FIC: Do and Do Not (S/R NC-17)

[imochan]

Somewhere, along the way, I turned into someone who actually finishes fics. Clearly, there is a problem here. ;)

Title: Do and Do Not
Author: Imochan
Rating: NC-17
Word Count: 4, 416
Summary: Mmm... betrayal, fresh out of the oven.
Pairing: Sirius/Remus
Notes: Grew out of a drabble that never went anywhere except cynicism. \:D/ I swear to

Comments

[soothsayer87]

*dies* Lovely.

Great chemistry, nice twist and wonderful characterizations.

Assertive!Remus is very interesting to read.

Did we forget to mention the hot S/R sex?...mrow. :D

[imochan]

Ahaha! Thank you! ;)

[anjenue]

*CRIES*

You've got their voices PERFECTLY, Imo, I can hear Remus, taste his uncertainty, and Sirius' anger, and Peter's guilt, and James' cluelessness, and Lily's understanding, and god I'm crying AGAIN because this is the only way their relationship could ever be, which is not.

WAH. RIP MY HEART OUT AND STOMP ON IT WHY DON'T YOU

I feel like Remus when he revealed his heart to Sirius and knew Sirius could crush it just as easily.

[imochan]

*cuddlesandclings!*

Oh, Jules. Like I said, you give the best reviews. ;) I hope you have a wonderful trip if I don't talk to you before you go! We'll miss you terribly like woah on Monday!

(Sorry, reposting to change icon.)

[portkey]

2004-06-19 14:19 (link)
Oh. Hell. I'd take back what I said about cynicism and smut being a great combination because of how much this hurt.. but it hurt in a good way. A good bad way. Or something.

I can't even really formulate much of a response right now.. this.. just.. put me in a really weird place.. but in my mind, this one line just completely captured Sirius for me..

and Sirius’s face looks blank, a little, not quite engaged enough to be thoughtful.

Just.. wow. Damn. Painful. But good. But painful. Owww.

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[portkey]

*boggles* Okay, I underestimated how tired I am, as well. That line should be italicized. And the date stuff shouldn't be there. And I don't know why I even bothered copying/deleting/reposting with different icon. Um. Sorry. I'm really tired and not fully coherent.. the story didn't really help that last bit..

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[imochan]

I don't mind at all, toobaloo, and thanks! Though I hate to see you in pain, so! *offers backrub!* :D

[glitterdemon]

Jesus.

You know when you read something that so completely blows you away that you don't feel capable of stringing a single sentence together let alone the thousands that it deserves? Yeah.

This was so raw that it scraped away my skin and left everything inside of me exposed. When I finished I put my head in my hands and cried, and it hurt to breathe. I am ripped in two by your ability to convey such brutal and terrible emotion with such beautiful prose. I think you've just written the definitive story I didn't know I was looking for about what it was when everything fell apart, and it's this love that they aren't equipped to handle, and. This self-loathing. And how they cannot recognize it in each other for all its intimacy. And god I love them so much and I'm crying again. Fuck.

Yeah, I think I've used up my coherency quota. Just, thank you so much for writing this.

[imochan]

Um, wow. Thank you. Really. You just made writing this monster worthwhile a thousand times over. Thank you, so much.

<333333333333333333

[spillingvelvet]

oh my god. YOU! YOUUUUU!!!!!!

*gaspflailDIE*

obviously, i enjoyed; OBSCENELY HUGE AMOUNTS OF ENJOYMENT WE ARE TALKING ABOUT.

crikey. erm. i love the angst. though, i'm a remus/sirius ship as well, this dynamic is fabulous, and it should be explored more often. lovelovelovelovelove. mmmmmm!

[imochan]

*cuddles!*

;) I promise the angstmongering has been quite satisfied here, lol. I'm so glad you enjoyed it!! <3