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Arashi - ohno/nino/jun - Slow Kisses

Jul 11, 2008 01:57

Title: Slow Kisses
Fandom: Arashi
Pairing: ohno/nino/jun
Rating: R
Word count: 3105
Notes: Written for i_am_zan in the jthreesome fic exchange. Actually, it really felt like I was writing this for myself. :3

( Slow Kisses )

pairing: ohno/nino/jun, length: oneshot, fandom: arashi

Comments 37

waxrose July 10 2008, 23:21:26 UTC

Ajdjflamdlanflk;jdk I had a sneaking suspicion that you wrote this one and OH MY GOD, so good. This was totally, in my opinion, the best fic to come out of this exchange. ♥ ♥ ♥

i_am_zan July 11 2008, 01:58:33 UTC

you know I was down to three guesses I thought it was one of you two. Hee! I was nearly right. ^____^

starsystems July 11 2008, 20:56:08 UTC

THANK YOU. ♥

sundaecone July 11 2008, 00:17:03 UTC

NO WORDS CAN EXPRESS MY AWE FOR THIS FIC. NO WORDS!!

After his breathing has slowed, he watches how Nino goes to Ohno and pushes him gently down on the bed and kisses him slowly, thoroughly. Their love is instinctive, something that they have probably never put into words. Jun likes the idea of sliding together without resistance. He thinks it expands beyond sex, that it's true for all five of them. It's love that you don't have to explain, because it's always there, in the touches and the words and the silences and the spaces between them. It never mattered if they saw each other regularly or if they didn't meet for months. The connection still remained.
Favorite paragraph in this fic. Hands down.

starsystems July 11 2008, 20:57:47 UTC

:D Thanks for reading!

rinalin July 11 2008, 01:00:23 UTC

This is wonderfully, beautifully written. This is really my favorite kind of smut, without all the gratiuity, where there's meaning between the words. Not only did you manage 3some smut with three guys (OMGthepronouns!!) but you described, perfectly, that unspeakable sort of love.

Fabulous work!

starsystems July 11 2008, 21:37:30 UTC

Thank you! I don't remember writing threesome fic before this, so I was a little nervous. xD;

cupcake4mafia July 11 2008, 01:23:19 UTC

super-long comment, but...
Ohno greets him from his spot on the floor, a can of beer in his hand, looking like he belongs there just as much as the stack of game consoles next to the TV or Nino's favourite guitar standing in the corner.
Fantastic image.

Nino watching Ohno eat is also great. They're a hovering kind of pair ^__^

he slips effortlessly into Jun's lap, with all the ease and fluid movements of a dancer, and suddenly Jun is warm all over.
Mmmmffff. Nice. I like the "Hello," too- very Ohno.

"What?" Jun says, raising an eyebrow. "You think I'm going to give you a blowjob?"

"Since you're already down there..." Nino trails off, smirking.

"In the middle of your kitchen?"
Ha! Come on now, Nino. Jun's a classy broad.

I love all this soft, slightly unnerving laughter, Jun's insecurity (and, of course, just enough hot sex)

He wakes Ohno up gently, with slow kisses, and then he pinches Nino's nose closed so that he wakes up sputtering, gasping for air.Aaaand fantastic ending ( ... )

starsystems July 11 2008, 21:41:08 UTC

Thank you!
Heh, that line about Ohno in Nino's living room is my personal favourite. x3;

Jun's a classy broad.
LOL! He wouldn't be able to eat in Nino's kitchen ever again.

angelembryo July 11 2008, 01:44:45 UTC

For some reason I normally dread any fic involving the pairing/threesome/whatever of Nino x Jun. I'm not really sure why; maybe because people tend to depict them both as cold and calculating and constantly out to one-up each other... like there's almost never any actual love between them at all, but just ego trips and power plays. And I guess I prefer a bit of genuine feeling mixed in with my smut. :P

But in this fic, they're PERFECT. You captured that inexplicable kind of love so perfectly, and included enough affection to make it sweet and (dare I say it?) heartwarming, while still managing to keep them in character and not overloading the sap factor.

No, I didn't forget about Ohno's involvement, but lack of genuine love and honesty rarely seems to be a problem with him anyway, so of course his role here was already perfect. Anyway, I ramble.

Amazing. I commend you x1000000. ♥

starsystems July 11 2008, 21:52:22 UTC

Well, Nino/Jun is kind of my OTP. Even if I can easily see that they could be an affectionless pairing (and I like that kind of angsty fic too) I still think they can also be written in a loving relationship. They just aren't sappy with each other. I'm happy you think I managed them without too much sap. :D

(hah, I kind of suspect that my Jun and Nino behaved themselves because Ohno was there too. xD)

Thank you!