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To Find Shamballa: Chapter 4 part two

Aug 05, 2007 14:00

Transylvania, 1921-Thirty minutes before Alfons woke up

Noa wasn’t sure when she fell asleep or when she woke up-or if she even fell asleep at all, but was rather dazing out, but the next thing she noticed was a full tray of food at her feet, a full tray for food at the man’s feet, and the distinct sound of soft ( Read more... )

edxalfons, to find shamballa, fma

Comments 11

esteltinuviel August 5 2007, 19:56:52 UTC

*squee* I love the ending line! Lol, it's gonna be interesting seeing how that works out. I keep thinking elricest when Ed thinks of Al but Hei has already fallen for Ed it looks like, he's all nervous about the beds and stuff. Hehe, how far are we to some romance?

But another great chapter! I loved Noa in this!

inuyashanohime August 5 2007, 20:21:42 UTC

XDDDD

Yes, things are going to be very interesting from here on out, I'll tell you what. I already have the opening of Chapter 5 set in my head...I just gotta write it down XD

You know, I was kinda thinking Elricest when I wrote the bit about Ed thinking of Al too. *fails* ...WHAT ARE YOU DOING TO ME?! YOU ARE CORRUPTING ME!!!!!

Hei's in the opening stages...Hehehehe. So many years of dreaming of the same person would make you attached, in a way.

I knew I loved you,
Before I met you~

*shot*

But it won't be *too* much longer. The two gotta actually start getting along before they can have romance going on, y'know. XD

But trust me. You'll get your romantic Ed x Hei Dorkiness romance soon enough. :3

XD but yay! I'm glad my Chibi!Noa is pulling her weight and becoming likable!!!

esteltinuviel August 5 2007, 23:16:54 UTC

Lol, I am quite corrupting. But it's hard to not think of EdxAl when that's your favorite pairing and the movie doesn't exactly make it a non-canon piece. XD I can still see it onesided on Al's part, but Ed's making me think there!

Yeah, I can see that Ed and Hei will ease into it a bit, I mean, it has to be realistic and so far we've got a long way to go it looks like if this is a movie fic.

And Noa is adorable, I can see her becoming friends with Ed because she wouldn't NOT believe him. Hei will believe him, but think they're both crazy and wish it wasn't true. Noa won't judge it at all.

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inuyashanohime August 5 2007, 20:40:45 UTC

Dear Anne,

Thank you, and ILU too. <3333

:3 *snugs*

wen_renee August 5 2007, 21:20:15 UTC

You should have heard the triumphant "HA!" I had on that last line... haha. Even scared my dog.

Geez, Jen, this is really taking off. Love little Noa's depth, as well as your take on Ed. Seeing him so homesick really stuck out at me.

I'm sooo enjoying this. ^_^

*waits patiently for chapter 5*

inuyashanohime August 5 2007, 21:32:34 UTC

XDDDD Yeah, I just couldn't resist making there only be one bed...though...to be honest, without there being one bed, the story can't progress the way I want it to...:3

*blush* Taking off, huh? *blush*

Yeah, I wanted Noa to be more than that typical 'kid' character, and there's a lot more to her than meets the eye...even now, I've only scratched the surface with her character. If things go as planned, she's going to be pivotal to the story later on.

Ed's homesickness only gets worse as time goes on, let me tell you. Just wait until he finds out that Alfons knows about the 'other' world, and dreams about what's going on with his little brother on the other side of the gate? Oh man, oh man...

XD Glad you're enjoying this, though! It makes me happy to know that my stories are loved :3

secretfreaky August 7 2007, 18:00:26 UTC

This is, this is....wow. I can feel their uneasiness and mutual attraction. The anxiety is almost cute in their self-doubt and hesitation. More, soon, please?

inuyashanohime August 8 2007, 16:08:42 UTC

*blush* Of course! I've been working on Chapter 5 for a while, though the opening is starting to piss me off (it's not working right! *whines*)...

Oh! You don't mind that I added you to my flist, do you? Um...you seem like a really interesting person, so...Gah *blushflail*

secretfreaky August 9 2007, 12:37:26 UTC

*blushes* Thank you for adding me to your list! I'm really not that interesting. I do enjoy reading and I love reading FMA yaoi (hmmmmm, does that mean something?). I appreciate you taking the time to reply to my comments and look forward to more of your creative abilities.

inuyashanohime August 9 2007, 20:46:22 UTC

*blush* Well, Um...ah...*blushes more* Gah!

But I like responding to comments! I know for a while before I was pretty lazy with comments, but now that I'm diligent with them, I find responding loads of fun :3

*blush* But I write a lot, and my normal (and ficjournal) is plenty proof of that XD

hiroshichansama January 29 2008, 07:50:12 UTC

omg.. one bed? dont tell me someone's gonna sleep on the floor.. unless.. *smirks evilly*