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hikarikame in japanxchina

[ MY LOVE IS ONLY SHEATHED / fanfiction / T / darkfic, death, angst ]

Jan 12, 2010 20:21

I wrote a dark fic for these two a while ago, I hope you enjoy it!

Please comment or review and tell me what you think!

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5471704/1/My_Love_is_Only_Sheathed

Sequel is up!

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Relevancy, much? xotsukiyume January 13 2010, 05:32:28 UTC

No idea if this was intended or not, but I laughed at the "YA!!!!" of Japan. It was just so out-of-character and hilarious. Hello Kitty seemed odd for the setting and place, particularly since China likes Shinatty-chan more than Kitty-chan, but whatever floats your boat, I suppose.

And then the last line totally sobered me up, which is pretty impressive, seeing as how I was ROFLMAO-ing badly.

Thumbs up and hats off for the open-ended ending though, I really enjoy those more than closed endings.

Re: Relevancy, much? dreamsofdest1ny January 13 2010, 05:35:42 UTC

Er--I think the second chapter pretty much closed the ending... right?

Re: Relevancy, much? xotsukiyume January 13 2010, 05:36:32 UTC

Oh?
I don't know--I didn't notice a second chapter.

Re: Relevancy, much? dreamsofdest1ny January 13 2010, 05:38:21 UTC

It's... there...

Re: Relevancy, much? dreamsofdest1ny January 13 2010, 05:35:53 UTC

As for the Kitty-chan part, I thought it was really fitting, particularly with the soulless black eyes part! XDDD

Re: Relevancy, much? xotsukiyume January 13 2010, 05:37:14 UTC

Sure, but based on a single description, which, by the way, doesn't really describe canon!Kiku, but rather, bastard!Kiku, sure? --;;

Re: Relevancy, much? dreamsofdest1ny January 13 2010, 05:38:51 UTC

*shrugs*
Nations can be pretty bastardly at times, particularly when WWII is involved, or even WWI, if you think about it.

Re: Relevancy, much? xotsukiyume January 13 2010, 05:43:47 UTC

Hm, actually, I totally agree with that point, after WWII and everything, I don't think there's a nation that has yet to do something or another that's downright ruthless and brutal.

Re: Relevancy, much? dreamsofdest1ny January 13 2010, 05:44:40 UTC

Okay!

Re: Relevancy, much? hikarikame February 8 2010, 04:08:59 UTC

Bastardly!! -giggle-

Is bastardly a word? It should be. =D

Re: Relevancy, much? hikarikame January 14 2010, 01:32:14 UTC

Black Kiku is angst win.

And generally, when I write stuff, I just spit it all out. That's it. Very little editing, spellcheck, and then I'm done. I really should wait a few days and then go look it over.

I also need to stop adding stuf to descriptions and dialogue when I'm editing. It usually to doesn't help in my case.

Re: Relevancy, much? hikarikame January 14 2010, 01:30:34 UTC

I picked Hello Kitty for a reason. Go read Chapter 2~!

Re: Relevancy, much? xotsukiyume January 14 2010, 03:20:17 UTC

Er...
I have no idea how to say this, but I felt that the whole of chapter two, particularly your reasoning behind using Barney and Hello Kitty as plot devices seemed really forced...

Re: Relevancy, much? hikarikame January 14 2010, 03:42:38 UTC

Really? How so? I will admit that stuff just kept jumping into my mind, and I just kept adding. xpp

But I was only able to write the sequel when I heard that song. Hmm...I think I added too much stuff. Next time I'll wait a while before and take some time to edit it, instead of just writing and posting.

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