[ooc] crit me, baby

[jackisnomore]

This would be the most appropriate place for you to tell me how you think I'm doing with Raiden of Metal Gear Solid.

Bad, good, got a helpful suggestion? I am open to all of the crits. Anon is on, IP tracking is off and comments are unscreened for reference and optimal conversationing.

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