Oh! Sorry. Last post about this. Promise. :D
Mostly posting this here so I can find them easily. I do not expect people to want to read these. :D
There are reviews of my excerpt from Amazon "expert editors."
Review #1
What is the strongest aspect of this excerpt?
The entire concept of this excerpt is extremely compelling. I like the myth of Medusa, and to experience a modern day story involving the offspring of Medusa as well as some other mythical creatures in society, would be a great read. the main character was interesting and the writing enjoyable. I also like the character of Alex, his character seems full of potential.
What aspect needs the most work?
While the story was easy to read and flowed well, there were some of the paragraphs can be streamlined. Some transitions between plot changes would be nice. I would also have put the historical/past story of Medusa in the beginning, so that you would wonder what does that story have to do with what comes next, which would be the story of Allie in the train station.
What is your overall opinion of this excerpt?
I enjoyed this excerpt and think it would make for an interesting story. I think that it would be an entertaining young adult novel, especially if the story revolves around the off-spring of Medusa. The main characters were interesting...Allie and Alex. I definitely wanted to read more if for no other reason than to figure out why her father didn't meet her train; why her mother gave her a braclet with Medusa's image on it; what is really going on with the Misha, and why is Alex's condition (aniridia) germaine to the story (I guess without irises maybe she won't be able to turn them to stone). Regardless, I would probably purchase this story, but would like for some of the ideas to be streamlined and organized better. I have read a few young adult novels lately that center around Medusa (Venom maybe), so while the subject matter was not totally original, the underlying story seems to be.
Review #2
What is the strongest aspect of this excerpt?
This is a very engrossing story told in a style that is descriptive and accessible. The idea is interesting and I would definitely like to read more.
What aspect needs the most work?
This could use a final copy edit - I noticed several typos.
What is your overall opinion of this excerpt?
A strong excerpt, well-told, good descriptions and information provided in an accessible way as opposed to infodumps. I would love to read the rest of this story. The only thing that needs work would be a final, polishing edit to catch the rest of the typos and make sure the formatting is consistent.
Originally posted at Dreamwidth but you may comment here at LJ. ♥ There are
comments at Dreamwidth.
There are reviews of my excerpt from Amazon "expert editors."
Review #1
What is the strongest aspect of this excerpt?
The entire concept of this excerpt is extremely compelling. I like the myth of Medusa, and to experience a modern day story involving the offspring of Medusa as well as some other mythical creatures in society, would be a great read. the main character was interesting and the writing enjoyable. I also like the character of Alex, his character seems full of potential.
What aspect needs the most work?
While the story was easy to read and flowed well, there were some of the paragraphs can be streamlined. Some transitions between plot changes would be nice. I would also have put the historical/past story of Medusa in the beginning, so that you would wonder what does that story have to do with what comes next, which would be the story of Allie in the train station.
What is your overall opinion of this excerpt?
I enjoyed this excerpt and think it would make for an interesting story. I think that it would be an entertaining young adult novel, especially if the story revolves around the off-spring of Medusa. The main characters were interesting...Allie and Alex. I definitely wanted to read more if for no other reason than to figure out why her father didn't meet her train; why her mother gave her a braclet with Medusa's image on it; what is really going on with the Misha, and why is Alex's condition (aniridia) germaine to the story (I guess without irises maybe she won't be able to turn them to stone). Regardless, I would probably purchase this story, but would like for some of the ideas to be streamlined and organized better. I have read a few young adult novels lately that center around Medusa (Venom maybe), so while the subject matter was not totally original, the underlying story seems to be.
Review #2
What is the strongest aspect of this excerpt?
This is a very engrossing story told in a style that is descriptive and accessible. The idea is interesting and I would definitely like to read more.
What aspect needs the most work?
This could use a final copy edit - I noticed several typos.
What is your overall opinion of this excerpt?
A strong excerpt, well-told, good descriptions and information provided in an accessible way as opposed to infodumps. I would love to read the rest of this story. The only thing that needs work would be a final, polishing edit to catch the rest of the typos and make sure the formatting is consistent.
Originally posted at Dreamwidth but you may comment here at LJ. ♥ There are
comments at Dreamwidth.