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[jendavis]

Title: Flash of the Blade
Rating: PG-13
By: Jenda Vis
Spoilers: Up through Reunion
Pairing: Sheppard/Dex
Genre: Drama, WIP
Warnings: None.
Disclaimer: Don't own, don't sue, don't take this too seriously.
Summary: Sheppard can't figure Ronon out. Or his motives.
A/N: I'm really not thrilled with this chapter, so if you've got any concrit you could

Comments

[rubygirl29]

Okay, I don't know why you aren't happy with this! Not a lot of action, but you got everybody back together, and Ronon back with Sheppard. Yay! And a bit of a tease in that shower scene ... there had damn well better be another one in the future when Ronon is all better! *g*

Once again, another cliffhanger! Something's off and I'm trying to figure out who had their fingers around Ronon's throat. And is that (person, entity, whatever) going to make an attempt on Sheppard, too?

Keep writing! But you deserve a day off. No hostage taking on Easter. Just a pic of Ronon in the sunshine. :-)

[scout_lover]

Reads fine to me, too. You've done a great job of creating a sense of, "Yeah, we're all back together and things will work out, but how do we get there from here?" I can see and feel John's unease very clearly.

And now there's a wrench in the works. Somebody's clearly *very* worried about what Ronon knows! Hmmm…

Again, I'm on the edge of my seat. But don't worry about me, I'll just perch here … and wait …

[rubygirl29]

Hope there's room for me on the perch with you!

[jendavis]

Right on. I'm just not thrilled about all the "this happened, then this happened, then this happened" stuff, but it's getting to the part of the story where if I don't track it properly, the ending will be totally blown. *shrugs*

wryting storiezz iz haard. *staggers off to find coffee*

[esteefee]

OMG, motherfuckers! Sheppard is gonna FLAY someone with one of Ronon's knives. And I'm gonna watch.

[jendavis]

I'm seriously glad you posted here, because I scanned up to see what you were talking about, and apparently my editing brain is turned on like whoa! Found two more typos all by myself!!!

[esteefee]

It's amazing how you can look at something 50x and not see them and then after a little time passes...whammo.

[jendavis]

No kidding!

It's good though. Needed a kick in the pants to get my editing glasses back on (for this, and for the Jayne/Ronon chapter I hope to have posted later tonight). So again, gracias!