The Fool's Story

[intrepia]

'Tis a marvel, 'tis a wonder:
a great serpent I have seen
caved above that hill high yonder,
covered with scales of blue 'n' green!
Oft-times tears drip from her eyes;
she cries out a great wail!
And when you take her by surprise,
she breathes fire and whips her tail!

It was another of the girl's half-mad songs. She sang them so often that no one

Comments

[prissi]

oh man. loved it. loved it so. ♥ I think you outdo yourself every week.
you're such a wonderful story-weaver.

[prissi]

I do wish you'd tell more though! What of the dragon when her egg was returned? How did the queen come about the dragon egg? >.>

[intrepia]

Oh oops! I meant to mention in the story somewhere that the Queen came by the egg because some knight gave it to her as a token of his affections. I guess I left that out by accident in the middle of everything else I was trying to remember to include. And I imagine the dragon would be very happy to have her egg returned and would be friends with the Fool again and maybe even help out the village in some way to show her gratitude.

[prissi]

sharing from her vast horde of treasure, maybe? ooooh. :D thanks for tying up some of the loose ends in my head. <3

[intrepia]

I am going to leave that open so you can imagine whatever outcome you'd like. ;)

Having thought about it now, I think I'm actually pleased about not mentioning where the Queen got the egg in the story itself, because I like that there are more options for that now too, some of which may be more exciting than what I had in mind originally!

[hammond]

Yes! These are my questions too!

[intrepia]

It's really informative for me to know this, so thank you (and Prissi) for telling me! I guess this is the sort of thing that people use beta readers for!

[intrepia]

Thank you so much, Prissi. <3 I'm so pleased that you liked it so much, especially because I've never really considered myself capable of writing fiction, and in some ways, this is the first "story" I've ever written. So it's kind of a nerve-wracking debut!

[kateshort]

Seriously? In that case, it's one hell of a good debut.

[intrepia]

Well, technically, I guess I did write a fictional narrative from the perspective of a girl who dies in the Triangle Shirtwaist Factory fire for a school assignment in sixth grade. It was this really over-the-top, moralistic piece. I had forgotten about that.

I also had that spinoff of Hansel and Gretel from a few weeks ago.

But apart from that, I've only ever written fiction (or even fanfiction) in snippets: the start of a scene; a fanciful descriptive paragraph without much story progression; an introduction in which the narrator announces a character's full name, age, and background; an outline of what will happen without any of the details filled in. (For a while many years ago, I was really keen on the idea of writing an Oregon Trail story; I think I might have plotted out how far along the Trail the characters would be each month, based on my vast knowledge that I'd accrued from the computer game.)

I would probably consider this my first legitimate, completed story with original characters and a meaningful plot and all those

[prissi]

uhhhhhhh yeah. wow. it's probably the most clever interpretation of the topic that I could imagine.

[intrepia]

It's funny, but I couldn't think of anything to write for the most obvious interpretation of "fool me once"! So a court jester was the first thing that came to mind that I had a chance of going somewhere with. But then zia_narratora helped me flesh out this actual story from the mass of tangled ideas I threw at her, and now the regular interpretation of "fool me once" sort of works with it too!