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innie_darling

Supernatural fic: "Lacuna" (1/2)

May 17, 2006 23:18

Well. I've been writing this story for months, and griping about it for nearly as long (sorry about that). In any case, it's done, and I owe undying gratitude to the incomparably lovely monkiedude for her enthusiastic, thoughtful, and whip-smart beta work; this would suck far more if she hadn't volunteered her services ( Read more... )

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jenna24de May 18 2006, 19:06:07 UTC

You know, I fell in love with one of your sentences:

Because although it's nearly midnight, his voice is like autumn sunshine shot through with lazy dust motes, and you'd be getting to see the stars with the sun at your side; you'd get to be Sally Ride.

Sooo true. This man has truly the ability to lighten the night.

Now I´m on my way to the the next part.

Thanks
Jen

Thank you

innie_darling May 19 2006, 21:30:02 UTC

Thanks! That sentence got rewritten approximately a bajillion times, so I'm glad it worked for you!

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innie_darling May 21 2006, 22:46:01 UTC

Wow! I'm floored by your feedback!

I love how perceptive you make Cassie, how she can read Dean so well and see so much in little things - that line about being accustomed to seeing motives in literature and therefore not being able to ignore them in real life was marvellous. Oh, I really liked that line too! And what makes it so upsetting is that Cassie really IS good at reading Dean but she just can't trust herself when he starts in with the demon talk.

The way you wove details into the plotline without disturbing it was magnificent. The one scene where she steps into the shower, finding it wet and slippery, just knowing that Dean had showered before her but it being unnecessary to just state the obvious stood out to me especially. I was originally going to have her fantasizing about Dean in the shower but then I realized, hey, damn it, I'm the writer, I can make them have sex in the shower if I want to!

And Dean was just the way I'd imagine him to be at that time. Not a bit talker but saying so much at the same time. The ( ... )

beautifulstars July 31 2006, 03:34:36 UTC

I really love this story. As soon as I got to the section where Dean is climbing the side of the house to get into her room, I flicked through your memories to find other fanfic you've written -- having difficulty finding it, but your way with words is very careful. Precise, and woven so that you are giving enough details to carry us through, but not overwhelming. It makes those small details stand out more. For example, his jeans...'His jacket swings out a little and you can see that the pockets of his coat and pants are stuffed with small objects. His jeans are worn, shiny and rubbed down to white thread in places, and they are settled on him like butter melting from the heat of a roll. They distend briefly as he digs in a pocket for a butterfly knife.' and the line 'Even in his shitkicker boots, he's finding toeholds in the stone, and he moves slowly and steadily up ( ... )

innie_darling July 31 2006, 10:50:57 UTC

Thank you very much! The jeans line in particular gave me a lot of problems, so it's nice to hear that it worked for you.

I don't have my fic in my memories, but if you click the "supernatural_fic_my" tag, you should get everything I've written in this fandom.

razycrandomgirl August 6 2006, 08:43:50 UTC

I have only read the first part and I already know that this is going in my memories. At first I was all "2nd person? Nooooooooooooo!" but you have made it work so far. I freakin' love this ship! thans for this! -hugs-

razycrandomgirl August 6 2006, 09:04:56 UTC

I'm still not finished! I just had to say that these two are so hot!