Fic Commentary: Day Has Gone Down (Numb3rs)
Once upon a time (back in September '07), I posted a Numb3rs fic, Day Has Gone Down. My beta, mistraltoes, told me that she would be interested in seeing a commentary on this fic at some point, so I made notes, but did not finish it. Then today kalquessa said that she would love to read commentary on good fic, as part of her Christmas wishlist
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This is beautiful, uplifting, and your voices are perfect.
I love the insights the commentary brings.
One thing you don't mention, is how well this stands up in light of the later revelation, how Colby was in fact a triple agent. But then it's not at all relevant to Megan here - she has no way of knowing, and has to deal with the grif and pain of betrayal here and now.
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One thing you don't mention, is how well this stands up in light of the later revelation, how Colby was in fact a triple agent.
Well, I wrote this over the summer hiatus and posted it about three days before "Trust Metric" aired. So, essentially, I was working from much the same basis as Megan is here--from canon observations, whether Colby is a traitor or a triple agent.... I do wonder if this would have been a different story had I written it knowing how things would turn out. It fits so well, I kind of hope not. *g* But I do wonder if I might have softened Megan's reaction a little if I hadn't been so confused my own self.
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...that's the thing - I ultimately think it would have weakened the story. Made it less poignant.
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I totally love the last line, it feels absolutely true to Larry's and Megan's relationship. I miss these two.
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I miss them too--I just gave in and started writing another Larry/Megan story.
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I had no idea Megan was going to say this until it hit the page. I almost took it out, but it felt absolutely right, and from the responses I’ve gotten, it felt right for good reason. :)
Yes. That line. Guh. It is just a punch in the stomach and OH MEGAN!!! *weeps*
I love getting to write lines that are involved and complex but really kind of straightforward. For Larry.
Seriously, how do you get Larry's voice so dead-on? I continue to be amazed.
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It's nice of you to post commentaries about the writing process so that I at least know that your fics do not leap fully formed like Athena from your head.
Especially not this one! And what is this "slightly less inferior"? You write excellently, and I am very much looking forward to the posting of "Barefoot Girl."
Seriously, how do you get Larry's voice so dead-on?
Honestly? I have no idea. I don't. It just comes and I never know whether it's bang-on or not. Heh.
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If I can find the paper I wrote the note on, I'll tell you. But right now? I don't remember what my ten words were!
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