I need a moment. I need time to process that I actually finished this story. I've been reading it like I watch a series so I'm expecting a season 2 that I know won't come and I don't know how to feel???!!
Trust me or not, this was magnificent. It was indeed different from what you usually write but...how to explain? It makes sense in my head but when I try to write it, it sounds weird and confusing. Let me try...
Usually - but maybe I am wrong so do call me out on it if I am - it'd seem that you write the EXO members in an alternative universe where the story mostly focuses on the relationship of the pairings at hand - may it be platonic or romantic (this is not a bad critic!! I LOVE YOUR FICS OKAY!!!??! I'm just talking about the probable angle you took to write them!!)
This time though, it seems like you wrote the universe first and then included the characters' names? Does it make sense?
The previous fics you wrote are more romantic/love centered while this one is an action/superhero story that happens to have love relationship in the background. You wrote an universe you seem to know very well and like very much and then added other elements that you also like but that are not from this universe (exo members, dahye(?), etc) to create this masterpiece.
That might be the reason why it felt different for you to write it?
Now that was for the general thought of your work.
As for the story in itself.. NekdjiKkjhzuzk*♡~{~{•{■~♤°}}}{\■~♤} £@€^÷^÷^^@^÷£[¡\◇~[♤ There. You have it. Me being an emotional mess. TAKE RESPONSIBILITY FOR IT!!! Give me mY LIFE BACK!!!!!! I FEEL SO EMPTY ??!!!?!?!?!?!?!
As I said earlier - and just like Jess pointed it out many times - reading this story felt like watching a superhero movie/series.
Your characters are the work of God. What I mean is, as a reader, you could easily picture them in your mind with the way you described them. Funny thing is I had someone else in mind for Dahye but when I looked up who it was for real, my imagination of her wasn't actually that far off. So when I continued on reading, I wasn't thrown off by the pictures I had found out.
As for your OCs, I'm applausing you because as I said, you make it so easy for us to picture them.
And the way you balanced all of your characters throughout the story. You didn't mention one character just for the heck of it and dispose of them as if they never existed. No, you actually made a story for them and/or make them appear again later on (I am thinking of Jihoon, Soonjung and Frank). They are characters with specific roles and to be honest, doing this is not an easy feat.
Jongdae's and Dahye's relationship is to die for. These two are soulmates. Their bond is so strong and so cute. It did make me long for such a relationship. Temporarily. Of course.
Then again so is Lexie's and Baekhyun's relationship! Okay, they're far from cute but their bond is incredible !!!!!! It's already very difficult to trust people in this world but in theirs even more so as it's made of betrayal, secrets, crimes, etc. Yet, they trust each other. They have no superpowers (Baekhyun doesn't, right?) yet it feels as if they could read each other's mind. I love their dynamic. As stand alones, they are already very clever and dangerous but together they're even more so. They're complementary and that's what makes their force. It shouldn't be so but I have so much love for them!!! Because they're not people you should deal with (for your own safety) but they do have some kind of values that they respect...?
Sehun's character is still very intriguing to me. He became schizophrenic - with short(?) moments of lucidity - after injecting the serum into his body and after being killed, is that right? I admit I was quite confused when Jongdae made a trip in his mind. I mean, obviously it'd be confusing because even Sehun was most of the time but what I mean is did he always have troubles remembering who were Jongdae and Dahye or was it temporary? Because he almost always reacted favourably to Dahye (in his own way) compared to Jongdae. But if he didn't remember....? Or was it just in the beginning?
I liked that you explained why when they crossed path, there were times Sehun seemed to be the one he was back when JD and Dahye knew him but then (because of the images and the voices in his mind) he went back to a cold and scary demeanour. The sense of details you have is what made the fic feel so well wrapped up.
Can we talk about the mad bomber???? Is it just me or did he have a Joker feel to him? They could totally pass as brothers in my opinion! They're clever in their madness!! And the last scene gave me chills!! Of course he survived. OF FREAKING COURSE!!! He still hasn't make Sehun pay for killing his daughter so OF COURSE he'd make himself die in appearance only!! DAMMIT !!!!
For some reasons, I can't seem to write anything about Jongdae. Not because I have nothing to say (hell, I wanted to slap him sometimes!!! KILL THE DUDE FOR GOD'S SAKE!!!!) but, since he had his thoughts and feelings laid out for us to see, - this will seem crazy, block me - I feel like it's not my place to comment? Like you have a friend who does this and this and you're here to help and guide them but not pass a judgement because it's your friend and you know why they act this or that way... yeah..it's that kind of feeling. If not worse because we DO know his thoughts.
I'm sorry, I missed a lot of your story in my comment and I did make a long one in the end... but it was so different from what we usually read in the fandom. I feel way too invested !!!! GIVE ME MY LIFE BACK!! It's been two days since I finished reading and I still can't get Lexie's, Baekhyun's and Sehun's characters out of my head. Bur more particularly Sehun's. When I see a picture of him on my tline I think about your story! OMG GIVE ME MY LITTLE BABY BACK!!! HAHAHA
More seriously though, I wish you'd be as happy with this story as we are in awe. Seriously. This was brilliant.
Trust me or not, this was magnificent. It was indeed different from what you usually write but...how to explain? It makes sense in my head but when I try to write it, it sounds weird and confusing. Let me try...
Usually - but maybe I am wrong so do call me out on it if I am - it'd seem that you write the EXO members in an alternative universe where the story mostly focuses on the relationship of the pairings at hand - may it be platonic or romantic (this is not a bad critic!! I LOVE YOUR FICS OKAY!!!??! I'm just talking about the probable angle you took to write them!!)
This time though, it seems like you wrote the universe first and then included the characters' names? Does it make sense?
The previous fics you wrote are more romantic/love centered while this one is an action/superhero story that happens to have love relationship in the background.
You wrote an universe you seem to know very well and like very much and then added other elements that you also like but that are not from this universe (exo members, dahye(?), etc) to create this masterpiece.
That might be the reason why it felt different for you to write it?
Now that was for the general thought of your work.
As for the story in itself..
NekdjiKkjhzuzk*♡~{~{•{■~♤°}}}{\■~♤} £@€^÷^÷^^@^÷£[¡\◇~[♤
There. You have it. Me being an emotional mess. TAKE RESPONSIBILITY FOR IT!!! Give me mY LIFE BACK!!!!!! I FEEL SO EMPTY ??!!!?!?!?!?!?!
As I said earlier - and just like Jess pointed it out many times - reading this story felt like watching a superhero movie/series.
Your characters are the work of God. What I mean is, as a reader, you could easily picture them in your mind with the way you described them.
Funny thing is I had someone else in mind for Dahye but when I looked up who it was for real, my imagination of her wasn't actually that far off. So when I continued on reading, I wasn't thrown off by the pictures I had found out.
As for your OCs, I'm applausing you because as I said, you make it so easy for us to picture them.
And the way you balanced all of your characters throughout the story. You didn't mention one character just for the heck of it and dispose of them as if they never existed. No, you actually made a story for them and/or make them appear again later on (I am thinking of Jihoon, Soonjung and Frank). They are characters with specific roles and to be honest, doing this is not an easy feat.
Jongdae's and Dahye's relationship is to die for. These two are soulmates. Their bond is so strong and so cute. It did make me long for such a relationship. Temporarily. Of course.
Then again so is Lexie's and Baekhyun's relationship! Okay, they're far from cute but their bond is incredible !!!!!! It's already very difficult to trust people in this world but in theirs even more so as it's made of betrayal, secrets, crimes, etc. Yet, they trust each other. They have no superpowers (Baekhyun doesn't, right?) yet it feels as if they could read each other's mind.
I love their dynamic. As stand alones, they are already very clever and dangerous but together they're even more so. They're complementary and that's what makes their force.
It shouldn't be so but I have so much love for them!!! Because they're not people you should deal with (for your own safety) but they do have some kind of values that they respect...?
Sehun's character is still very intriguing to me. He became schizophrenic - with short(?) moments of lucidity - after injecting the serum into his body and after being killed, is that right? I admit I was quite confused when Jongdae made a trip in his mind. I mean, obviously it'd be confusing because even Sehun was most of the time but what I mean is did he always have troubles remembering who were Jongdae and Dahye or was it temporary? Because he almost always reacted favourably to Dahye (in his own way) compared to Jongdae. But if he didn't remember....? Or was it just in the beginning?
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The sense of details you have is what made the fic feel so well wrapped up.
Can we talk about the mad bomber???? Is it just me or did he have a Joker feel to him? They could totally pass as brothers in my opinion! They're clever in their madness!! And the last scene gave me chills!! Of course he survived. OF FREAKING COURSE!!! He still hasn't make Sehun pay for killing his daughter so OF COURSE he'd make himself die in appearance only!! DAMMIT !!!!
For some reasons, I can't seem to write anything about Jongdae. Not because I have nothing to say (hell, I wanted to slap him sometimes!!! KILL THE DUDE FOR GOD'S SAKE!!!!) but, since he had his thoughts and feelings laid out for us to see, - this will seem crazy, block me - I feel like it's not my place to comment? Like you have a friend who does this and this and you're here to help and guide them but not pass a judgement because it's your friend and you know why they act this or that way... yeah..it's that kind of feeling. If not worse because we DO know his thoughts.
I'm sorry, I missed a lot of your story in my comment and I did make a long one in the end... but it was so different from what we usually read in the fandom. I feel way too invested !!!! GIVE ME MY LIFE BACK!!
It's been two days since I finished reading and I still can't get Lexie's, Baekhyun's and Sehun's characters out of my head. Bur more particularly Sehun's. When I see a picture of him on my tline I think about your story! OMG GIVE ME MY LITTLE BABY BACK!!! HAHAHA
More seriously though, I wish you'd be as happy with this story as we are in awe. Seriously. This was brilliant.
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