Honeydew Syndrome Poetry Entries

[jinsunpyo_18]

Here are some entries I have for the Honeydew Syndrome contest, poetry. Please give me any input you can, especially on Not Enough Time poems #1 and #3, and Creep poem #2

Not Enough Time:
POV: 1st person, Jay, many years down the road

I find the need to apologize for last night.

After a long day at the office,
sweaty, jostling crowds on the bus home
you

Comments

[solidbaby]

I really like them all, but I think that my definite favourites would have to be 'Consummation' and 'Creep'. They're both beautiful. Very well done!

[azuness]

I'm pretty damn sure the third one, Consummation, is my favorite. I really love how the poetry there flows and just describes the feeling of the person you like, touching you :'> so sweet <3

also Creep is very intimate :'> just making me continue to support the Jay/Charles pairing <3 and I also really love the last one. It's an interesting concept on how Charles views Jay and you described it beautifully

;w; <3 btw thx again for changing the settings on you LJ so that I could read! I really appreciate it <3