Ah, so i had to go to sleep after I read this last night and I wanted to actually leave a coherent and worthy review.
This was even better than I was hoping for (and you know how excited I was), the balance between the porn and feelings was perfect. The way your wrote each of the boys with there separate hesitations and feelings towards the situation was amazing. I love how with your writing style you flit between the sex and the characters reactions and thoughts so seamlessly. I also really enjoyed the first part of the fic too, where the whole plot was introduced as well as max, and you could see the different boys traits within her, that was really lovely.
Max was such a good character, I am always so apprehensive about OCs but you created a character who was likeable, interesting and I loved the different dynamic she held with all the boys.
Louis really did break my heart though, I really spent half of that fic wanted to run and tell him its going to be okay, his internal dialogue was spot on and tugged at my heart strings but it was just so him.
Of course the fact there was extra Harry/Louis just made the whole thing even better, but I loved the fact the others boys really felt for Louis as well, that they were all trying to make this good for one another, because subconsciously maybe they all knew this was the next shift in their relationship and they are okay with that, but only if all of them are there and involved, like when they had to go get liam because they just couldn't without him.
I also loved the little details like the explanation of the balance between Liam/Danielles relationship and the few ziam moments too, oh and the teeth brushing at the end was just so liam.
So basically this was flawless, perfect and oh my days, you literally write the most beautiful ot5 ever, the dynamic you bring to it between them means i can't ever tear my eyes away when reading and never want it to end, its just so addictive!
(p.s. after scanning the comments i realised you are not going to continue this, which made me a little sad, because i would love to read more now there has been this shift in the dynamic between the boys, but then i read I've got so many ideas to write. and realised that i'm cool with that too, more of your fic, always here for that)
Oh wow thank you so much, yay!! I'm so glad it lived up to (and exceeded omg) your expectations. ♥
I'm so glad you think I balance the sex and the emotions well. I always get a little stressed about that because I don't want one to completely override the other, and it was especially hard here because there were SO MANY PEOPLE with SO MANY COMPLICATED EMOTIONS and I kept feeling like I wasn't making it porny enough because I wanted to focus on how everyone was feeling.
So glad you liked Max, too - I never usually write OFCs and I got anxious about it because I really wanted her to be super likeable without being a Mary Sue, and I kept worrying she came across too sassy or obnoxious or something. And really glad you liked Louis, I loved writing him in this because it's always so interesting to delve into his vulnerable side.
♥ Thank you so much for this comment! I'm sorry I'm not going to continue this one - honestly it's not that I don't WANT to because I'm really interested in exploring the dynamic change too, but I just don't want to get too caught up writing a series or something when there are so many other ideas on the table. I'm glad you're excited for the other things anyway. :)
This was even better than I was hoping for (and you know how excited I was), the balance between the porn and feelings was perfect. The way your wrote each of the boys with there separate hesitations and feelings towards the situation was amazing. I love how with your writing style you flit between the sex and the characters reactions and thoughts so seamlessly. I also really enjoyed the first part of the fic too, where the whole plot was introduced as well as max, and you could see the different boys traits within her, that was really lovely.
Max was such a good character, I am always so apprehensive about OCs but you created a character who was likeable, interesting and I loved the different dynamic she held with all the boys.
Louis really did break my heart though, I really spent half of that fic wanted to run and tell him its going to be okay, his internal dialogue was spot on and tugged at my heart strings but it was just so him.
Of course the fact there was extra Harry/Louis just made the whole thing even better, but I loved the fact the others boys really felt for Louis as well, that they were all trying to make this good for one another, because subconsciously maybe they all knew this was the next shift in their relationship and they are okay with that, but only if all of them are there and involved, like when they had to go get liam because they just couldn't without him.
I also loved the little details like the explanation of the balance between Liam/Danielles relationship and the few ziam moments too, oh and the teeth brushing at the end was just so liam.
So basically this was flawless, perfect and oh my days, you literally write the most beautiful ot5 ever, the dynamic you bring to it between them means i can't ever tear my eyes away when reading and never want it to end, its just so addictive!
(p.s. after scanning the comments i realised you are not going to continue this, which made me a little sad, because i would love to read more now there has been this shift in the dynamic between the boys, but then i read I've got so many ideas to write. and realised that i'm cool with that too, more of your fic, always here for that)
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I'm so glad you think I balance the sex and the emotions well. I always get a little stressed about that because I don't want one to completely override the other, and it was especially hard here because there were SO MANY PEOPLE with SO MANY COMPLICATED EMOTIONS and I kept feeling like I wasn't making it porny enough because I wanted to focus on how everyone was feeling.
So glad you liked Max, too - I never usually write OFCs and I got anxious about it because I really wanted her to be super likeable without being a Mary Sue, and I kept worrying she came across too sassy or obnoxious or something. And really glad you liked Louis, I loved writing him in this because it's always so interesting to delve into his vulnerable side.
♥ Thank you so much for this comment! I'm sorry I'm not going to continue this one - honestly it's not that I don't WANT to because I'm really interested in exploring the dynamic change too, but I just don't want to get too caught up writing a series or something when there are so many other ideas on the table. I'm glad you're excited for the other things anyway. :)
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