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SHINee {Onew/Minho ; Alternative Advances}

Aug 19, 2011 17:08

Title: Alternative Advances
Fandom: SHINee (AU, !forensic pathologist)
Pairing: Onew/Minho, Jonghyun/Key
Word count: 11,148
Rating: PG-13
Summary: One week later, Onew had ruined another Ralph Lauren shirt, spilled iodine solution on Minho's levis, and, just now, had splashed ink onto his face and managed to get it in his eye.
A/N: it's civilized_era's ( Read more... )

pairing: minho/onew, !one shot, fandom: shinee, au: forensic pathologist, pairing: jonghyun/key

Comments 55

sakura_dawn August 19 2011, 16:56:49 UTC

this was amazing! ^^ I love all of your stories.

Best line:
"S," Taemin supplied, "for Stupid Dickhead."

It made me flail with happiness.

kaybee38 August 19 2011, 17:49:52 UTC

And this is yet another reason why I love your writing so much. You do dialogue so well! The banter in this had me cackling! And the quiet tension between OnHo, not to mention the loud tension between JongKey. And Taemin! This...

"No," said Taemin. "I'm busy. I've got to wash my cat."

"You don't own a cat."

"My brother's cat," said Taemin. "I'm looking after it while he's in China."

Brilliant. memming this for life.

potaoto August 19 2011, 19:50:04 UTC

cries why is this so funny and dslkjfdk

i really love your taemin o m g "S," Taemin supplied, "for Stupid Dickhead." waylt maknae!! ;___;

and the progression of onew and minho's relationship was also very lovely ♥

this entire thing made me smile so hard :')))

ameliorate23 August 19 2011, 19:58:05 UTC

This line had me smiling like a fool, "Not intervention," Jonghyun insisted, "just...gentle prodding in the right direction."

And I really loved Jonghyun and Key's characterizations and relationship; very realistic. Here's a couple of my favorite parts:

"That's okay," he muttered, throwing his bag onto the desk and then throwing himself into his chair. He sank down into and buried his head in his hands. "You're going to have to fire me anyway, what does it matter if I'm late?"

"Hyung!" Key cried. "Excuse me if I wanted to get out of there before he woke up and threw me out!"

He read it quickly and a strange look came over his face, one Onew didn't remember ever seeing before. "Who are they from?"

"Jonghyun," Key said softly. He was smiling, Onew realised, and the knowledge hit like a truck; he'd heard about the security business, which was why he'd handed over Key's phone number to begin with.

Oh, and not to forget the whole paragraph with their phone conversation near the end there.

quicheand August 19 2011, 20:07:18 UTC

Your current music describes this story perfectly.

AGH, seriously how?? I loved the onho and the jongkey and TAEMIN, and I don't even like two of those three things! And I love how you write the happy parts so beautifully without make them sound sappy. How do you do that? TEACH MEEE.