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Fic: With My Body, I Thee Worship

Aug 18, 2008 21:47

Title: With My Body, I Thee Worship
Challenge prompt: 9. "I laughed so hard, I nearly cried"... --
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twinsarein August 18 2008, 15:55:47 UTC

Wow! This was amazing. I'll have to go start this story from the beginning now. What a wonderful piece on the evolution of a relationship. The illustrations that were included were wonderful (I loved Bruce in a frilly apron *_*). I love the hints of Kryptonian culture you have included here, so interesting and different. Oh yeah, the sex was yummy, both in the shower and at the end. Excellent.

jij August 19 2008, 04:06:58 UTC

It's taken me surprisingly long to get back to this! I definitely have some more ideas I want to explore as well...

The traditional Kryptonian apron cracked me up to write, and Rai totally made it even funnier than it was in my head originally. She's awesome that way. :)

Glad you liked! I hadn't written anything NC-17 for a while and wanted me keep in practice, lol...

laramoon August 18 2008, 17:23:37 UTC

Oh, how I should not have been reading this at work. *giggles* But, hot damn that was good! hee! Totally made my day better -- all four hours of benchmarks of it. *lol* Thank you! (my mind turned into a massive puddle of goo, you realize, else I'd probably be able to make intelligent comments - I'm so not right now. LOL! But dammit, I'm happy!)

jij August 19 2008, 04:11:20 UTC

Oh, how I should not have been reading this at work. *giggles*

Especially not with the awesome illustrations right there, lol. *looks and drools some more herself*

I really had fun imagining where the cultural misunderstanding would lead them, lol, and it was a joy to write them. I'm so glad you liked it!

icarus_chained August 18 2008, 17:32:54 UTC

Damn, damn, damn! How hot can you get???Whew! Gods, this was gorgeous. Waterfall showers, and tickling, and shian, and taking it slow, and Bruce being attentive and sweet, and Kal being trusting and willing, and the *mindsphere*! *adores madly*

Favourite bits ... hmmmm. This one:
In any other man, Kal might have called his tone 'whining'. From Bruce, however, Kal would describe it as ... taut with manly annoyance
*claps hands in delight* Oh yes, Kal, you are indeed smitten! And so very, very *Bruce*. *cackles* Frilly apron and all!
And then:
knowing he'd never trusted anyone as much as this man, this Terran, his mate from beyond the stars
Just ... gorgeous, and so perfectly them.

Lovely!

jij August 19 2008, 04:14:56 UTC

I had so much fun with this one! It was just going to be two scenes--the first and last, of course--but it seemed Kal would need more time to come to trust Bruce, so it kind of expanded from there, and I really enjoyed finding ways for them to bond.

And I really enjoyed the lines you picked out, so thank you! There's something really fun and disorienting about Bruce being the alien that I'm hoping to explore more later...

starsandsea August 18 2008, 18:33:07 UTC

Bruce intended to give him a surfeit of caresses to make up for lost time.

Yep. You do that Bruce. ;)

"I'm already committed to being a total pervert now, because I'm certainly not giving up the...what was that word you used for it?"

"Cuddling," said Bruce, smiling despite himself.

Awww! *huggles Kal* He's adorable! :D

Kal listened to the muttered sounds coming from the tiny kitchen. He had learned a lot of English before his marriage, but his lessons hadn't covered any of the words Bruce was saying. Apparently his husband hadn't been exaggerating his lack of culinary prowess.

*giggles a lot*

It was possible, Kal thought ruefully, that he was just a bit smitten with his new husband.

Hee, I think it's more than 'just a bit', Kal... :p

He was wearing the heirloom El family apron, with the traditional ruffles.

*snorts* *giggles a lot* Oh, that - and Rai's picture of it - made my day. Thank you. :)

"Let me see..." Kal's fingers flickered through the coding. "A wealthy scientist--maybe that's why she changed her mind, she ( ... )

jij August 19 2008, 04:19:39 UTC

Hee, I think it's more than 'just a bit', Kal... :p

He's pretty totally schmoopy about him. :)

*snorts* *giggles a lot* Oh, that - and Rai's picture of it - made my day. Thank you. :)

I giggled writing it, but Rai's picture made me fall out of my chair. So funny!

Oooh. That is not good news.

It's not! I'm...not sure what's going to happen, lol. But it's not good news.

I hope there is going to be more stories set in this universe! :)

I'm hoping to write a couple more, actually! I have a couple of stray images I want to turn into stories...I just have to decide how Lex fits in, lol...

bradygirl_12 August 18 2008, 18:34:18 UTC

Whee! Kal is now thoroughly debauched! Good boy! ;)

Beautiful story, Jen. I really like this AU you've created. Kryptonian culture is endlessly fascinating. And, oh, will Kal get a shock when he visits Earth, eh? For more than just a quick look around this time. :)

The sphere scene was just beautiful with the description of colors and their minds joining, and of course I like the physical joining at the end! :) Poor Kal is a complete pervert now. ;)

Bruce in the frilly apron is wonderful! I'll have to go into detail over at Rai's LJ. LOL!

I like the way that Alfred is taking care of both his boys. He knows that they'd both starve if they have to rely on Bruce cooking anything! :)

Kal better keep his sex life private. Most Kryptonians would be appalled, but some might be delighted that an important personage is doing things they wish they could do, or are doing in private. :)

And Lex will marry a Kryptonian? Ooh, very bad for our boys!

jij August 19 2008, 04:23:36 UTC

Kryptonian culture is endlessly fascinating. And, oh, will Kal get a shock when he visits Earth, eh? For more than just a quick look around this time. :)

It will probably be an eye-opener! Poor Kal, lol...

Bruce in the frilly apron is wonderful! I'll have to go into detail over at Rai's LJ. LOL!

She made it so much funnier than I had even imagined it, lol. The toes! They kill me...

Most Kryptonians would be appalled, but some might be delighted that an important personage is doing things they wish they could do, or are doing in private. :)

I'm curious how much of an "underground" there is for perverted cuddlers in Kryptonian society! I doubt Kal's totally alone there...*ponders*

bradygirl_12 August 20 2008, 01:47:02 UTC

Most Kryptonians would be appalled, but some might be delighted that an important personage is doing things they wish they could do, or are doing in private. :)

I'm curious how much of an "underground" there is for perverted cuddlers in Kryptonian society! I doubt Kal's totally alone there...*ponders*

Since the Kryptonians are very much like Earth's past Victorians, I picture all kinds of a really deep underground of smutty (for them) books and vids and such. ;)

Underground Perverted Cuddlers, Unite! ;)