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ext_4722082 July 23 2018, 09:54:36 UTC
Good morning, Jo, love the warm up exercise. Adding a quiet place is another level to deepen our characters. Here’s a very rough working of the quiet place where the MC in my current WIP would go.

Most people walk the top of the pier. From there they can see out into the ocean and watch boats go by or people swim. Some fish off the end of the pier. I’ve heard people call it romantic, walking along the wooden boards, holding hands.

I like the underneath. Where the waves slap against the wooden posts. Where the ghost crabs dart in and out and the sand disappears beneath your feet when the wave pulls back to the ocean. This is my spot. My place to center and dream. And think about all the times the ocean has kissed the posts and left its mark. Like I want to do.

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jbknowles July 23 2018, 10:11:49 UTC
BEAUTIFUL! It's funny at about 3am I couldn't sleep and was thinking I needed to edit this post to better explain why I chose this exercise and your first line explains it perfectly. I love this entry!

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ext_4722082 July 23 2018, 12:05:49 UTC
I love the way you set up the scene by talking about the top of the pier and then bringing up to the special place beneath it. Your attention to detail made it easy for me to visualize it.

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ext_4719352 July 23 2018, 14:41:16 UTC
Martha, I love this! You make fleshing out the details look so easy!I, too, Like the way you moved us from the top to underneath. Lovely.

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dianeser July 23 2018, 17:51:47 UTC

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