I really enjoyed this story! *beams* I loved the dialogue and the character interaction and the plot you set up. I was very fond of the lines that involved chickens. *grin*
Oh, wow. This story is really lovely. I adore how much of the world you managed to convey in this story, for all that it's fairly short. The images of it are so excellent- the heat of the beginning, and then the rain at the end. I really liked the characters- Yolan and Edwin seemed like such a cool contrast to each other- and the opening scene, with the neighbors watching the dead chicken, was entirely awesome. In general, just a great story.
Thank you. The shortness was caused by my lack of time--that's also why the first scene is more substantial than the last. But it was fun writing this story--especially the chicken. ^^
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Thanks! I wanted to include a scene with a headless chicken, but it didn't fit.
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-Hacy
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Favorite throwaway detail: tribe leaders being reduced to a bridge club. That's priceless.
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