Lies [part two]

Oct 10, 2009 22:40

Part two is up. I like to polish obsessively, hopefully it won't be like this in future.

3088 words

(Ended up chopping a part up to post separately on jorge_callas' advice, but I think it reads quite well this way too.)

Feelings are so painful to have, how they twist and turn inside, clanging and sloshing with all the chaos of the distant sea! Yunho wishes he were totally without them. )

yoochun, lies, yunho, fanfic, multi-part

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naeve14 October 11 2009, 06:24:32 UTC
This chapter is more like Yunho's reflection on everything that had happened, from a long time ago until the one recently, his encounter with Yoochun. The one that unsettled him, racking chaos in his almost perfect systematic life. Shaking up his belief and blurring the thin line that separate right and wrong from his perspective.

Yunho is like a reflection of most homophobic people, thinking that the subject and the people living in that strange ambiguous world as gross and unacceptable, but when one of them manage to pull at his heartstings without he even realized it, it turns his life upside down, struggling and arguing with himself, what is right and what is wrong. There's no absolute right or wrong when one is in love, and Yunho was obviously in love, no matter how much he wanted to deny it.

And Yoochun was like one of the most unfortunate character, a forgotten heroine that was denied of his desire and to dream of having someone who would accept him as he is. He falls in love, but then as the one that he loved realized the truth of the things that he kept all to himself, everything were thrown back to him and for once, I am glad that you made him as a strong character that probably had experience the same thing a lot that when Yunho broke it off with him, he took it with stride and move on with his life.

I'm glad that Yunho went and meet Yoochun again, trying to see the person that made him fell in love with as the real person, Yoochun is. And I am glad that he recognized all the little things that made Yoochun, the Yoochun that he fell for.

Overall, I can't wait for your next installment. And thank you for actually responding to my shameless request for you to update, hhhhheeeee!!

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jinsung October 11 2009, 12:21:33 UTC
Well, thanks for reading, and this part was written quite some time ago just that I like to keep editing and editing.

I'm glad that you appreciate the story and took the time to tell me what you think of it. I don't like to tell people what to think of what I've written, I'll give a bit of a hint here that pretty important to the story...Yunho's not homophobic.

And Yoochun did do some things wrong.

:)

I was glad to accede to your request.

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naeve14 October 11 2009, 12:35:03 UTC
Yunho's not homophobic

That's good to know, coz I got a bit misunderstood at the way he behaved when he came to realization that Yoochun is a man. Well, if I'm not mistaken, he called Yoochun as monster, or something, which made me a bit disappointed with Yunho.

Thanks for clarifying that one for me *smiles*

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jinsung October 11 2009, 13:29:22 UTC
Well, it's because it was a lie, and also because most men don't masquerade as women. ;)

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naeve14 December 4 2009, 00:35:10 UTC
it has been such a long time right?

I thought that you are not gonna update anymore, but i guess you will update, soon?

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jinsung December 4 2009, 07:01:15 UTC
Well, the next installment is halfway written but then the characters do something weird and now I'm having a hard time making them honest to themselves.

I'm writing a ghost story and drabbles to keep the groove going.

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jinsung December 4 2009, 07:01:55 UTC
definitely i will finish it. :)

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