THE BIG DEAL: PART 3

[tahneemonkee]

“Sweet’s borrowing my room.” Haze blew smoke out of his nostrils.

“I figured he might be. Don’t worry; I’ll be a good boy tonight.” He smiled sleepily.

“Do whatever you want. You don’t have to try and look clean just ‘cause I am.”

“Don’t get all touchy. I was being nice.”

“Leave me alone.” Cherry shuffled over to Sweet’s bed and sat on the

Comments

[crossfadin]

Oddly convient (or unconvient, dependin on your view) that Sweet came in at just that moment. Either there was a larger time gap between this chapter and the last then was alluded to, or plot device plain simple. Or Sweet has troubles in bed...

[peachy_ewan_muf]

Good job. You did a good job at showing Cherry's emotions. . .

The only negative thing I have to really say is that this would be better if it had more surrounding detail, and wasn't essentially dialogue.