Fresh to death

[iphisto]

Exo, Baekhyun/Kai, NC-17
Sequel to Drippin' Swagu (you probably would want to read it first), still Sk8r boiz AU now with alt title: Skateboarding Is Practically Foreplay For These Boys Anyway
~3500 wordsWarnings: Sexual content, swearing, once again way too much talk about skating.

Comments

[taozi]

I really liked this. :) They're such teenage idiots here, especially Kai, since he's all act first and ask questions later. I like how the age difference factors in, and how Baekhyun is always just a bit careful with him, even if Kai both kind of hates that and needs it at the same time. I think my favourite part was the physicality of everything--how affected Baekhyun was by skating the hill and how it made him so sensitive to everything Kai was doing after.

And since you wanted feedback on the sex: I really liked how you handled it, because yeah Baekhyun is a horny douchebag here, but he doesn't force Kai into anything and made sure he was okay, so the consent was still good to me. :) (To me there's a difference between having characters like Baekhyun who know that what they're doing is maybe kind of iffy on some level, and characters who really aren't practicing consent at all but it's portrayed like it's not an issue for whatever reason. And you didn't do the latter here at all.) The blowjob itself was fantastic... I like how you focused mostly on all of the little things that Baekhyun was hyperaware of instead of just the actual movements of what Kai was doing, because it's so easy for sex to sound clinical but this was really vivid. Pissed off!Kai at the end was great too, haha. :')

Thank you so much for this! ♥ I've really enjoyed this verse. :)

[iphisto]

Thankyou so much for the detailed feedback! It means a lot to me haha. Trying to keep characterisation and flow without falling into squicky consent issues was hard so I'm glad it was largely a success :) Also thankyou for the compliments about the bj lol /o\ writing Da Pr0n is new to me so i really appreciate it~