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[relsqui]

Just one more post, then I'll shut up for now.
Have any seen erotic stories done
completely in five iamb lines? Allow
me time, if not, and I will be the one. ; )

Comments

E tu, risqué?

[level_head]

I chuckled when "Panchronos" asked for time.
You have, it seems, all there is in the world.
Ah, this reminds me of a different rhyme
About the time James Bond DID get the girl.

When Satchmo sang his "We Have All The Time..."
And Bond held bleeding Tracy in his arms;
His happiness the victim of a crime--
His new wife's death by Blofeld's firearms.

But back to you, and your risqué intent:
Be careful; search for feeling, not for porn
It's hard to make this novel, and invent
Some way to duck a tendency to scorn.

You clearly have the writing skills in hand
And if you really try, I think you'll rock.
Too many are "mechanics with a gland"
And wind up writing 1950's schlock.

===|==============/ Level Head

Re: E tu, risqué?

[relsqui]

Good point about the time. I saw it not. ; )
I hope your confidence is not in vain.
I've found nothing IP (though I've not sought).
It's true, some stuff's so bad it causes pain!

I have, I must admit, twice tried my hand
at such "risqué"-type creativity.
It's not that great--more drafts were needed, and
I haven't much experience, you see.