, so Vine just goes with Ashura. And if he doesn't, for whatever reason, I imagine Ashura would leave the door open so Vine could come in when it wanted to and join him. :'3
And thank you for catching my mistakes! D;
I edited the chapter at around 1-3am in the morning... *headdesk* I was way too tired, so I missed a bunch of things. xD;;
I shall fix them when I update!
"!!!~You've reached a hundred reviews~!!!!
*throws confetti* CONGRATULATIONS!!!!! *throws confetti*
hurraaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahh~~~~! ^____________________^
Tentacle LOVE is spreading like wildfire
(i didn't want to say wild fire. coz fire still feels like a taboo word for me. since FIRE was the one that burned huge-tentacle-beast. but Ashura seems fine with fire. using it as the first magic he learns and stuff. soooooo... yeah.)
Vine is very clingy isn't he. Somehow, picturing that mass of Tangela holding onto Ash's neck is... well... ^___^"""
possesive much? Then again, when I try to picture it, Vine may look like some neck accessory when he's positioned nicely enough.
Hmmmmmmmmmmmm shld I try my drawing skillz on it. Grah! no! no promises! X'D
oh! ah~ I have another imagery for Vine.... Kushkins! Kushkins is the wrong term, but for the sake of me I cannot recall it's proper name. It's this toy thing, that's made up of multicoloured rubberband (only its in strings, not a loop), then it's a ball. So it's something like a hairy ball looking thing.
Imagining Vine plonking down, then scurrying over to Ashura.... SO CUTE! X3
I also wonder, now, how does Vine eat. Water? Sunlight? Only?
Please do describe it vividly when Vine grow up more *A* grow vine grow. Than Ashura's not-so-little hard problem may be resolved!!! XD Gyahahahahaha! Why doesn't Vine sleep with Ash? he may as well yeah?
And how ever is he going to explain this 'CAT' should someone every come visit him?
Lols. lying is not good Ashy~~~ *wags finger at you*
so anyway. there's nel.
Nel... aaah now it hits me. that green-haired lass from bleach. with ginormous assets... *cough*
I cannot imagine a 15year old like that... shant shan't...
AND THEN!!!
omgomgomgomg~ *goes crazy*
Ashura Norovin. HERE YE?!
ASHURA NOROVIN
Is this the first time we're hearing his full name???! I believe it issss!!! (unless my brain has failed me.... D: )
Okay. okay! >w< gyaaah~ we'll see yeah what's coming up next~
more illusions? I believe this 'Ashura is good at Illusions' thing is going to play quite an important role later in the future. Like if he needs to cover Vine. or something~
but yeah! okay~~~ busy busy busy gonna be. This whole coming august @_@ and a bit into September.
I hope I'll manage to catch and review your updates before you get ahead of me! XD
PS:
"...to keep a small portion of his mind that new better"
'new' should be 'knew' yeah~ ^___^" - Nekoii-desu
Nekoii-desu - Woooh! Yes, thank you! x'33
*dies* I know exactly what you mean! One of those rubbery, squishy balls with all the weird little rubbery strings on them? XD Those things feel weird.
*laughs* I guess that's.... kinda like Vine? Maybe? A little? *cracks up*
I didn't get a chance to go into what Vine eats/drinks in this chapter or the last, but the next one will touch up on it a bit. *nods*
And Vine does sleep with him--as you will see in this chapter. :'D *nods*
Ffft, but I doubt anyone would visit. That's a whole two day's worth of travel there, I don't think anyone would really want to make that trip to visit Ashura if they didn't have to. xD
*laughs*
That's one Nel, yes. Though she looks nothing like her. There's also Nel from Star Ocean: Till the End of Time.
I gave Ashura's mom's full name before, ne? It makes sense that he would have her last name as well, oder?
So, that is the first time it was actually written, but it was known before. owo
And thanks for catching another mistake! *made a lot of them this time around* orrzzzz.... *headdesk*
"=0 I want a pet vine... can I have him, though I'm not allowed pets in my flat so... although vine is kind of a plant still so maybe I can get away with it? I forbid you to make vine any more animal like because then I can't have him >=l stupid tenancy agreement! *shakes fist at the contract* We're not even allowed window boxes...window boxes for Christ sake!... not that I want a window box but still it's the principle of the thing! What happens if whole of England floods?..The only way I'd be able to grow vegetables and fruit would be in window boxes! Oh My Mother Loving Goat! My landlord is trying to kill me through malnutrition!
....I feel as if I've gone a bit off topic ^-^;
Anyhoodleeyoodle I think I found a possible mistake..maybe?
"Nick flashed Ashura another tooth-missing and turned to check on one of the other customers sitting at the bar."
I think maybe it's meant to have "smile" or "grin" after "tooth-missing" because if not I keep reading it as nick is flashing ashura (wow-chaka-wow-wow)and then looses another tooth...
Also I looked again for that repartition in the other chapter that that I mention a while back..I still can't find it... I'm thinking I made it up for attention, it wouldn't surprise me if I did.
...Another thing about my tenancy agreement it says that I'm responsible for my servants....what the hell! I struggle to control my parents as it is without him nagging me *sigh*...
anyway I'll leave you to ponder the life changing subjects I brought up in this comment
My work here is done lil'lady *rides off into the sunset*" - AlmightyGingerOne
AlmightyGingerOne - Haha, well..... er.... I'm afraid he probably will get a bit more animal-like. ;w;''
I'm terribly sorry. And that is... quite odd? XD
Though, I doubt a window box could really produce enough to live on, ne? XD
;w;
You live in England? Heehee... Igirisu! Wish I could visit England, man... been all over Europe but not there. D;
Oh, and thanks for catching another mistake. @w@;;; Never, ever going to edit at 1 am again. *headdesk*
Haha, but thanks for your very interesting review. ;w; *amused*
"I absolutely adored poor Vine clinging to Ashura, trying to not get left behind. Poor thing. I felt so bad for both of them, though time apart is probably good for Ashura's sanity (not necessarily Vine's, though). Ashura freaking out when Nel hit on him was also adorable. Sorry Nel, he's a penis-tentacle-being-fucked type. Not a pedophilic hetero. Ewwww 14 years old, creepy.
I went on your livejournal, and saw the picture of Ashura holding Vine. It's adorable! I think I imagined Vine as being upside down from how you drew him (that his former 'roots' would stay on the bottom of him) but otherwise that's how I imagined he looked :). Although the brown color is a little odd, in the sense that he looks kinda-hair-colored. I also saw your cover art for Tentacle Beginning Story. HOLY CRAWDADS, Jotaku. That was a gorgeous piece of art. Hot and innocently sweet all at once, with the vined beast wrapped all around Ashura in naughty places and yet Ashura kissing it so lovingly.
I am just so thoroughly impressed by an author who can also draw. Having one of those skills is a gift. Having both is incredible. I look forward to reading, and seeing, more.
Can't wait for the next update." - Jolene
Jolene - *laughs*
Yes, it is hard for both of them, but Ashura does need some other interaction, I think. He's already been forced into near hermittisism just 'cause of Vine anyway, ne? xD
*laughs*
I mentioned that the "roots" were on the top when I described it, I think? *shrugs*
Haha, his coloring hasn't stopped changing yet, though, ne!
OWO
Holy crawdads? ;w; *happy*
I'm very glad you enjoyed it so much! >w< *squees*
Ffft, well, I do call myself more of an artist than a writer. I'm really only good at writing fantasy type things, I think. -w-
Anyway, thank you very much! :'D
"Aww Ashura is finally realizing that it was his old town that was wrong and not him! I also saw your beautiful drawing of vine! He looks so squishy; I just want to grab him and squish him (not too hard!) hehe." - kyouteki
kyouteki - Yush!
Uwah, thank you! ;w;
Heehee, I would love to do that, too, man. *wants to cuddle a little Vine*
"Hee, Vine latching onto Ashura's neck like that is so cute... I'd imagine him to look like a necklace, LOL! Too bad the poor thing hates to be left alone though ): But the last time it was alone, it got chopped and burned down! ):
So Ashura's getting better at magic, hee hee :) Yep, you guessed it, I'm still hoping for him to learn a few attacking spells to defend himself with :D Yes yes, I'm just a liiiiittle obsessed with poor innocent people/plants being hated for no logical reason ): And then having them attacked without a way to fend for themselves ):
Ahhh, just what is Vine going to be? Such mystery... how long until theres enough clues to figure out what Vine's doing? ;) Hopefully soon, 'cause you know we're going to catch on just like that! -snaps- Just like about Ashura living in his father's house ;)" - Tranquil
Tranquil - Yeahh.... D:
Hm, well, I imagine he'll learn something in all his studying, ne? And even if he doesn't learn attack magic, exactly, he's smart. He's already learned various elemental magic. He could probably manipulate it fairly easily into an attack.
;'D
Yes, what IS it going to be, neeeee?
Hmm, well, you won't be able to guess what Vine is EXACTLY, because that won't be revealed until Truth, and that's something I made up. *nods*
But, well, you'll probably figure out what's happening with Vine before Ashura does. *nods*
That I expect. u3u
"Is Dynzel black? ;w;
Also, I love how awkward Nel is, it's absolutely adorable.
For some reason I keep thinking that something with Vine is going to happen [ like he's going to have an epic growth spurt or something ] or freak Ashura out again." - Boogeyman
Boogeyman - No.
Fft, I'm glad. ;w;
You'll like the scroll shop owner even more, nejano!
XD
Well... something will happen soon, ne?
Just... not that. XD
And what's with the name change?
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Chapter 12 Post-Chapter Author Notes:
HUWAAAHHH
Finally getting this chapter up, ne?
Ffft, I'm been obsessing over Hetalia for the last few days. ~w~;
MY FAVORITE IS SPPAAAIINN~ FUSOSOSO~
*coughs*
But, anyway, back to the topic at hand!
Updates are gonna slow down a little bit, but hopefully they'll still be fairly frequent.
I'm going to start setting up commissions on dA soon. -w-;;
I need more money to help pay for Kumoricon! :'D
*excited*
Errm... I had a lot of fun with this chapter, though, ne. It's nice to write dialog and interactions. :'D
I felt like a bitch when I was rereading it and got to the end. -w-;;;
Nywaha.... but he'll cheer up soon, so no worries. 8'D;;;
Pub-Pub-Pub and Go~ Fish and Chips~ *sings*
Okay, sorry, I'm ending this now. *headdesk*
SEE YA SOON! 8'D;;
In other news, I GOT MY FIRST FANART! *flaunts it*
It's so cuuttteee~
Fussososososoooo~ >w<
Thank you, Nekoii-desu!
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Chapter 11 Review Responses:
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(BLUE indicates a Driving Review)
"I really love this story so far. The writing is so good I feel like I could be reading it in a fantasy book." - Tab
Tab - Uwaahh~
;w;
Thank you very much! It's a great honor to be actually compared to a book! xD
"I like Nel and I had so much fun reading as she hits on Ashura! XD That was great! Now Ashura knows what it's like when someone has a "crush" at you. He's now quite known. I'm happy for him. This story is really very enjoyable and I'm always having a lot of fun reading about Vine and Ashura even if Vine's not around Ashura.
And thanks for the drawing! Vine's really cute! Ashura too! ;P
I'll be waitinf for more chapters!" - Kasai-chan
Kasai-chan - Heehee! I'm glad you like her! :'3
I'm trying to find ways to shove female characters in there, since.... just about all my Tentacle Story stories will by about guys. ;w;'''
It makes things feel a little bit more even, ne?
Heehee. And I do imagine it's quite odd for Ashura to realize someones crushing on him. xDD
Thank YOU for enjoying my drawing! *glad*
"Great chapter. I loved the picture of Ashura and vine. This chapter was quite amusing. Nel is such a sweetie. Ashura was very smart to redirect her attentions to that other boy. I like your perspective on the way that Ashura was mistreated by his old village. That is something that often happens in real life. Ashura is a lovely young man who was mistreated by his village for his entire life because they were prejudiced against his mother. They were probably nice and warm to everyone else who passed through their town. I can't wait to see what happens next. I hope his illusion spell takes him home just as fast. I can understand why Vine would hate being home alone for days at a time." - kylee
kylee - I'm glad you find Ashura's situation realistic enough.
I was worried that it wouldn't be... when everyone is like, "WHY?!" I think it's because they're just angry at them, maybe, ne? I'm always worried that they're saying something like, "I don't get it.... what reasons do they have to hate him? Can you explain it better?"
*headdesk* Orrzzz.....
But I figured, there are a lot of really close-minded people in the world, who refuse to see the truth no matter what. They only see the cruel things they want to--and they're not always even bad people, even though they do that. *nods*
Anyway, thanks for the review and I'm glad you liked both the chapter and my art! >w<
"It was so cute with Nel flirting w/Ashura! And Ashura wasn't quite sure what Nel was up to! He's probably more innocent than she is; well, with PEOPLE, anyway! hahah Yeah, he could teach her a thing or two about PLANTS!!!! :)" - Lisa
Lisa - *laughs* Yes, I imagine so. But he has watched people enough, and he's observant... so he isn't totally oblivious or clueless. Just a little. Only when it comes to himself. XD
;w;
*dies* And I would really rather he didn't teach her a thing or two about plants. XDD
"OK, now I'm torn: I like these chapters with Ashura in the village, because it seems, well, healing for Ashura to have normal, friendly interactions with people. And because I like the new characters so much, especially Dont and Nel. Hurray for new friends for our beloved Ashura!
On the other hand, poor Vine! He seems just like a little puppy, so sweet and eager to be with his human, so absolutely CRUSHED when his human goes away. It makes me remember when I had a new kitten, how cute and fun to play with she was, and how very sad and unbelieving she was that I would actually dare to ever leave the house, to leave her alone. I love how you are able to use your words to convey Vine's emotions, even when the creature has no face and no voice. Although I am convinced that the tingling he causes is rudimentary communication.
Speaking of tingling, now that Vine can move around on his own, I can almost picture him sneaking onto an unsuspecting Ashura in the middle of the night. (heh heh) Although maybe he'll have to be a bit bigger in order to climb up onto the bed . . ." - circe
circe - Weehh!
Yeah, it would be totally boring if the whole story was ONLY Ashura and Vine, ne? I'm trying really hard to include new characters, if only to just add a little bit of variation to the story. *nods*
Haha, I hope you really liked the character I introduced in this chapter, too, ne? ;w;
*nods* Yes, it does seem like that with Vine, doesn't it? And that is exactly how Ashura sees it right now, too. And, gods, I know exactly what that's like. Recently, a friend of mine found a bunch of kittens in the lot next to her house. They were cleaning the area up, and it scared the mother cat away, so she had to take care of the kittens. D:
They were SO CUTE, but when she put them back in their box, they would cry and cry and cry like you just, I don't know, took a favorite toy away from a little kid. It broke the heart. ;3;
Also, I shan't say anything about the tingling, though know you're headed in the right track to realize it is important. ;'3
Fft... and, well, Ashura just lets Vine hang around him when he goes to bed. *nods* Besides, Vine's small, but it could probably pull itself up with the blankets, ne?
"Hey there! I'm a 'ghost reader', I've gone through most of your stories but this is my first time commenting. I just wanted to say that I really enjoy reading your work and I always look forward to seeing updates. I'm glad I stumbled upon your page two months back! I was really missing out." - Glacial Rose
Glacial Rose - Awww!
Thank you very much, I'm glad you like it! ;w; *nods*
I hope to see your reviews again in the future, though, ne? ;'D
"Congrats on hitting 100 reviews! Your story is definitely worth it. Thanks for the reference picture of Vine, by the way. I'm usually good with visualizing descriptions from stories and fanfics but i kept trying to figure out where Vine's roots went and I just got confused. It's cute how attached Vine is to Ashura. It's like a puppy, except with tentacles.....Alright so it's not like a puppy at all. It's sad that Ashura doesn't realize what a good person he is thanks to his old village. Hopefully he'll gain better self esteem the more he gets to know people and the more he practices his magic. Excited as ever for the next chapter!" - Yofen
Yofen - Ooh, thank you! >w<
And I'm glad my little doodle helped! xD *nods*
And, yes, I hope Ashura gets more confident, too! *nods*
Heehee, it would be fun to write a bit in Vine's perspective about all this when it's over... *wonders* -w- Hmm...
Anyway, thanks for reviewing, like always, 'Fen! x'3
"Awwww! I dunno what I like most. I will admit, I thought Naeilith was going to be a love interest of sorts and try to distract Ashura from the vined beast. Luckily, I was wrong. But damn Sarian! Damn him, damn him, damn him! DX At least it turned out okay in the end and there's hope.
@ 8: I'm pretty sure everyone's already guessed who Carem was, so I'm not gonna say. But I have this sneaking suspicion...
@ 9 and 10: Yay, Ashura seems to be getting along well in town. And he actually feels good, and useful! Things are looking up! But this new development with Vine intrigues me and I can't help wondering... would this have happened if he hadn't been chopped down too? I'm sure this development and the browning are linked somehow, and the browning started wayyyyyy before all this. o.o; Wow, can you imagine the Vined Beast like that? XD
@ 11: Vine is just... ADORABLE. Like a puppy! I want one. And Nel's cute, that girl, but I don't like that suspicion of hers. She better not hurt Vine! DX Oh, but I thought of something. Why doesn't Ashura use his illusion spells to turn Vine into a cat or something, and take him into town around his neck? Once he gets better with stamina and concentration, it might be possible if he thinks about it.
Oh, I forgot! I saw the drawing you did of Ashura and Vine and I meant to ask... are you, by chance, the same Jotaku that's on deviantart? It might just be a coincidence, but I figured I'd ask. =)" - Haywire_Hakaze2
Haywire_Hakaze2 - Haha!
Well, I'm glad she didn't become a love interest, either, ne! XD
And Sarian is quite the bastard. D;
@8 - *no comment* : I
@9 and 1o - Mm, yes, would it have? That is a good question, and it shall actually be answered later on. :'D
@11 - Ffft, if you ever find one, give one to me, too, nejano! Well, I thought about it, but I think Ashura doesn't even consider it because it'd be way too dangerous. What would happen if he got too tired to keep the illusion going, or lost his concentration? It's way too much of a risk for him to try. It's hard on Vine to be left alone, but he loves it too much to put his little tentacle creature at a risk like that. He doesn't want to lose it again.
And yes, that is me. :'D
*nods*
Anyways, thanks for your review and I hope to see more for later chapters! :'D
"-..-
Ashun the vigilante runs through the mountains saving sexums plants. :D lol.
No, tho, love the pic! You're very good o3o I wants.
Lol....Viney the cat.....mutant....which needs no food....and will grow into a large creature with a lovely plant dick....of course..." - lamme
lamme - *laughs* lolwut?! XD
And, thank you! ;w; *happy*
Fft... of course. ;'D
"lol. vine looks like a hairball. ash looks so cute and doting, thanks jotaku for that!
what a happy beginning. i love the mobile vine, much more fun than being stuck in the ground/or pot right?!
haha, ash is treating it like a lil kid.... cute. do they sleep together? do they snuggle? awww
neat lil speed spell thing. neatO! i was thinking like fyling carpet or something... lol. speedy legs is much cooler.
new friends. and theyre really sweet. nice bits of building the town more and relations...
looking forward to more. much much much more!
i caught a few sp errors. fix em if ya want...
in the paragraph "At first, Ashura had thought about magically enhancing himself. He could use supportive spells to strengthen his body and....."
7th line down "something dangers, like explode" -dangerous ?
7th line down "And caring around a pack of speed scrolls" -carrying ?" - spoonring
spoonring - Thank you!
And yes, much more fun, I agree. ;'D
Mm, I think this chapter answers your question, ne? Vine hangs around him so much, that it's usually clinging to him when he goes to bed, so Vine just goes with Ashura. And if he doesn't, for whatever reason, I imagine Ashura would leave the door open so Vine could come in when it wanted to and join him. :'3
And thank you for catching my mistakes! D;
I edited the chapter at around 1-3am in the morning... *headdesk* I was way too tired, so I missed a bunch of things. xD;;
I shall fix them when I update!
"!!!~You've reached a hundred reviews~!!!!
*throws confetti* CONGRATULATIONS!!!!! *throws confetti*
hurraaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahh~~~~! ^____________________^
Tentacle LOVE is spreading like wildfire
(i didn't want to say wild fire. coz fire still feels like a taboo word for me. since FIRE was the one that burned huge-tentacle-beast. but Ashura seems fine with fire. using it as the first magic he learns and stuff. soooooo... yeah.)
Vine is very clingy isn't he. Somehow, picturing that mass of Tangela holding onto Ash's neck is... well... ^___^"""
possesive much? Then again, when I try to picture it, Vine may look like some neck accessory when he's positioned nicely enough.
Hmmmmmmmmmmmm shld I try my drawing skillz on it. Grah! no! no promises! X'D
oh! ah~ I have another imagery for Vine.... Kushkins! Kushkins is the wrong term, but for the sake of me I cannot recall it's proper name. It's this toy thing, that's made up of multicoloured rubberband (only its in strings, not a loop), then it's a ball. So it's something like a hairy ball looking thing.
Imagining Vine plonking down, then scurrying over to Ashura.... SO CUTE! X3
I also wonder, now, how does Vine eat. Water? Sunlight? Only?
Please do describe it vividly when Vine grow up more *A* grow vine grow. Than Ashura's not-so-little hard problem may be resolved!!! XD Gyahahahahaha! Why doesn't Vine sleep with Ash? he may as well yeah?
And how ever is he going to explain this 'CAT' should someone every come visit him?
Lols. lying is not good Ashy~~~ *wags finger at you*
so anyway. there's nel.
Nel... aaah now it hits me. that green-haired lass from bleach. with ginormous assets... *cough*
I cannot imagine a 15year old like that... shant shan't...
AND THEN!!!
omgomgomgomg~ *goes crazy*
Ashura Norovin. HERE YE?!
ASHURA NOROVIN
Is this the first time we're hearing his full name???! I believe it issss!!! (unless my brain has failed me.... D: )
Okay. okay! >w< gyaaah~ we'll see yeah what's coming up next~
more illusions? I believe this 'Ashura is good at Illusions' thing is going to play quite an important role later in the future. Like if he needs to cover Vine. or something~
but yeah! okay~~~ busy busy busy gonna be. This whole coming august @_@ and a bit into September.
I hope I'll manage to catch and review your updates before you get ahead of me! XD
PS:
"...to keep a small portion of his mind that new better"
'new' should be 'knew' yeah~ ^___^" - Nekoii-desu
Nekoii-desu - Woooh! Yes, thank you! x'33
*dies* I know exactly what you mean! One of those rubbery, squishy balls with all the weird little rubbery strings on them? XD Those things feel weird.
*laughs* I guess that's.... kinda like Vine? Maybe? A little? *cracks up*
I didn't get a chance to go into what Vine eats/drinks in this chapter or the last, but the next one will touch up on it a bit. *nods*
And Vine does sleep with him--as you will see in this chapter. :'D *nods*
Ffft, but I doubt anyone would visit. That's a whole two day's worth of travel there, I don't think anyone would really want to make that trip to visit Ashura if they didn't have to. xD
*laughs*
That's one Nel, yes. Though she looks nothing like her. There's also Nel from Star Ocean: Till the End of Time.
I gave Ashura's mom's full name before, ne? It makes sense that he would have her last name as well, oder?
So, that is the first time it was actually written, but it was known before. owo
And thanks for catching another mistake! *made a lot of them this time around* orrzzzz.... *headdesk*
"=0 I want a pet vine... can I have him, though I'm not allowed pets in my flat so... although vine is kind of a plant still so maybe I can get away with it? I forbid you to make vine any more animal like because then I can't have him >=l stupid tenancy agreement! *shakes fist at the contract* We're not even allowed window boxes...window boxes for Christ sake!... not that I want a window box but still it's the principle of the thing! What happens if whole of England floods?..The only way I'd be able to grow vegetables and fruit would be in window boxes! Oh My Mother Loving Goat! My landlord is trying to kill me through malnutrition!
....I feel as if I've gone a bit off topic ^-^;
Anyhoodleeyoodle I think I found a possible mistake..maybe?
"Nick flashed Ashura another tooth-missing and turned to check on one of the other customers sitting at the bar."
I think maybe it's meant to have "smile" or "grin" after "tooth-missing" because if not I keep reading it as nick is flashing ashura (wow-chaka-wow-wow)and then looses another tooth...
Also I looked again for that repartition in the other chapter that that I mention a while back..I still can't find it... I'm thinking I made it up for attention, it wouldn't surprise me if I did.
...Another thing about my tenancy agreement it says that I'm responsible for my servants....what the hell! I struggle to control my parents as it is without him nagging me *sigh*...
anyway I'll leave you to ponder the life changing subjects I brought up in this comment
My work here is done lil'lady *rides off into the sunset*" - AlmightyGingerOne
AlmightyGingerOne - Haha, well..... er.... I'm afraid he probably will get a bit more animal-like. ;w;''
I'm terribly sorry. And that is... quite odd? XD
Though, I doubt a window box could really produce enough to live on, ne? XD
;w;
You live in England? Heehee... Igirisu! Wish I could visit England, man... been all over Europe but not there. D;
Oh, and thanks for catching another mistake. @w@;;; Never, ever going to edit at 1 am again. *headdesk*
Haha, but thanks for your very interesting review. ;w; *amused*
"I absolutely adored poor Vine clinging to Ashura, trying to not get left behind. Poor thing. I felt so bad for both of them, though time apart is probably good for Ashura's sanity (not necessarily Vine's, though). Ashura freaking out when Nel hit on him was also adorable. Sorry Nel, he's a penis-tentacle-being-fucked type. Not a pedophilic hetero. Ewwww 14 years old, creepy.
I went on your livejournal, and saw the picture of Ashura holding Vine. It's adorable! I think I imagined Vine as being upside down from how you drew him (that his former 'roots' would stay on the bottom of him) but otherwise that's how I imagined he looked :). Although the brown color is a little odd, in the sense that he looks kinda-hair-colored. I also saw your cover art for Tentacle Beginning Story. HOLY CRAWDADS, Jotaku. That was a gorgeous piece of art. Hot and innocently sweet all at once, with the vined beast wrapped all around Ashura in naughty places and yet Ashura kissing it so lovingly.
I am just so thoroughly impressed by an author who can also draw. Having one of those skills is a gift. Having both is incredible. I look forward to reading, and seeing, more.
Can't wait for the next update." - Jolene
Jolene - *laughs*
Yes, it is hard for both of them, but Ashura does need some other interaction, I think. He's already been forced into near hermittisism just 'cause of Vine anyway, ne? xD
*laughs*
I mentioned that the "roots" were on the top when I described it, I think? *shrugs*
Haha, his coloring hasn't stopped changing yet, though, ne!
OWO
Holy crawdads? ;w; *happy*
I'm very glad you enjoyed it so much! >w< *squees*
Ffft, well, I do call myself more of an artist than a writer. I'm really only good at writing fantasy type things, I think. -w-
Anyway, thank you very much! :'D
"Aww Ashura is finally realizing that it was his old town that was wrong and not him! I also saw your beautiful drawing of vine! He looks so squishy; I just want to grab him and squish him (not too hard!) hehe." - kyouteki
kyouteki - Yush!
Uwah, thank you! ;w;
Heehee, I would love to do that, too, man. *wants to cuddle a little Vine*
"Hee, Vine latching onto Ashura's neck like that is so cute... I'd imagine him to look like a necklace, LOL! Too bad the poor thing hates to be left alone though ): But the last time it was alone, it got chopped and burned down! ):
So Ashura's getting better at magic, hee hee :) Yep, you guessed it, I'm still hoping for him to learn a few attacking spells to defend himself with :D Yes yes, I'm just a liiiiittle obsessed with poor innocent people/plants being hated for no logical reason ): And then having them attacked without a way to fend for themselves ):
Ahhh, just what is Vine going to be? Such mystery... how long until theres enough clues to figure out what Vine's doing? ;) Hopefully soon, 'cause you know we're going to catch on just like that! -snaps- Just like about Ashura living in his father's house ;)" - Tranquil
Tranquil - Yeahh.... D:
Hm, well, I imagine he'll learn something in all his studying, ne? And even if he doesn't learn attack magic, exactly, he's smart. He's already learned various elemental magic. He could probably manipulate it fairly easily into an attack.
;'D
Yes, what IS it going to be, neeeee?
Hmm, well, you won't be able to guess what Vine is EXACTLY, because that won't be revealed until Truth, and that's something I made up. *nods*
But, well, you'll probably figure out what's happening with Vine before Ashura does. *nods*
That I expect. u3u
"Is Dynzel black? ;w;
Also, I love how awkward Nel is, it's absolutely adorable.
For some reason I keep thinking that something with Vine is going to happen [ like he's going to have an epic growth spurt or something ] or freak Ashura out again." - Boogeyman
Boogeyman - No.
Fft, I'm glad. ;w;
You'll like the scroll shop owner even more, nejano!
XD
Well... something will happen soon, ne?
Just... not that. XD
And what's with the name change?
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Chapter 12 Post-Chapter Author Notes:
HUWAAAHHH
Finally getting this chapter up, ne?
Ffft, I'm been obsessing over Hetalia for the last few days. ~w~;
MY FAVORITE IS SPPAAAIINN~ FUSOSOSO~
*coughs*
But, anyway, back to the topic at hand!
Updates are gonna slow down a little bit, but hopefully they'll still be fairly frequent.
I'm going to start setting up commissions on dA soon. -w-;;
I need more money to help pay for Kumoricon! :'D
*excited*
Errm... I had a lot of fun with this chapter, though, ne. It's nice to write dialog and interactions. :'D
I felt like a bitch when I was rereading it and got to the end. -w-;;;
Nywaha.... but he'll cheer up soon, so no worries. 8'D;;;
Pub-Pub-Pub and Go~ Fish and Chips~ *sings*
Okay, sorry, I'm ending this now. *headdesk*
SEE YA SOON! 8'D;;