Comments | inlipstick: In Our Bedroom, After the War; GSF; NC-17 (2/9)

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In Our Bedroom, After the War; GSF; NC-17 (2/9)

Jul 05, 2008 01:22

ryan ross, andrew 'butcher' mrotek, michael guy chislett, !gsf, jon walker, spencer smith, brendon urie

Comments 8

liveintrees July 5 2008, 16:02:45 UTC

there's a bit of a repeat in this section - the part from "Ryan is the oldest, chronologically at least." until "Ryan almost runs them off the road." was in the first part. I don't know, maybe that's intentional? just thought I'd mention it. and omg am I ever loving this so far!

sinuous_curve July 5 2008, 17:48:05 UTC

*headdesk*

Thanks! It's fixed now. :D

abraxas_life July 5 2008, 17:08:24 UTC

Only the second chapter and I'm already deeply in love with this. Jeez.

sinuous_curve July 5 2008, 17:48:50 UTC

Thanks! :D

halighanawfulie July 5 2008, 18:38:25 UTC

"You can tell me, Brendon," Butcher says, palm cupping Brendon's elbow. "Is Ryan your turtle?"
I literaly laughed out loud cause of that. Just thought I should mention it.

daydreambeleevr July 12 2008, 09:43:47 UTC

I found myself holding my breath for really long passages, almost afraid of what would happen next. These boys are such boys. They need to kiss and make up, but I don't think that's gonna happen for a while. (good) ;)

k =)

yetunknown September 27 2008, 02:14:34 UTC

hey, just a bit of nitpicking but

"Okay," Butcher seems nonplussed, which leads Brendon assumes is his default setting.

when you say nonplussed, I assume perplexed wasn't what you meant, right?

(other than that, never stop writing, guys. EVER, okay?)

sinuous_curve September 28 2008, 03:10:37 UTC

*headdesk*

Oops, thanks for point that out.

(Thank you! :D)