[exo] flightless angels and teasing stars

[baekmebacon]

title: flightless angels and teasing stars
pairing: kai/kris (luhan/sehun)
word count: 2,771 words
rating: pg13
summary: Kris smiles and promises better tomorrows for Kim Jongin, but never for himself.
a/n: sCREAMS. what have i done. i tried to squeeze in another plot in this prompt. but no, it’s horrible. kris didn’t even die. ugggghhhh. (please

Comments

[canadaphile]

This was very good. It hurt, but then it was hopeful, so the pain isn't as bad. It was a poetic sort of pain, though, mixed with the note that "Hey, life sucks. The people you know can make it suck more, but they can also make it suck less."

I liked the flashback/fast-forward movement. If it was linear, I don't think it would have been as powerful.

Almost disappointed that no one died, not gonna lie. I think it would have hurt less.

Kris' mom saying his an angel really stabbed my heart. All children should be angels to their parents. Obviously, that's not always the case.

I'm curious about your header, though. It says KrisBaek. . . Mistype?

=^..^=~

[baekmebacon]

i am not very good with linear type of stories tbh, it ends up kind of boring if one knew everything from the very beginning.

i planned on killing kris tho. that's the whole point of every angst fic i write. but i don't know, i wanted a twist of some sort. I kind of want people to guess if I'm going to kill someone or not and I need to brush up on writing happy endings. :DD

jongin is happy that kris didn't die, but yeah, they're still going to suffer, e\everyone does.

and ooooooooohhhhh myyyyyy goooddddd. thank you, didn't notice it TTATT thank you again for reading~!

[canadaphile]

It depends on how you're writing. A limited style will keep the reader knowing only as much as the protagonist, typically, which may not be much at all. (Like Attack on Titan; I find that dragging because we know, like, nothing of what's going on, just like the characters.)

If he saved Jongin and killed himself, I don't think it would have felt like a satisfying ending, especially after all that talk. Not all stories have to have a feel-good ending, though. Happy endings are kind of overrated and unrealistic, in my opinion. I'm just a really negative person, though. unu Everybody suffering sounds better than sunshine and rainbows and smiles all over.

THAT would have been a twist. Jongin throughout the story, but it's actually Baekhyun; Kris is just hallucinating because he doesn't want him to die and puts an image of some kid in his place.

[baekmebacon]

i hate you. damn you and your soul you just gave me a wonderful beautifur prompt and i am weeping from both joy and agony because i need to write a part two or something. i love youuuuuuu.

isokay if you are pessimistic that puts us on the same ground(?????????) and i agree that suffering sounds better because it's something sort of "normal" or "usual" in our lives and a speck of fluff and rainbow vomit.

BUT THE PROMPT I FILLED KIND OF LIMITED ME???? I DIDNT THINK OF IT THAT WAY. *hugs you* don't let me go and let me wail in your arms~~~ (/TTATT)/

[canadaphile]

ALLOW ME TO OPEN YOUR MIND TO THE POSSIBILITIES.