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Prompt 5: Break ups are good for the soul - Team What If

Aug 06, 2010 20:17

Title: Kaleidoscope
Rating: PG
Pairing: Takaki Yuya X Yabu Kouta
Summary: When Hey!Say!JUMP is suddenly suspended, Takaki Yuya continues to perform with Kiriyama Akito and Nakama Junta, all the while dealing with a changing relationship with his boyfriend, Yabu Kouta.
Prompt: Break ups are good for the soul
Warnings: Minor language.
Notes: Writing ( Read more... )

team: what if, round 2: prompt 05

Comments 3

still_ciircee August 7 2010, 14:11:14 UTC

XD I admit, I had to google HSJ to get a mental image of these guys. That aside, I really liked this story. I like the struggle of things suddenly changing, how things fell apart both quickly and slowly. Professionally and personally. But I think the thing I like the most is that there wasn't a happy-let's-get-back-together ending--but that Yuya was still happy at the end, that the bitterness and anger was gone--that just felt so much more real to me and I love that it happened that way.

kaminikaku August 14 2010, 13:54:59 UTC

I have some idea of who these HSJ members are, but I will admit that I am fuzzy on them. Yet, you still made me care about them, and made me sad that things had come crashing down around them. I liked the fact that you juxtaposed the time shifts as well...I think that showed how Yuya's feelings changed. Well done!

rolling_scone August 15 2010, 16:35:21 UTC

this is gorgeous, and leaves me aching, but you made it very hopeful. and KITAYAMA. ♥

I especially loved this line: Suspensions and continuations, stops and starts, endings and beginnings. Everything had to start somewhere, and nothing was forever.
YOU INVERSED IT, YOU BRILLIANT, BRILLIANT THING, YOU. quite subtle move, but to me it highlighted that there is always something new, nothing ends into complete emptiness, upon one end there is always a new beginning. <3<3<3<3