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puck/quinn - with heart fit to break (oneshot)

Nov 14, 2009 21:04

Title: With Heart Fit to Break
Pairing/Characters: Puck/Quinn
Summary: It's a pattern she's too exhausted to try breaking.
Rating: PG-13 (language)
Word Count: 2,000
Disclaimer: I own nothing.
Other: This fic travels backwards, showing excerpts of Quinn and Puck's relationship through her having the baby, and then the end is actually where it ( Read more... )

type: fic, ship: puck/quinn, fandom: glee

Comments 21

commen_sense November 15 2009, 03:35:27 UTC

beautiful. youve captured their relationship really well and the way you travelled backwards and then jumped forward again was intersting. loved it. so heartbreaking, this whole piece. I love puck/quinn :)

great job.

perfectlystill November 15 2009, 03:53:23 UTC

Thank you so much for the feedback!

cruiscin_lan November 15 2009, 03:48:36 UTC

This is an excellent one-shot. I love that the timeline is out of order; it heightens the importance of events. Great characterization, too.

As a side note, the title was lovely and it really fits the fic, but I don't know that I would mention where it came from. I was reading the whole thing worried that Puck was going to strangle Quinn with her own hair...

perfectlystill November 15 2009, 03:54:53 UTC

Thanks so much for the comment! I'm glad the timeline being out of order worked. I was a little worried about that.

And oh, wow. I was just trying to credit where I took the title from, lol. I didn't realize anyone would think any more into it. I took it out to avoid anyone else thinking that.

cruiscin_lan November 15 2009, 04:03:40 UTC

It's a good poem, but yeah... I've heard students gasp in class the second time reading it, because Browning's language is so beautiful that it clouds the subject matter the first time around!

musing_11 November 15 2009, 03:56:07 UTC

this is wonderful. i really enjoyed it :)

perfectlystill November 15 2009, 19:41:31 UTC

Thank you! I'm glad you liked it.

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perfectlystill November 15 2009, 19:42:06 UTC

I hope you liked it. I took that out of the heading because I didn't want people to get confused and think Puck strangled Quinn with her hair.

rebelliousrose November 15 2009, 05:35:48 UTC

Really like the time shifts, showing how and why things happened the way they did. You should write one for all the Gleeks in this style.

perfectlystill November 15 2009, 19:42:31 UTC

Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked the way it was structured, I was really worried about doing it that way.