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inugrlrayn

Keeping Secrets

Apr 20, 2010 12:18

Title: Keeping Secrets
Rating: NC-17
Pairing: One sided Ed/Roy
Disclaimer: This is me, not owning FMA or the characters etc.

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( A breath away from slumber, there’s hair beneath the tips of his fingers, shiny and dark like threads of black satin that flow between his knuckles. )

Comments 17

a_big_apple April 20 2010, 16:43:20 UTC

That was really hot, and very vivid, and sensual in all meanings of the word. Poor Ed.

zoheleth April 20 2010, 18:01:32 UTC

Oh my...It IS really, really hooot and I really liked it!
Poor Ed, however it would be interesting to see how he would manage standing before Roy after that ^^

ginnyvos April 20 2010, 23:18:13 UTC

I second this, I second this reeeeaaaally hard. I'd love to see how this continues really.

melisandre013 April 24 2010, 17:19:01 UTC

As would I. Even just a little blurb, a paragraph or too. This was wonderful. Thank you.

coyul April 20 2010, 23:08:34 UTC

YOU OWE ME BLEACH.

elfen April 20 2010, 23:40:04 UTC

Um, just a bit curious if you mean Bleach the anime/manga? Because inugrlrayn doesn't write for that fandom. Sorry.

coyul April 20 2010, 23:59:27 UTC

FOR MY EYES

amethyst_koneko April 21 2010, 00:19:01 UTC

Ouch for my eyes! You may want bleach for your eyes (why'd you even read this if it bothered you this badly? O_o?) but that icon is brutal! :)

Thread 5

elfen April 20 2010, 23:43:00 UTC

You already know how much I love this, but I know comments here are good too! As bittersweet as this was, it was also incredibly hot and so very illicit (which made it hotter). That whole forbidden fruit thing you have going on with Ed is delicious!

amethyst_koneko April 21 2010, 00:10:10 UTC

I love this part - "It would be simple if the figure that pulls itself together behind his closed eyes was soft, all gentle curves and full lips, but Edward is as complicated in this as he is in all things. He’s haunted by dark, fathomless eyes, and a desperate sort of curiosity as to what it would feel like to trade steel for ignition cloth." <3 Fate never has given Ed a break has it? :( I really hope that that look he got from Roy at the beginning really means what he hoped it meant. Ed deserves to have at least one thing go right in his life. :) Ed might be able to make it thru facing Roy tomorrow but one has to wonder how much longer he can keep up the facade until the tension becomes too much and he (or Roy or both) breaks again. <3