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So Much Mine: Section Thirteen

Nov 17, 2006 20:13

Section Thirteen

Pairing: JaeHo
Rating: Overall NC-17
All my Yoosu belongs to: Ranalore
Summary: The beginning of a shifting relationship. Hot Korean boys. Sex. Dancing and some angry words. Not necessarily in that order. Not necessarily in each section.

Section One; Section Two; Section Three; Section Four; Section Five; Section Six; Section Seven; ( Read more... )

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bellasurus November 18 2006, 05:01:39 UTC

wedspawn November 18 2006, 05:09:00 UTC

♥♥♥♥ you! ♥♥♥♥

bellasurus November 18 2006, 05:11:59 UTC

YOOSU ARE LOVE ♥ *wants to be bunny rabbit that junsu serenades*

puahaha. fake!jaechun XD *tosses jaechun to side*

I’ve never been loved…even that briefly…
jaejae you silly, blur, clueless boy, because...

“Chunnie-ah, I think I am in love with Kim Jaejoong.”
ZOMG. you need to tell him that JUNGYUNHO like WHOA.

[random]what happened to jae's bibimbap?[/random]

i want next chapter NOWWWW. nooo, i want it to end like NOW. so i can be happy with happy ending...it is a happy ending right?

and even more randomly, minnie's mommy being half in love with jaejae amuses me ^^

dialogue's less awkward but some of it still has that stilted feeling :x

wedspawn November 18 2006, 05:16:21 UTC

he left everything on the counter! at least the rice was in the rice cooker and couldn't burn!

i'm pretty happy with the dialogue. it's a bit more formal that i would speak but hell, i hope to just dissolve the dialogue to moans :D

moans are easy to spell.

bellasurus November 18 2006, 05:19:16 UTC

dialogue is a little too formal, but i'll be looking forward to descriptions XDD

nOOOO! you can't spell moans! *has issues with weird looking "Ahhhs" and "Ohhhhhhs" and "Ooohh" in fics* hehe. moans should be described XP along with actions. actions speak louder than words, after all. wheeee.

butisitcomingsoon?isit?howmanymorechapters? WAI.

wedspawn November 18 2006, 05:23:50 UTC

i honestly have absolutely no idea.... ::::Grins::: i don't even know what's next. :D i'm writing a bit more formal :::nods::::

and moans will be described. :) promise.

wedspawn November 18 2006, 05:24:22 UTC

heck, i didn't even know there was going to be 13 so far :) i didn't even know about the sweatshirt or the lavender bunny :::grins:::

♥♥♥♥♥

wedspawn November 18 2006, 05:17:00 UTC

and thank you for reading!

i should have a lavender bunny be in all my yoosu :::grins:::

it is a happy ending. but it won't be ending now ;)

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