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tenshinoakuma in inktrain

[DISSIDIA] Observance and Participation

Jun 06, 2011 15:01

( While Bartz and Zidane hunted for treasure, Onion Knight watched, his mind fixed on the duty of a knight and his heart fixed on the curiosity of a child. )

!dissidia, *tenshinoakuma, ~fic

Comments 11

charliequinn June 6 2011, 07:41:19 UTC

This is adorable! Thank you for posting :)

I always felt that Onion Knight might have fun if he loosened up and had a play with Bartz and Zidane.

tenshinoakuma June 6 2011, 09:35:34 UTC

Thank you! The combination of Bartz and Zidane + anyone is sure to make for fun times, heh 8)

saltedpin June 6 2011, 07:50:49 UTC

Aww! That was really cute -- I loved the way you captured Onion Knight's dilemma between wanting to protect Terra and wanting to indulge his curiosity and sense of fun XD And naturally Zidane and Bartz were awesome XD Thank you for the read XD

tenshinoakuma June 6 2011, 10:15:10 UTC

Hehe thanks! I wasn't quite sure if I pulled Onion Knight's dilemma well enough, so I'm glad you think I did!

sinnatious June 6 2011, 11:35:13 UTC

*___* Oh, this was lovely. I think you captured all of the characters so well! Onion Knight especially, him being trapped between a yearning to indulge his curiosity and act his age, and a compulsion to fulfil his knightly duties. It's really interesting (and often amusing) to hear his analyses and takes on the other Cosmos warriors, also.

Your characterisation of Tidus, too! You've caught the hidden depth and maturity there that so many people overlook. Tidus does not get enough credit as a character.

I have such warm fuzzies now. You really captured the camaraderie so well! This was so much fun to read! I want to trap you in a box and make you write Dissidia fic forever now.

tenshinoakuma June 6 2011, 11:51:02 UTC

Thanks! It was pretty interesting trying to balance those two sides of Onion Knight; sometimes I wondered if he was coming off as too one note.

I have to admit, Tidus gave me a lot of trouble (I had to rewrite his part a few times) since I didn't get past 7 hours in his game xD I thought he seemed the most observant (noticing Cecil's indecision and urging him to see his brother) of the three goofballs in Dissidia.

Ack, nooooo! Anything but a box! D:

quaterzaz June 7 2011, 00:42:09 UTC

I wish this was on ff.net, so I could insta-fave it and author alert you. ^^

FFFF quaterzaz June 7 2011, 00:43:44 UTC

Nevermind, sorry about that. ^^; *dashes to the site*

tenshinoakuma June 7 2011, 01:12:35 UTC

No worries xD!

Thanks for the +fav and +alert :3

kunenk June 15 2011, 07:03:57 UTC

Hahaha, that's really nice! I like the way Onion Knight sees everyone's relationships.

tenshinoakuma June 15 2011, 10:51:11 UTC

Thank you! He's remarkably fun to write xD