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[jae_w]

Still not so much getting the "let" part of ficlet, and can you believe it? This time there's a WARNING. If you're the type of person who likes warnings, it's posted in the first comment, and if you don't like them, don't read that comment.

For my fabulous wearemany, whose career I continue to follow with interest. I can't choose between the album and the

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[clarinetkate]

I'm not sure I get it, entirely, but what I do get, I love because it's so beautiful. And damn, girl, your ficlet is longer than most of my FIC! hahah

[jae_w]

Thank you. And it's ragged, and you probably don't quite get it because it doesn't exactly hang together yet, unless maybe you've been having the conversation shana and I have been having off and on for ages, but, you know, the point of this whole thing wasn't so much to have things be perfect in this go-round. Although some time if I decide to turn this into a true finished story, I might hit you up about where i lost you.

And now, my reply is longer than your FEEDBACK, too!

[halimede]

I may well be the only one who didn't feel terribly lost (had to read a couple paragraphs twice, and re-frame how I read it to align with incoming information, but not *lost* lost) *and* whose smile is mostly happy. But it is. They connected. Never perfectly. But they did. They touched each other. It mattered.

I love the last section a lot.

[jae_w]

Thank you! And it's interesting to hear that it hung together a little more cohesively for you. I'm so glad you liked it.

[halimede]

I just realised a possible reason why this story makes so much sense to me. Once upon a time, in a fandom far, far away --so far away this happened on a list even-- someone wrote a story of two characters whose strife-filled relationship culminated in a blaze-of-glory battle where they fought and died together. Guy A was at peace as he died, because they finally fought together again, on the same side. This scene read as the final, closure-filled scene of the story. But the story continued. After death, as they transitioned to what came after, Guy B repudiated Guy A for wasting their lives. Guy A was crushed, and *that* was the (angsty) ending to the story. One reader commented that this cemented her theory that whether a story was happy or not depended on where you stopped writing it. Somehow, all of that story+discussion is encapsulated in this story, as I read it.

Hey, now that I think about it, is this a coincidence or do I happen to know you from someplace else?

[jae_w]

Nope, that wasn't me -- pop is my first (and only) fandom :)