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[improper_me]

I hear your words as they wash over me,
It has been a day in the books,
A year in the making;

No holding me back,
All within my reach;

Shifting
Filtering
Falling
Madly
Blurry

I see you daily now,
We meet in a joy-filled union,
We know each other's songs,
I plunge;

Everything I wanted,
A smile and she breaks me;

Blurry
Madly
Falling
Filtering
Shifting

Her

Comments

[similiesslip]

Sounds like a complicated relationship.

I like how you use such vivid verbs!

[improper_me]

Thank you very much.

[penpusher]

Shifting indeed! Twisting, like a knife to the gut! How could something so good, go so bad so fast?!

[improper_me]

I always think that love truly can be blind.

[mistearyusdiva2]

Am not so much of a poem person. Have always found it difficult to decipher the intended message. But these days, because of idol ,there is a slight shift in my perspective. Somehow I didn't find this one too hard to understand and rather could connect to the emotions without long winding paragraphs and highly descriptive words. Well done.

[improper_me]

Thank you, I appreciate that. I normally only write poetry for myself and so it is odd to switch to write it for others.

[eska818]

Mm. I relate. Love this.

[improper_me]

Thank you. I was hoping these feelings would have an universal appeal :D

[kajel]

I like how the same words now bring different meaning. Nicely done.

[improper_me]

Thank you, I really appreciate it :)