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The Squeeze [R; Jeeves/Wooster]

Mar 12, 2006 22:58

Title: The Squeeze
Author: worblehat
Genre: Jeeves and Wooster
Pairing: Jeeves/Wooster
Rating: R
Disclaimer: Wodehouse owns these, not me.
Summary: Bertie's had a bit to drink and gives into a different sort of impulse this time. Told from Bertie's point of view.
Notes: Tried to make it as realistic as possible, though it does drift in places. Especially ( Read more... )

genre: slash, pairing: bertie+jeeves, fic, rating: r

Comments 7

sizzleleg March 13 2006, 11:01:05 UTC

Oooh, yey! Jooster R RATED fic! Haven't seen any of this in a long time...

Haven't got time to read it now, but shall do later

♥

Re: Sure! worblehat March 14 2006, 05:07:42 UTC

Hah! Thanks for reading it and leaving such a friendly review. :)

Also, nice icon!

conductrixvitae March 13 2006, 12:00:26 UTC

Very nice.

But can I correct a couple of Britishisms?

Valet not butler, first of all. And Bertie is VERY unlikely to drop his h's in hospital, it being a cockney working class kind of accent.

Also I think that int he last line of the 2nd paragraph there should be a "make" in between "cannot" and "one's".

Sorry to give you lots of criticism. I did like your story. it's sweet and tender and passionate.

If you want a beta to check for Britishisms (or if anyone does) then i'm willing to do it. I have the creds - being British and living in London.

Sure! worblehat March 13 2006, 17:43:05 UTC

Thanks for reading it.

And certainly - I do appreciate the help. This is a new fandom for me to write in so I feel awkward going to any usual betas I have, since they are not too familiar with the background. I'm currently at work but I'll certainly make those changes when I've got a minute, as I would like it to read as flawlessly as possible, you know?

If you wouldn't mind beta-ing for Britishisms, that would indeed be very helpful. I don't write that often, maybe once a week at most, but having someone to help would really be awesome. Thanks for offering!

Where should I send something the next time I get a plot bunny?

Re: Sure! conductrixvitae March 14 2006, 00:04:58 UTC

send to amber dot prophet at yahoo dot co dot uk

Glad to help.

Re: Sure! worblehat March 14 2006, 05:13:52 UTC

All right, I've added you to my gmail contact list for any future ventures into j&f fanfic. I appreciate this. :)

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