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Weighty Ghost

Nov 22, 2010 01:11

Title: Weighty Ghost
Author: jendavis
Fandom/Pairing: SGA, John/Ronon
Rating: PG
Disclaimer: Don't own, don't sue, don't take this too seriously.
Summary: Written for hc_bingo prompt "Sensory Deprivation."

( Weighty Ghost )

hc bingo, sheppard/dex, sga

Comments 10

trovia November 22 2010, 09:26:29 UTC

Aw, this is very painful to read, at first, and then it gets very cute. The paragraphs from Ronon's POV are very chilling and vivid.

jendavis November 23 2010, 05:21:50 UTC

I was actually a little worried that I fluffed it up a bit too much at the end, but the first draft notes had another thousand rounds of angst thrown in that I just wasn't feeling up to typing out. :) Ah, well. Glad you liked!

gaffsie November 22 2010, 12:14:17 UTC

Oh god, poor Ronon. You really succeeded in making his experiences seem like pure agony.

jendavis November 23 2010, 05:22:51 UTC

Thanks, dearie!

Yeah, I keep setting out to heap more abuse on Sheppard, and can only rarely bring myself to do it, I don't know why that is... :)

rubygirl29 November 22 2010, 13:50:49 UTC

Ahhh .... John and Ronon. I'm happy. I love the unspoken communication, the fear, the way they need to be with each other to heal. They are perfect together. Nice way to start off the week.

jendavis November 23 2010, 05:24:00 UTC

So glad you liked, dear! I meant to get this up last week, but for some reason, RL has decided that I'm supposed to be doing things like going to class and work and sleeping. *shakes head* I really need to renegotiate my contract with reality. :)

me_ya_ri November 22 2010, 15:45:39 UTC

Wow, that was every bit as painful as I expected it to be. That's a special sort of hell that Ronon went through. *cuddles him* Wonderful story in that really hurty sort of way--thank you for sharing!

jendavis November 23 2010, 05:25:08 UTC

Thank you!

The funny thing is, compared to the first draft, I wound up letting him off the hook fairly easily. I guess there's only so much torture I can put him through. :)

fearless5555 November 26 2010, 23:55:28 UTC

Poor Ronon! You did a great job of making an invincible man seem vulnerable while not making him seem weak. The ending was perfect

jendavis November 27 2010, 04:20:33 UTC

Thank you! The first draft, which I totally hated, turned him into this whimpering, OOC manchild. It wasn't cool. Then again, that's what the delete button is for, I guess. :)

Also, completely unrelated: your icon is really making me miss BVTS...It's been years. I feel a massive rewatch coming on. :)