First Moon...

[joely_jo]

This has been a labour of love (and hate) for about the last three months. To be honest, it's been a bit of a monster for me from start to finish. Originally, it began life as a writing exercise/drabble inspired by the poem ‘Words, Wide Night’ by Carol Ann Duffy, but I kept feeling there was more I wanted to explore, so decided to take it that bit

Comments

[jadeddiva]

Cute and well-written. Personally, I'm not a fan of having Tonks stay when Remus transforms due to canon-issues, but it was a good read nonetheless.

[joely_jo]

Thanks. Glad you enjoyed it. It was really just a jaunt of the imagination though, so I'm not surprised you've found something that doesn't match with canon. I'm afraid I can be a bit of a canon-hijacker, but it's usually quite unwitting. I don't have a particularly good memory for small details, and occasionally I slip up. Which canon-issues are you thinking of (just to set me straight!)?

[jadeddiva]

I think I have a hard time with Tonks staying for a transformation (not the transformation itself, which you handled beautifully). Something about Tonks and the wolf face to face, and the wolf being totally subdued by Wolfsbane just doesn't work for me - maybe it's the stress placed on how werewolves don't know the difference between friend or foe, and while Wolfsbane allows Remus to keep his head during transformations, it just doesn't click for me. That doesn't mean that you didn't write a lovely piece - which I've said before. Someone else said it right -it's the best transformation piece I've read.

[joely_jo]

I think I know what you mean. The idea that Remus could just curl up in his office and wait for the full moon to pass seemed very convenient really... That was partly why I decided to write this after Snape had been removed from the equation, because I could give a reason why Wolfsbane was no longer the perfect solution it has been portrayed as. It somehow seemed more interesting (and believable, in my opinion) to have a more-wolf-than-man situation playing out than having a gamboling puppy-like werewolf licking Tonks' face.

[scarlett71177]

You know what the worst parts of your stories are? The last two words: The End. lol

Your work is so gorgeous. Your prose is amazing; it's so smooth and sensitive. The pace is always effortless, and before I know it I've read the entire thing. I think you could write a saga length work and I'd still want more, or want to re-read it all over again. Dialog and characters are perfect and believable.

I think this is probably one of the best and most believable 'Transformation' pieces I've ever read. You've made my day.

♥
Amy

[joely_jo]

Oh my - I'm flattered and very pleased you enjoyed it. I always really wanted to write a transformation story because I think that the detail has often been avoided... but I quickly discovered why, cos this was a real monster to write!

[scarlett71177]

I agree with you, I do think that details have been avoided in transformation pieces, and there are so many variables and different ideas regarding what is 'normal' and 'acceptable' and I'm sure that's a little frustrating. I'll maul the emotional stuff, but I have no desire to write something this complicated in this ship- I'll leave that to the masters. ;-)

[ladyhelen]

Brilliant :)

[joely_jo]

Why thank you, me dear! (do you like the background?!)

[ladyhelen]

Oooh, very pretty :) Did Trin manage to make sense of what I couldn't?

[joely_jo]

Not heard from her... :(

[jennocide]

So beautiful! I loved it!

[joely_jo]

Thank you very much. Glad you enjoyed it.

[daylightsparks]

I just clicked over here from the LJ comm. This is very nice, vivid and well-written. I just wrote a similar story so it was interesting to compare your take with mine. It's like Rashomon - everyone has a slightly different take on it. ;) Anyway, good work, and I'd like to read more of your stuff.

[joely_jo]

Ooh. Chuck over a link yours will you? I'm intrigued. I have written plenty of other bits... There all on my lj, you just might have to dig around for a bit. And of course, thank you v. much for the feedback!

[daylightsparks]

Oops, I posted a link to my story on wotcherwerewolf but haven't posted it on wolfandlady yet... I will do so.