Fic: What Aunt Dahlia Saw: Chapter 6

[closetofheroes]

Hallo all.

Well, I promised a Chapter Six to 'What Aunt Dahlia Saw' would be up soon. I may have failed on the 'soon' part, but here it is, finally. When I made the promise, I had it mostly written - but I had to fill in some gaps, and it got tricky.

Here are links to other chapters:

Chapter One
Chapter Two
Chapter Three
Chapter Four
Chapter

Comments

[hazeltea]

I thought the pacing was just right. Sweet and agonizingly wonderful.

[closetofheroes]

Ack! Thank you. Glad you liked it!

[storyfan]

‘I want you so dreadfully,’ Bertie groaned.

So much tension in this installment. This is very well done and don't worry - the pacing is just as it should be.

[charie_caphine]

Liked Jeeves and Bertie, and am quite eager to find out about October in vast detail. On the down side, I felt this installment dragged out at times, as the conversation seemed to loop, the characters indefinitely repeating themselves.

[closetofheroes]

Ah. Now that was my concern. Can you point out any specifics? If not I'll have to reread the damn thing in about six months to figure out where things went wrong. I've read it about thirty times over the past two weeks and I can't see what's half decent and what's lousy anymore, if you know what I mean.

[lupus_malus]

Hi. I can see charie_caphine's point, but I disagree. In real life this is the sort of hopeless discussion which does go round in circles. They both know that they should just say good night and separate, and they know that sooner or later they will have to do just that, but they so desperately want even a few more seconds in each other's company that they each have a strong motivation to keep the conversation going. In that situation the angst of telling each other why they mustn't be together feels like something worth clinging to because it seems so much better than the alternative of not being together. Also, it's a problem without a solution and therefore going round in circles is par for the course.

[charie_caphine]

I agree that this is extremely realistic, as such situations go, - only, this sort of thing seems to me as exhausting in fiction as it is in reality.

How many times did Bertie wonder at Jeeves' stoic demeanour? And explain again and again the hows and whys of his discomfort, repeatedly comforted by Jeeves with almost the same reassurances? True to life - without a doubt, sweet and romantic - certainly, but exciting it definitely is not.

[triedunture]

*wiiiiiiibble!* Oh man, sometimes we forgot that with this pair, the most heart-wrenching thing isn't coming to the initial understanding, it's the lifetime of hardship and heartache that comes with keeping everything a secret. Well done!

[closetofheroes]

I'm delighted that you enjoyed it. I found this chapter super-hard to write.

I don't know yet what solution they are going to find to this huge problem. They'll have to come up with something, even if it's simply a way of learning to live with it, but I haven't got to envisioning that yet.

What I am sure of is that Aunt Dahlia will be instrumental to them in some way.