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amyamy April 17 2009, 04:15:25 UTC
So, I'm actually really behind and haven't had a chance to read in weeks. Tonight I have time to myself (yay!) so I totally came here first.

From ch 7:
-I love the idea of Paula having worked with Busby Berkeley. It fits so so so well.
-It's so amazingly sweet the Simon's so very anxious about the idea of Ryan going to France. Very glad he talked him out of it...
-And I once again find myself in awe of the easy naturalness of your dialog, particularly with small David. It all just flows.
-Continuing to be all gung-ho about Kim and Robinson. Geeky cuteness ftw!
-And have I mentioned how much I LOVE all the show descriptions. The music choices, of course, but you also do excellent staging descriptions. So good!
-ZOMG THE EX!!!

Ch 8:
-How badly do I want to know what happened to Simon in WWI? SO BADLY. You've done an excellent job of laying this background out, feeding it to us in tantalizing little bites. (And, as an aside, the idea that part of why Ryan likes Simon so much is that he's a challenge is adorable.)
-The dance is pure brilliance, no question. I really like how you can get the physicality of the motion across without bogging down in technicality. And Nigel and Paula dancing together = fabulous

ch 9:
-The bombing of London had me doing serious meebles. You do an excellent job of capturing the fear and tension, and I think snogging in the tunnels is entirely the appropriate response.
-YOU KILLED PAULA!!!!!!! And the funeral and Robinson's letter to Kim totally made me cry...

-hugs- This is all so fabulous, darling. I love it all, seriously.

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jlh April 23 2009, 13:50:39 UTC
7-Everyone really picked up on that scene with Simon and Ryan. I do think Simon is sweet, except you can't actually write him that way directly of course. Small David pretty much talks like Andy Hardy-I had to make him have grown up mostly in the states, or I never would have been able to write him. And anyway, IRL in 2009 he talks like Andy Hardy anyway! Oh D Hernandez, so heroic, so olive-skinned.

8-You know me well enough to know that you will absolutely find out, and so will Ryan, eventually. I think it was doing all those dance scenes in EWFS, and Ely's advice, that helped me to figure out how to write dance scenes, but I'm glad I had the videos to show people what those dances actually looked like! But thanks!

9-Ryan and Simon snogging in the shelter was one of the first scenes that came to me when I was sketching out the fic, so I'm glad that it still worked. And I'm glad (?) that Paula's death affected people so much. Kim and Robinson-oh them.

Thank you so much! I am so glad you're enjoying the fic, and your comments mean a lot!

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