[Fanfiction] What Is Love? - I. Love Is A Beginning

[inkcharm_666]

Title: What Is Love?
Part: 1 of 3
Author: inkcharm_666
Fandom: Moonchild
Characters: Kei, Sho
Warnings: fluff, sexual references
Rating: PG-13
Disclaimer: I don't own Moonchild, Kei, Sho or anything that awesome at all, really.
Notes: Dedicated to plain_ornament for too many reasons to name here, given to you all for Christmas. Ho ho ho~

Comments

[dohai_love]

TO BE CONTINUED?! YAY!! :DDD

I don't have any words lol! Well I do, but they can't really explain how WONDERFUL this fic is and how great it made me feel lol! Seriously, this has definitely become one of my favorite fics ever and it's not even done! XD

First, I love how you made it like a narrative! It makes the story really unique and interesting, adds some extra spice! As compared to just using one of their POVs, I really like the use of the 3rd person here! I could also picture this in my head like some type of romantic comedy! XD I was laughing through the entire first place with Sho, that was hilarious! :DD

Second, I love how you made everything very realistic here too! Like their first kiss not being magical and them both being really confused about everything. And, I always imagined Sho would be the type to go off and sleep with tons of girls just to let off steam, though he doesn't really want any of them; not like a lot of people write that he's only saving himself for Kei, which I don't think is very characteristic of him because Sho is very impulsive, and you brought that very important quality of him to the surface. :D I also really appreciate that you didn't make Kei so angsty and emo here, yeah he knows it's not the best idea to pursue Sho, but hey, it will make him happy and who doesn't want to be happy?! It's nice to see him just focus on what he wants for once and not worry about the future so much!! :'D Rather than "NUU WE CAN'T BE TOGETHER IT CAN'T WORK OUT I'M NOT WORTHY OF BEING LOVED *ANGST*.

And generally, I loved how you wrote them both!! :D It's just perfect, it's a lot different from how I'm used to reading them, but I love it a lot more! <333 YOU'RE A FREAKIN GENIUS DUDE! XD What an excellent Christmas gift! XD Happy Holidays and New Year to you too!!! &hearts

[inkcharm_666]

Thank you so much for this long and detailed reviw. The writing style was a first for me, and I'm glad beyond words that it turned out well. And indeed, there is a lot more to come still ;) I just need to finish writing it first before I can post it ^__^

[dohai_love]

You're very welcome! &hearts Wow, well congrats lol! Ha ha, of course! :D *waits patiently*