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Prompt 7: Today your heart, tomorrow the world - Team What If

Aug 08, 2010 13:20

Title: Seishun Amigo
Rating: PG13
Pairing: Kame/Yamapi
Summary: Debuts can be so fragile.
Prompt: Today, your heart, tomorrow, the world.
Notes: Unending thanks to the mods for being so patient with me, and to M for giving me the idea for this :D It was plotted and mostly written before the big fandom announcements, so please don't hate me for it . ( Read more... )

team: what if, round 2: prompt 07

Comments 4

still_ciircee August 8 2010, 22:00:06 UTC

I really love the slow progression of this story--from the disinterest to the animosity to the tentative frienship to the real friendship to the love. It was beautifully paced and believable. I love Jin in this, too, and the way you showed his importance to both of them. Strangely I think my favorite part is when Yamapi was going to kiss drunken Kame and it was Kame who pulled back. That's a nice touch.

kaminikaku August 14 2010, 12:09:18 UTC

I liked your take on this, I loved the characterisation of Pi and Kame, and I really enjoyed the way you gave them time to change and develop as both individuals and as workmates. Very well done :)

rolling_scone August 15 2010, 19:48:20 UTC

this is absolutely lovely. *__________________________*

katmillia September 6 2010, 22:13:51 UTC

Okay yeah I SUCK BALLS at like, actually reading anything in a timely manner but OH MY GOD WOW. Okay, Kame/Pi is like, one of my biggest little happy places and you totally just took them and made it work, made them sort of rubbing up against each other but still being them. Shuuji to Akira was alongside the rest, and when the other bits finally fell apart, it was in a way you knew would actually happen within the agency. The way they just sort of fell together, unf. ♥ My heart! I'm like, you know, years late with this, but seriously, this was just lovely.