Ok I'll admit I was a little weirded out about reading het with this band (because it's usually so, so horrible) but it's you so I knew it'd be amazing regardless and IT WAS.
This is like, the perfect amount of OT5 to really be believable and the H/L was done so so perfectly (even though HA HA at the idea of them taking 3 years to ~figure it out irl) and ZIAM. YOU WROTE ZIAM. I have such a soft spot for them (even though fic-wise I'm normally really only interested in H/L) because I love the idea of Zayn being head over heels for Liam and Liam being mostly oblivious.
OK starting from the beginning, I love how you mention it being hard for them to find hook ups because it's something I've always thought about. Like it's assumed that just because so many girls are in love with them it'd be easy, but when you think about the actual logistics of it sneaking people to their hotel, idk. And it's actually really weird that there AREN'T more groupie stories. Unless I'm just looking in the wrong places.
Louis can tell that, it just-it sometimes takes him a second look to notice it. OK LOUIS BROKE MY HEART IN TIHS. OVER AND OVER AGAIN. UGH the idea of him being mostly gay and it being even HARDER to find hookups because there really is no way to go about that and forcing himself to be interested in girls and ouch. Also I really loved how Zayn is the one who mostly seems to notice this, because he and Louis seem really close and protective of each other and idk I can just see it. How they ALL pretty much know it, but are never weirded out by it either, like Louis might be ~watching them and getting turned on or whatever. All the brotp, OT5 feelings basically.
He glances sidelong at Max and then leans in, taking a deep breath.
"Um. You're into me, right?" he murmurs. Harrrrrrrrrryyyyyyyyyyyyyy. You seriously nailed his annoyingly charismatic cheeky awkward sexiness in this. Seriously.
Louis frowns, not happy with the way Harry has flipped this, made it seem like he's being so cool about this when Louis knows he's not, not completely anyway. He's pretty sure he saw the exact moment when this idea came into Harry's head and ever since then Harry's been fidgety with nerves as he tried to figure out how to approach it. Louis can read him like a book. YES.
"Personally," Harry goes on, and Louis can hear the way his voice wavers a little even if no one else can, "I think it's a little unconventional but there's nothing strictly wrong with it. Society's always putting limits on this kind of thing but there's no real reason for it in my opinion." LOL HARRY WOULD.
I love love love how there's aspects of Max that appeal to all of the boys but this and she's got just the right amount of mischief for Louis to be captivated-he doesn't seem like he's that sexually interested if Niall's honest, but it seems like he secretly kinda wants Max to be his partner in crime or something GOD yes. Louis and Max's strange not-that-sexual kinship is so perfect in this.
"Apparently your friends are bringing you a gift," Max says, throwing up her hands in a sort of what can you do? way.
"Hey," says Harry, "don't say it like that. Sounds like we're objectifying you."
"Maybe some girls don't mind being objectified in the right circumstances," Max replies, nudging Harry with her hip. I wish I could adequately explain how much I love this but yeah I can't. EVERYTHING ABOUT MAX. And all the perfect feminism is perfect.
"So is somebody going to kiss me, or are you all just gonna kiss each other? I mean, not that I'd complain about that, but-" she cuts herself off, suddenly looking very embarrassed, blushing, and that's actually quite fetching on her even though it probably ought to just clash with her hair. "Jesus, sorry," she mutters, "have a filter, Max." LMAO OK YES. TO BE MAX. I was half hoping this was around the time it would escalate into a full on orgy buuuuut you opted for believability (and feelings!!), which is even better.
actually, she tastes and smells strangely familiar and it takes Louis a second to realise, to make the connection that fuck, it's Harry. And he doesn't know what it means that he recognises that, and so quickly, and he shudders, pulling away because it's too much somehow, but she makes a little noise and pulls him back in for more and he can't resist, tongue sweeping into her mouth for more of that familiarity. It's scary and reassuring, both at once. ;_____________________________________________________________; Louis I love you.
But Louis-Louis can't concentrate on anything but the fact that he and Harry are getting jerked off at the same time right now. Ok and THIS was just, like, the hottest visual ever. I love how throughout this whole thing Louis and Harry never ACTUALLY ~touch each other but they're essentially making LOVE through Max and idk you just walked that line really perfectly.
HARRY BEING TURNED ON AND CONFUSED AND TURNED ON BY THE BJ. YES.
and Liam's fingers glide right over her clit instantly, slipping down and suddenly touching Zayn's cock just as he's easing out of her to push back in-Liam's fingers dart back up and he feels his face go hot; he tries to focus on her, rubbing in tiny circles again but Zayn is going really fast, pounding into her hard and there's so much movement, slickness between her legs making everything slippery and Liam keeps feeling it, brief sudden touches, fingertips going from the softness of Max to the incredible firmness of Zayn, so stiff and hard. klmalf,;s'glfa'sdglkjjiwjrlF;RGE'AFDCDsFdsdshgj???
Harry nuzzles against him and Louis digs his fingernails so hard into his own palms that it hurts like hell. Harry says, "Saying hi. Got lonely," and his voice is all rough and so fucking close to Louis's ear, and Louis is instantly rock hard in Max's mouth and suddenly that soft velvet heat of her mouth is blissful. Harry has fixed this in mere seconds, sending that off feeling tailspinning into something fucking starry-eyed and perfect and it's too much; Louis can't feel all of this at once.
He actually feels light-headed with it; he's vaguely aware he's making these weak little sounds but besides Harry, and besides Max's mouth, he can hardly focus on anything else. The rest of the room-shit, the rest of the world melts away, all that matters is the firmness of Harry's body curved against him, his familiar smell, and that hard line of his cock pushing into Louis's back, hot and insistent. He feels Harry's fingers stroking at his stomach then, slow and sure and encouraging, and Louis comes so suddenly and so hard he thinks he's going to lose consciousness-his hips jerk forwards and his nails cut into his palms, and everything whites out completely for a few seconds. Then he's trembling and Harry is holding him still and murmuring, "Got you, Lou," into his neck, and Louis's own breathing sounds completely hysterical and ridiculous. OK I REALLY JUST WANT TO QUOTE THIS WHOLE SECTION BECAUSE I THINK IT IS MOST DEFINITELY MY FAVORITE PART AND SO, SO HOT AND HARRY AND LOUIS AND HARRY AND LOUIS ugh it's just so perfect. Harry just being totally aware of Louis' problem and OKAY with helping him out and idek I almost wish you wrote this from Harry's perspective too just because I really want to know what was the thing that made him go from guiltily half-wanking to Louis' ass and actually getting up to help him orgasm. But also not really just because Louis' perspective was so perfect. Oh god and Harry needing to fuck Max RIGHT THEN because he was so turned on by what just happened with Louis, gah.
and he's actually in a sort of weird position, Niall realises now, almost like he's keeping his legs tucked out of the way on purpose so that Louis can get a better view of Harry with Max. He catches Zayn's eye and tilts his chin, indicating Zayn's legs, and Zayn just smirks, eyes flicking to his right towards Louis for a split-second. I LOVE WINGMAN!ZAYN.
"You like that he's watching you," Max whispers, and Zayn realises in a flash what's familiar-she's acting like Louis. He realised they were similar right from the start, all sparkly-eyed mischief and boldness, but right now it's more obvious than ever because this is exactly the kind of thing Louis does, pushing something even when he knows he probably shouldn't, just because he's curious and he wants to see what'll happen. Ahaha YES weird dom-y shit-stirrer Louis has found his match.
But then Max says, "Look at him," breathless, her voice hitching high. "It's okay."
And that's what Harry needs-he turns his head to the side, eyes locking with Louis's instantly, and that's all it takes; he buries himself deep and loses it, a broken moan torn from his throat, and he tries to keep his eyes on Louis but they close instinctively and when he opens them again Louis's are squeezed shut OK MAYBE THIS IS MY FAVORITE PART. Because they are having sex without actually having sex and it's really hot and believable and perfect.
Louis grins at the look on Liam's face, the way he looks like this is the best thing he's ever felt in his entire life, and it's funny and oddly sweet really, and god, Louis loves them all so much, his boys. ;_______________; All the OT5 feelings.
AND THE CHEERING AND WOOHOOS AT EVERYONE'S ORGASMS LOLLLLLLLLLLLLLL YES. I love how completely comfortable everyone is with this. It's like they all did it as a TEAM lmao.
And literally everything about the ending is perfect. Harry and Max having this strangely intimate moment and the ambiguity of her mediating between him and Louis and Harry's "maybe I will" basically telling Louis and UGH. Perfect.
This is just really, really amazing and AGAIN something I didn't know I wanted until now and you captured all their voices so perfectly despite switching between them so fast AND you combined all the best parts of H/L and L/Z and OT5 without any actual boy on boy which is just. You are amazing teach me your ways, etc.
I want to be sad that there's not going to be a sequel but I can't REALLY bring myself to care if the reason is that you have so many other fics to write ♥♥♥
LIKE, FULL DISCLOSURE, THESE COMMENTS ACTUALLY MADE ME CRY LAST NIGHT. I mean in my defense it was about 5am when I got them and, you know, ALL THE DRAMA and then 'Wouldn't It Be Nice' had me in an intensely emotional state, BUT. SO LOVELY. *FLAILYHANDS* THANK YOU.
First of all, so glad you gave this a chance despite being wary about the het. Like, I know so many people are just going to skip RIGHT over this as soon as they see 'OFC' so I'm glad you didn't. And LOL I KNOW, I needed to set this next year for reasons but I kept thinking "hahahaha as if Harry and Louis would have spent THAT LONG without addressing their feelings" but like, it just needed to be that way for the sake of the plot?
I agree that it's weird that there aren't more groupie stories, but it's probably because they DO find trustworthy girls? But yeah, when I started really thinking about it I realised how fucking hard that would be, and so STRESSFUL, because man, you just want to get laid but you have to try work out if it's going to end up damaging your career first. And ugh I gave myself ALL the Louis feels with this. I spent a good few days being like "aaaugh I want to write this prompt but Louis/girls LOL NO" and then I found a way to work around it and got all emotional at the idea. :|
I'm glad you liked the feminism. ♥ Honestly, like, I got stressed out about this because I really didn't want it to just turn into a flat-out gangbang and have them all just using her, I didn't want it to seem like they were using her sexually OR emotionally, like I didn't want to write her as a prop or anything. So I wanted her to have her own obvious personality and to guide the whole thing a little bit, but without seeming too much like a Mary Sue, and. I'M JUST REALLY GLAD YOU LIKED HER.
You know I somehow didn't quite realise how little actual sexual CONTACT there is between the boys in this? I mean there's basically none, even, and obviously I knew that on some level because I WROTE IT but, I don't know. I guess it felt so sexual to me anyway, while I was writing it, those small ambiguous things that aren't explicitly boy-on-boy or whatever. But yes, making love through Max!! Definitely how I wanted it to come across, without sidelining her completely. And ugh I wanted to write that Harry/Louis bit from Harry's POV too but it just worked out that it was Louis's. Srsly though I was sending emails like BUT LET'S TALK ABOUT WHAT'S GOING ON IN HARRY'S HEAD HERE so I totally understand you wanting to know.
DOING IT AS A TEAM yes, and they would totally be like that. The goofy cheering is one of my favourite parts because they WOULD, they're all such DORKS like that and towards the end they'd be feeling more comfortable anyway, I think.
And honestly it's not like I couldn't write a sequel, I'm having to just - close myself off to it because I really don't want to tie myself down with a series (especially if I'm planning to continue slippage/settlement anyway)? And I feel like I always try to explain EVERYTHING in my fic so I liked the idea of keeping this one kind of ambiguous, even though I know it's kind of cruel to do that, haha. WOW LOOK AT ME WRITING AN ESSAY IN RESPONSE TO YOUR ESSAY, basically thank you so much for these comments and I'm thrilled you liked this so much. ♥♥♥
This is like, the perfect amount of OT5 to really be believable and the H/L was done so so perfectly (even though HA HA at the idea of them taking 3 years to ~figure it out irl) and ZIAM. YOU WROTE ZIAM. I have such a soft spot for them (even though fic-wise I'm normally really only interested in H/L) because I love the idea of Zayn being head over heels for Liam and Liam being mostly oblivious.
OK starting from the beginning, I love how you mention it being hard for them to find hook ups because it's something I've always thought about. Like it's assumed that just because so many girls are in love with them it'd be easy, but when you think about the actual logistics of it sneaking people to their hotel, idk. And it's actually really weird that there AREN'T more groupie stories. Unless I'm just looking in the wrong places.
Louis can tell that, it just-it sometimes takes him a second look to notice it.
OK LOUIS BROKE MY HEART IN TIHS. OVER AND OVER AGAIN. UGH the idea of him being mostly gay and it being even HARDER to find hookups because there really is no way to go about that and forcing himself to be interested in girls and ouch. Also I really loved how Zayn is the one who mostly seems to notice this, because he and Louis seem really close and protective of each other and idk I can just see it. How they ALL pretty much know it, but are never weirded out by it either, like Louis might be ~watching them and getting turned on or whatever. All the brotp, OT5 feelings basically.
He glances sidelong at Max and then leans in, taking a deep breath.
"Um. You're into me, right?" he murmurs.
Harrrrrrrrrryyyyyyyyyyyyyy. You seriously nailed his annoyingly charismatic cheeky awkward sexiness in this. Seriously.
Louis frowns, not happy with the way Harry has flipped this, made it seem like he's being so cool about this when Louis knows he's not, not completely anyway. He's pretty sure he saw the exact moment when this idea came into Harry's head and ever since then Harry's been fidgety with nerves as he tried to figure out how to approach it. Louis can read him like a book.
YES.
"Personally," Harry goes on, and Louis can hear the way his voice wavers a little even if no one else can, "I think it's a little unconventional but there's nothing strictly wrong with it. Society's always putting limits on this kind of thing but there's no real reason for it in my opinion."
LOL HARRY WOULD.
I love love love how there's aspects of Max that appeal to all of the boys but this
and she's got just the right amount of mischief for Louis to be captivated-he doesn't seem like he's that sexually interested if Niall's honest, but it seems like he secretly kinda wants Max to be his partner in crime or something
GOD yes. Louis and Max's strange not-that-sexual kinship is so perfect in this.
"Apparently your friends are bringing you a gift," Max says, throwing up her hands in a sort of what can you do? way.
"Hey," says Harry, "don't say it like that. Sounds like we're objectifying you."
"Maybe some girls don't mind being objectified in the right circumstances," Max replies, nudging Harry with her hip.
I wish I could adequately explain how much I love this but yeah I can't. EVERYTHING ABOUT MAX. And all the perfect feminism is perfect.
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LMAO OK YES. TO BE MAX. I was half hoping this was around the time it would escalate into a full on orgy buuuuut you opted for believability (and feelings!!), which is even better.
actually, she tastes and smells strangely familiar and it takes Louis a second to realise, to make the connection that fuck, it's Harry. And he doesn't know what it means that he recognises that, and so quickly, and he shudders, pulling away because it's too much somehow, but she makes a little noise and pulls him back in for more and he can't resist, tongue sweeping into her mouth for more of that familiarity. It's scary and reassuring, both at once.
;_____________________________________________________________; Louis I love you.
But Louis-Louis can't concentrate on anything but the fact that he and Harry are getting jerked off at the same time right now.
Ok and THIS was just, like, the hottest visual ever. I love how throughout this whole thing Louis and Harry never ACTUALLY ~touch each other but they're essentially making LOVE through Max and idk you just walked that line really perfectly.
HARRY BEING TURNED ON AND CONFUSED AND TURNED ON BY THE BJ. YES.
and Liam's fingers glide right over her clit instantly, slipping down and suddenly touching Zayn's cock just as he's easing out of her to push back in-Liam's fingers dart back up and he feels his face go hot; he tries to focus on her, rubbing in tiny circles again but Zayn is going really fast, pounding into her hard and there's so much movement, slickness between her legs making everything slippery and Liam keeps feeling it, brief sudden touches, fingertips going from the softness of Max to the incredible firmness of Zayn, so stiff and hard.
klmalf,;s'glfa'sdglkjjiwjrlF;RGE'AFDCDsFdsdshgj???
Harry nuzzles against him and Louis digs his fingernails so hard into his own palms that it hurts like hell. Harry says, "Saying hi. Got lonely," and his voice is all rough and so fucking close to Louis's ear, and Louis is instantly rock hard in Max's mouth and suddenly that soft velvet heat of her mouth is blissful. Harry has fixed this in mere seconds, sending that off feeling tailspinning into something fucking starry-eyed and perfect and it's too much; Louis can't feel all of this at once.
He actually feels light-headed with it; he's vaguely aware he's making these weak little sounds but besides Harry, and besides Max's mouth, he can hardly focus on anything else. The rest of the room-shit, the rest of the world melts away, all that matters is the firmness of Harry's body curved against him, his familiar smell, and that hard line of his cock pushing into Louis's back, hot and insistent. He feels Harry's fingers stroking at his stomach then, slow and sure and encouraging, and Louis comes so suddenly and so hard he thinks he's going to lose consciousness-his hips jerk forwards and his nails cut into his palms, and everything whites out completely for a few seconds. Then he's trembling and Harry is holding him still and murmuring, "Got you, Lou," into his neck, and Louis's own breathing sounds completely hysterical and ridiculous.
OK I REALLY JUST WANT TO QUOTE THIS WHOLE SECTION BECAUSE I THINK IT IS MOST DEFINITELY MY FAVORITE PART AND SO, SO HOT AND HARRY AND LOUIS AND HARRY AND LOUIS ugh it's just so perfect. Harry just being totally aware of Louis' problem and OKAY with helping him out and idek I almost wish you wrote this from Harry's perspective too just because I really want to know what was the thing that made him go from guiltily half-wanking to Louis' ass and actually getting up to help him orgasm. But also not really just because Louis' perspective was so perfect. Oh god and Harry needing to fuck Max RIGHT THEN because he was so turned on by what just happened with Louis, gah.
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I LOVE WINGMAN!ZAYN.
"You like that he's watching you," Max whispers, and Zayn realises in a flash what's familiar-she's acting like Louis. He realised they were similar right from the start, all sparkly-eyed mischief and boldness, but right now it's more obvious than ever because this is exactly the kind of thing Louis does, pushing something even when he knows he probably shouldn't, just because he's curious and he wants to see what'll happen.
Ahaha YES weird dom-y shit-stirrer Louis has found his match.
But then Max says, "Look at him," breathless, her voice hitching high. "It's okay."
And that's what Harry needs-he turns his head to the side, eyes locking with Louis's instantly, and that's all it takes; he buries himself deep and loses it, a broken moan torn from his throat, and he tries to keep his eyes on Louis but they close instinctively and when he opens them again Louis's are squeezed shut
OK MAYBE THIS IS MY FAVORITE PART. Because they are having sex without actually having sex and it's really hot and believable and perfect.
Louis grins at the look on Liam's face, the way he looks like this is the best thing he's ever felt in his entire life, and it's funny and oddly sweet really, and god, Louis loves them all so much, his boys.
;_______________; All the OT5 feelings.
AND THE CHEERING AND WOOHOOS AT EVERYONE'S ORGASMS LOLLLLLLLLLLLLLL YES. I love how completely comfortable everyone is with this. It's like they all did it as a TEAM lmao.
And literally everything about the ending is perfect. Harry and Max having this strangely intimate moment and the ambiguity of her mediating between him and Louis and Harry's "maybe I will" basically telling Louis and UGH. Perfect.
This is just really, really amazing and AGAIN something I didn't know I wanted until now and you captured all their voices so perfectly despite switching between them so fast AND you combined all the best parts of H/L and L/Z and OT5 without any actual boy on boy which is just. You are amazing teach me your ways, etc.
I want to be sad that there's not going to be a sequel but I can't REALLY bring myself to care if the reason is that you have so many other fics to write ♥♥♥
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LIKE, FULL DISCLOSURE, THESE COMMENTS ACTUALLY MADE ME CRY LAST NIGHT. I mean in my defense it was about 5am when I got them and, you know, ALL THE DRAMA and then 'Wouldn't It Be Nice' had me in an intensely emotional state, BUT. SO LOVELY. *FLAILYHANDS* THANK YOU.
First of all, so glad you gave this a chance despite being wary about the het. Like, I know so many people are just going to skip RIGHT over this as soon as they see 'OFC' so I'm glad you didn't. And LOL I KNOW, I needed to set this next year for reasons but I kept thinking "hahahaha as if Harry and Louis would have spent THAT LONG without addressing their feelings" but like, it just needed to be that way for the sake of the plot?
I agree that it's weird that there aren't more groupie stories, but it's probably because they DO find trustworthy girls? But yeah, when I started really thinking about it I realised how fucking hard that would be, and so STRESSFUL, because man, you just want to get laid but you have to try work out if it's going to end up damaging your career first. And ugh I gave myself ALL the Louis feels with this. I spent a good few days being like "aaaugh I want to write this prompt but Louis/girls LOL NO" and then I found a way to work around it and got all emotional at the idea. :|
I'm glad you liked the feminism. ♥ Honestly, like, I got stressed out about this because I really didn't want it to just turn into a flat-out gangbang and have them all just using her, I didn't want it to seem like they were using her sexually OR emotionally, like I didn't want to write her as a prop or anything. So I wanted her to have her own obvious personality and to guide the whole thing a little bit, but without seeming too much like a Mary Sue, and. I'M JUST REALLY GLAD YOU LIKED HER.
You know I somehow didn't quite realise how little actual sexual CONTACT there is between the boys in this? I mean there's basically none, even, and obviously I knew that on some level because I WROTE IT but, I don't know. I guess it felt so sexual to me anyway, while I was writing it, those small ambiguous things that aren't explicitly boy-on-boy or whatever. But yes, making love through Max!! Definitely how I wanted it to come across, without sidelining her completely. And ugh I wanted to write that Harry/Louis bit from Harry's POV too but it just worked out that it was Louis's. Srsly though I was sending emails like BUT LET'S TALK ABOUT WHAT'S GOING ON IN HARRY'S HEAD HERE so I totally understand you wanting to know.
DOING IT AS A TEAM yes, and they would totally be like that. The goofy cheering is one of my favourite parts because they WOULD, they're all such DORKS like that and towards the end they'd be feeling more comfortable anyway, I think.
And honestly it's not like I couldn't write a sequel, I'm having to just - close myself off to it because I really don't want to tie myself down with a series (especially if I'm planning to continue slippage/settlement anyway)? And I feel like I always try to explain EVERYTHING in my fic so I liked the idea of keeping this one kind of ambiguous, even though I know it's kind of cruel to do that, haha. WOW LOOK AT ME WRITING AN ESSAY IN RESPONSE TO YOUR ESSAY, basically thank you so much for these comments and I'm thrilled you liked this so much. ♥♥♥
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