fic: This Isn't Just Goodbye.
This Isn't Just Goodbye (this is I can't stand you).
pg. original. 3,000 words. for theepiccek
It’s what he remembers the most-- the fact they were both runners. They’re both cowards at the best of times.
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pg. original. 3,000 words. for theepiccek
It’s what he remembers the most-- the fact they were both runners. They’re both cowards at the best of times.
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(okay, after i finished this i went back and read my prompt and oh fuck, i am so sorry, that was terrible! - my prompt i mean!)
♥ I AM FLAILING ALL OVER THE PLACE BECAUSE I LOVED THIS. Lainey feels like someone I could know and I like that there is a closure between her and Bobby at the end.
She felt like she was sixteen for the longest time, like she would never evolve into the person she so desperately wanted to be.
Memories creep up in her mind and she doesn't know what to feel. She thinks of herself as a contradiction-- once in love and then disgusted by the lack of conversation over time
these lines are my favorites, i couldn't say why but Oh! This was fantastic and I loved it! ♥ thank you so much :D
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The problem with Lainey is that she trusts too much. Despite the heartache, she still believes there's something good inside of everyone. (and for a long time, she believe that he could be the one. she got over this, of course, years later. it's hard to remember your feelings for someone when you can't remember their face.)
First two sentences have capital letters starting them, but then they disappear!
And at a few points Bobby and Lainey don't have capital letters to their name either.
Just punctuation comments really, the actual substance of the work I thought was great, and I agree with the lines that theepiccek picked out, very good :)
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i usually type all in lower case and when i bring it into Word it misses some. :/
but i'm glad you liked the story :)
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That image really stuck out in my mind. I like it a lot. The whole thing, really is terrific.
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