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[idiosyncreant]

So, I've just realized my writer's fantasy.
Okay, so the most potent one at this moment: it's a publishing-*unrelated fantasy.

To have someone whose opinion I respect sit down, and read through all of my short stories and tell me which ones are any good.
  I know. Beggarly. But there it is. The stuff of my dreams.

Since it's Thursday, and I don't know

Comments

[fabricalchemist]

Ughhhhhhhhhhhh whyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy T_T

[idiosyncreant]

I'd verbalize my feelings the same way, but more about why I ever posted this, and also about why I have two comments already when it hasn't been 30 seconds, and I want to tear it down but that would be cheating now some people have seen it.

Why are *you* saying it, though?

[fabricalchemist]

NO NO BACKSIES YOU SHYSTER

It's just a frussssstrating story to read. They don't get together, even though she likes him. Were they to get together, obviously he would be no good for her and it wouldn't last. BLEH! I don't like the stories where the girl goes off with the guy she doesn't love for the sake of "sensibility".

Personal preference, however.

Maybe I've read too much Mervyn Peake, but how about more description? I kind of had the cheatsheet from when we talked on Facebook, but otherwise there's really no way to tell what time period (80's? Modern? Far-flung future?). I am addicted to adjectives, though, so I'll stop twitching like a heroin addict on your street corner.

[idiosyncreant]

Heh. Backsies, what a funny word to hear in this context.

I need to fix that you had the impression she didn't love her husband. It's supposed to be later--and she is in love with him. I may be just a tad reactionary to all the manga with BAAAAD relationships (i.e.: abusive, or completely problematic), so quite a few stories I've been working with have this theme of not going with the forceful one.

I think this needs to be less short, and with description, I'd also add more of his own "Rake" cynicism of the world. (Heyer reactionism, too?) It's supposed to be genuinely happy for him. If not pleasurable.

[bat_cheva]

Is this fanfiction? I do not know the show. Interesting story. :)

[idiosyncreant]

...no, not really.

It's a take on the Ironman concept. I think posting it is a mistake, though...

[bat_cheva]

I wouldn't say that.

[idiosyncreant]

GAH.

[rosaleeluann]

Thanks for posting it. I like it alot:-)

Though I had to read this line a couple times in order to actually understand what he was saying:

“I owe nothing to a girl who would sleep with you, though she knew I loved her, and then offer me the perfect job by running away from him.”

Maybe re-word or something?

[idiosyncreant]

Yeah, will do. ^-^ Thanks!

[idiosyncreant]

Actually, the thing is that is two different editions of a sentence spliced. Badly.

So definitely fixing is on the horizon.

[idiosyncreant]

I fixed that, along with many other things. Thanks!

[ext_104100]

Ooh. I like this.

I read it backwards, of course, because the ending is much more interesting than the beginning, but I don't think I lost much for comprehension that way.

I loved: “She was too smart to be lured by either of us ... Men who wanted her only after isolation together had done its trick.”

That feels very real and understandable to me. Though it's slightly alarming that a guy makes the conclusion, I'm glad it's in there.

Dude, I so wish I could relate to a heroine going through life being perfectly chaste but leaving a string of embittered lovers in her wake. *^_^*

[idiosyncreant]

Heh.

We write our fantasies, huh? Though I doubt Marissa would see it that way, since the one didn't mind much, and the other probably never manned up to asking her right out...that is, however, immaterial.

I think it's in character for Gene to make the observation--he's not very shy about his motives, as far as I can see. But if it's startling in a good way, I'm happy.