Flight 109 - Destination: First Love [Chapter 15]

[jmonogatari]

AUTHOR'S NOTE: As always, SUPER SORRY for the SUPER LATE update. I don't have RL business in my defense right now. All I can say is inspiration for this chapter hasn't visited me until today. I don't want to update hastily and regret it later after I posted it. I really wish I can tell this story the best way I can. So I guess I am kinda being

Comments

[mikaa22]

Uh oh. So much Jun hate in the comments. Except for Raene coz we are on the same ship. HAHA! :) Ohhh, thank you for the dedication. *giggles* I am just really happy that you updated. No need to feel guilt! Haha.

First off, I saw this last night and as I started reading the first 2 paragraphs, my heart starts to ache. It is just so sad! *cries* So I didn't continue reading and decided to sleep but grrrr, I'm battling in my bed whether to read or not and in the end, I got my phone, opened your journal and read. Heartbreaking. That's the only word that can describe this chapter. Not just for Jun but also for Minako and Rei.

I think I understand why Jun can't decide and that's why I am not hating on him. I think if only Minako agrees to be with him again, he'll definitely choose her. But Minako ask him to let her go and be with Rei that's why he's with her now. Obviously, Jun's heart still belongs to Minako, a big part of it or maybe even his whole heart still belongs to her. Like what you said, it is on slumber for seven years and now it woke up and still yearns for that same person.

I love how unselfish Minako is. It would took so much courage to let go of someone you love dearly and yet she manages to do so, without shedding a single tear. She has matured so much from the cheerful, happy-go-lucky Minako seven years ago.

As for Rei, this is the first time that I didn't find her annoying. lol. Somehow, I understand why she can't let go of Jun and continuously be in such in-denial state. They had the perfect relationship and all of a sudden it starts to crumble. Rei tends to block things in her mind and only allow the thoughts she wanted to hear or see.

Now I'm wondering what will happen when Rei comes back to Hollywood and Jun is left in Tokyo, where Minako is. *grins*

Lastly, can I just say that your writing technique is amazing! It amaze me how 3/4 of this update is written in narration and it is wonderfully written! I hate writing narrations. lol. Mainly because, narrations demands a lot of thinking and processing and all that stuff. So two thumps up for you! :DD

Thank you for sharing and I can't wait for the next one! :)

[mikaa22]

And this has turned into an essay. Haha! ^____^

[jmonogatari]

This chap sure is angsty right? I am kinda depressed after writing it XD I don't know if it is the right chapter to dedicate to you but this is all I got now.

The truth is, you got it right. I intended myself that Jun himself doesn't have a choice in the first place. It is not a question of who's to choose anymore, even though I don't verbally written it out loud in the fic. It is a question of man against situation that envelopes the fic right now and how the man has to go through it. Beneath on my complicated writing style, the plot is actually that simple :D LOL

I am so glad someone recognizes how hard it is to write those damn narrations! LOL
I am not fond of writing it myself (you are right, it needs so much effort LOL), but I kinda need to to do that to make this chapter become the way it is now. And as my background is writing screenplays, novel-like writing is especially hard for me to do (not to mention english is my second language)

Even tho, this morning I reread some earlier chapters of this fic (skimming through will be more accurate tho), I kinda worried that I've strayed from the tone of this fic too far with this chap. LOL In a way this chap is more alike in terms of style and tone to Chap 12 (the mushy2 diary) and that chap when Sho is the lead (the price tag, i forgot the number) LOL

So i am really glad you like the long narration. I know it is harder and less fun to read as well compares to dialogues. Thank you for the compliment, but yet I still have much to learn and practice in matters of writing technique.

Okay. Yeah this has turned into essays. I think we took fanfictions too seriously. LOL

On a lighter note I know why you don't find Rei annoying for once in this chap. The girl doesn't say anything at all! XD

[mikaa22]

It is angsty but I don't think it's bad news. And don't worry, I don't think you strayed away with this chapter. :)

Now I just realized that Rei didn't say a word! But I like what she did in the end. LOL. Finally the girl comes to her senses! HAHA! :D

I usually don't get carried away with a fanfic but you got me here! XD I'm hooked since the first one! Maybe because I also like the way you write. :))

[jmonogatari]

So relieved that you think I don't stray away! LOL
I'm so flattered by your compliments, really! Thank you!
Here, I give you Momo running into your arms XD




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