foot, creek, lamentation

[jakemac]

cheer up baby doll

Comments

[missinnocent42]

as i said in myspace, i like this one. i absolutely love the first line. there is something about it. and also line 21 "hands on our livers". i like that phrase. its a good poem. the last line, i lament is such a turn from the rest of the story. its very enjoyable. *ps i like to analyze, im in a class for it right now* nice poem though.

[missinnocent42]

ps. i really really love the first line. seriously, ive read it like 300 times. *little exaggeration* but yea. you get my point im sure.