fic, Lost: I've Been Everywhere 9/14 (Sawyer, Jack, Ana Lucia), Pg13

[janie_tangerine]

Title: I've Been Everywhere 9/14
Rating: PG-13 (there's pretty heavy cursing here), will reach NC17 overall
Characters for this part: Sawyer, Jack, Ana Lucia.
Word counting: 2757 this part, 50000 ca overall.
Disclaimer: Lost is not mine and all the folk songs used here are not mine. The places really exist and I've never been there.
Summary: Sawyer

Comments

[jaydblu]

Okay. *taps foot impatiently*. Where's the rest?
Wonderful as usual, that was totally Ana. And I loved ths:
“Now, you do what I say. I say don’t talk, you don’t talk. I say you talk, you talk. I say you move, you move. I say you don’t, you don’t. Now, what if I say jump?”
“I say you first, bitch. That was perfect (and familiar!)
I'm still looking forward to reading the rest!

[janie_tangerine]

Ha, the rest is resting on my HD but should be out sooner than next week since it's beated. ;)

Thanks so much, glad you're enjoying this! And I was kind of wary about Ana here so glad she came out fine. I wasn't exactly nice to her but I'm re-evaluating her a bit next round. Uhm, yes, that was familiar I guess. ;) Thanks again! ♥

[jaydblu]

Well, I never liked her, as hard as I tried to, so I think your treatment of Ana here is fine...and accurate!
And Sawyer digging out his own bullet was very ewww, so you conveyed that nicely as well!

[janie_tangerine]

Well, I never liked her either which is why I never write her, I always think I wouldn't be fair enough to her but sincerely, who cares. ;) Thanks again!

[halfdutch]

Oh no, Sawyer!!! *clings* Damn that Ana!

I had an idea where you might be going with this series (eventually) but I wasn't expecting a twist like this. Damn, what will they do now? So happy to see more of this! (And loved the previous two parts. Yay!)

[janie_tangerine]

*clings with you* Damn Ana indeed, I never liked her much and never will much. *sigh*

Who knows, maybe I'll get back where you thought I was going. Well, now they have some problems I guess but I'm getting them out of this mess in the next two parts *cough* why, yes, I'm evil. Thanks so much, glad you're liking it! ♥

[etpmvemp]

I don't usually use this expression, but what the hell is her problem? As always, great casting. I can really see Ana Lucia as a vigilante.

I too loved this part: “Now, you do what I say. I say don’t talk, you don’t talk. I say you talk, you talk. I say you move, you move. I say you don’t, you don’t. Now, what if I say jump?”

“I say you first, bitch.” I think it's very "Sawyer".

Waiting for the next chapter!

[janie_tangerine]

That part is actually from canon, I just changed it a bit, but they really had that exchange. ;) And well, you're learning her problem next chapter even if she thankfully doesn't appear herself. Thanks so much, glad you liked it!

[elliotsmelliot]

Great use of Ana, noble and cruel at the same time. I loved all the parallels you drew between canon in terms of the gun shot. I also love how many different places you've taken Jack and Sawyer. This chapter's environment was described so well. You provided a great visual image of the borderlands.

[janie_tangerine]

Thank you! It's so good to hear the environment was well described, I guess I studied my geography well then. I think this was the one where I had most fun re-writing canon aspects, even if I guess that Sawyer wouldn't really agree with me. Poor guy. Thanks again, it's always great to hear your opinion! ♥ ♥

[weehobbit]

Oh no, what are they going to do?!! Must read next part! Oh and in a previous part I really enjoyed Jack, Sawyer, and Charlie sleeping in the same bed, lol! Oh Charlie.

And I liked the description of rain getting under Sawyer's clothes while they were trying to hide in a dry spot. Very descriptive and I could totally get that feeling. Haven't been keeping up lately but I am now and can't wait for the next part! :D

[janie_tangerine]

Next part is coming soon! Don't worry, I won't be too cruel to those poor two guys now. Maybe. ;) And thanks so much, I couldn't kind of resist the bed sharing back in six. Glad you're up then, I'll be delivering the next soonish! ♥